Do Ratmen Dream of the Elven Sacred Tree?

The pace is too slow. I saw Twenty Zhang was still in class.

Rat blood. . In other words, there are rat people in our ancestors, and the protagonist looks like a human so he will not be discriminated against. Does this mean that there is indeed something wrong with the rat people? The picture is so beautiful that I can't imagine it. It's a rat-sucking overlord.

It's too late, go to bed first, and comment tomorrow I've probably finished reading it, and I'll comment on it. The book is a slow-burning book, with relatively gentle ups and downs, and not too toxic. The only problem I think is that the conflict between the protagonist's identity and the background of this world is not handled well. The identity of the protagonist, in my opinion, is similar to the defeated Song people in the Yuan Dynasty. The reasons are as follows: first of all, humans should be in the status of Han people in this elven country, and they are all conquered. Secondly, the protagonist's bloodline is a lower-level rat man, so he should be a Song person. In this world background, logically speaking, the protagonist should be oppressed, and his emotions should be resistance and struggle. The problem arises here. The protagonist's emotions are too bland. For example, in the war sacrifice section, when he hates the protagonist's rat-human bloodline, he hits the protagonist and vomits blood. The protagonist's reaction includes psychology. There is not much reaction, as if he has accepted his fate and is used to it. This is not good. You can take the uprising route, the resistance route, and apply the scenes of the Yuan Dynasty and Song people, which may be more comfortable. Summary evaluation, a novel novel, a slow-burning novel without too much poison in the plot, Liang Cao + Bar

Thank you for reading this book, it has given me a lot of motivation. This is my first time writing a book. I tried to pitch for the title but never signed a contract. The author is very worried. There must be many problems and shortcomings. Thank you and welcome your corrections and criticisms. You are welcome to speak freely here. This book has not been included in the first round of recommendations. There have been no "new books added to the database" recommendations since May 2, so the data will be bad. There may not be any recommendations until 100,000 words. The original poster will keep writing and will definitely write the story he wants completely. Praise to Shi Qi!

The author's reply feels like a robot, very human-machine, maybe because he is afraid of offending people, and the protagonist is also very human-machine, with no mood swings, and he is still a time traveler. This leads to the fact that although the author's reply is very positive, the reply is too human, and there is almost no emotion in the writing, so the book's perception is very poor The writing style is still there, I think I have written something else before The flow level is okay The story is probably that the rat people were discriminated against by the outside world and grew up under the care of the Church of the God of Death, and finally became the leader of the Church of the God of Death, the favored one of God? From God? Lord God? Path

Alas, I feel like rat people are the worst things in western fantasy. If you carry this label, it will give the protagonist the feeling that the protagonist is inherently inferior. The b-squares are all over the place, which ruins the first impression. If you have good grades, you can still take a look, otherwise you will ignore it 😅

There are so many interactions between authors and readers, but this is definitely something I have seen. The author with the lowest profile.

I think the protagonist's situation is too depressing at the beginning. He is sent from a defeated country to a victorious country to work as a servant. The discrimination against rat people is so serious, and everyone can directly tell from the protagonist's face that the protagonist is a rat man. How is this different from the slave tattoo on the face in the beginning and being born in a country with serious class discrimination. Some people bully the protagonist, and some people help the protagonist, so there is no way to go against the whole environment. I can only accept it. The protagonist's parents are still alive, so he can't escape. The whole thing seems very powerless and depressing. Most people want to watch Western fantasy movies in a relaxing way. If they can't enjoy it, it will be difficult.

Don't throw out the gold finger panels all the time. Just write down which value has changed.

What is the specific image of the Rat Man in this novel? Is it Skaven? I feel that the somewhat depressing style of the introduction is not like a crazy guy like Skaven, but if we don't follow the path of stimulating the senses like Skaven, then the identity image of Skaven itself will be very discouraging to readers, right? Why did the author choose the very unflattering image of the Rat Man when opening the book?

The Rat Man must be dreaming about the Bread Tree, right?

Thoughts after reading: There is almost no excitement, the pace is very slow, the plug-ins are of little use, the protagonist has a low status, and he often encounters supporting characters who can kick the protagonist to death. A novel identified as a slow-burning, slightly sadistic novel.

This volume either reduces the objective description of NPC characters, or switches to a subjective description from the protagonist's perspective. The former can highlight the key points of the writing, while the latter can become a travelogue style that is subjective and interspersed with objectivity. The body feeling will be better. You need to think carefully about where the rhythm can be slow, to foreshadow, to profile, and where the rhythm should be fast, to collide and compete. Instead of writing everywhere, you are not writing prose when it is lumped into a ball. Moreover, prose also needs to be dispersed in form and spirit. You didn't make an outline, did you?

After being put on the shelves, do you want to let the protagonist suffer? Although your grades are already very bad, it is still a bit awkward to immediately enter the depression after being put on the shelves. I can't stand it. Please write more once it's on the shelves. It's so urgent. Use your strength and bring the climax quickly. Then I just hope that the outcome of the demon clan incident that is obvious and coming soon will not be too tragic, and that several important figures in the early stage will not be killed. . Finally, I would like to give you some tips on writing. Regarding the perspective switching, sometimes the cutting is too fast, the line of ellipses used as the dividing line is a bit too short, and the dividing effect is a bit weak. I can feel that you like to leave blank space, and then use ellipsis to divide it to directly cut the angle of view. It has the feeling of cutting shots in a movie, but you use it a bit too much. More often, you can still make a connection before and after cutting shots. To be specific, for example Chapter 50, on the carriage. At the beginning, you write that Fan Ning motioned for the male protagonist to leave together. Then you use a line of ellipses to fast forward the time and start writing the conversation between the two in the car. On the one hand, there is actually no need to use ellipses here to express a switching of perspectives. The male protagonist gets on the carriage directly, and then the scene outside moves backwards. Sister Fan Ning said blah blah. It is a bit redundant to cut the perspective; On the other hand, it really needs to be cut. Okay, then if you change the perspective here, I guess it can interrupt the plot and guide readers to guess what Fan Ning is going to say. Then it is obvious that the one line of ellipses here is too short and does not act as a buffer for the readers to think about it. So it is a simple suggestion, just change it to three lines of ellipses. Another example Chapter 54, Promotion, look at the perspective switching in this chapter, time fast forwarded several times, first writing the appointment letter, then what the male protagonist did during the holiday, then the male protagonist arrived at the school to take up a job one day early, and then before One line is still talking to Anna, the next line is the bishop coming to tell the male protagonist that the other priests are not willing to come, then the previous line is still talking to Victor, the next line is the beginning of school, the male protagonist is observing the children going to school, and then the speed of light accelerates to the male protagonist starting to teach. Every switch ends with a line of ellipsis, which is too hasty. I can understand that the purpose here is to abbreviate and advance the plot, but you switch so quickly, but it is just a line of ellipses, and there is no connection before and after the ellipsis. Many of them are what I said before, deliberately leaving blanks, not describing the protagonist's reaction, and cutting directly to the scene (for example, not describing the hero's reaction to Victor telling Victor that the two teachers are not coming). It is indeed a bit hasty and abrupt, and it will look a bit messy. Either you add some connections, or merge some content, don't split it, or there are 3 lines of ellipses. (In fact, the solution is similar to the previous example) Okay, so much about this problem. In fact, the simplest way is to use 3 lines or even more fancy separators to separate the symbols. The more advanced one is to add connecting statements. In short, it is to make your text more readable. After all, it is an online text. If you leave blank spaces and jump around so quickly, it will affect the reading experience. Finally, apart from this small problem, there are still some problems with the rhythm of your plot, which is a bit abstract. On the one hand, as mentioned before, it is a bit dull and a bit frustrating. Although the plot is moving forward, it feels like it lacks climax and change. It feels like farming has been developing for a long time, so let's quickly write about the climax. It's hard to talk about other aspects. In short, there is still a slight problem with the rhythm of the plot, but it's hard to explain, it's very abstract. However, the overall plot framework is still very interesting, which made me stay up late again. . . Come on, update quickly, I want to see this new bishop get into trouble, remember to use less swords. In addition, Miss Ruo should be a single female protagonist, the writing is really good. However, I hope to arrange extraordinary abilities for Miss Ruo in the future? It can't be just a vase, right? (Probably not to directly give Miss Ruo a knife in the demon incident...) However, considering that the presence of extraordinary abilities in this book has not been very strong, I don't know how you arranged it, but I feel that I still need to write more about this aspect. It feels like it lacks some combat elements, is a bit too routine, and even a bit watery, but as the plot continues to advance, it's still not watery.

After watching it for a long time, the protagonist was in a precarious situation and felt that he would be demoted to the lowest class of refugees at any time. 1: In a random meeting, a random person came and attacked the protagonist's bloodline, and then the protagonist lost his job. 2: The protagonist's thigh was promoted and transferred away. I asked the protagonist if he would follow, but the protagonist refused. 3: The protagonist is a citizen of country A, working in country B, and then AB is about to go to war, and the protagonist still has that awkward personality, tsk. 4: The protagonist's behavior, in the previous 123 environment, I think a normal person should be quite anxious, and then the protagonist's behavior is to continue to work as a teacher in a rural primary school.

It's slow-paced and simple, but then again, it's much better than the daily guide.

It starts with a classic writing style. It is rare to have a protagonist with both parents. The warm relationship is so beautiful. But through the foreshadowing, we can see that great changes are about to happen. Now the author has written a warm daily life, maybe the mouse man, and the last happy time.

The writing style is very bland and slow, and Goldfinger is more about financial lending. After thinking about it for a long time, I didn't expect the writing style to be similar. The author's writing and plot control are okay, but the characters are a bit human-like, so it's pretty good for a test writer.

Come on, it looks good. It's my type😆

Dear reader, thank you very much for reading this book. Anything you say in this post, including suggestions, chats or complaints, etc., I can read and reply to. Anyone is welcome to speak, thanks and best wishes.

It's rare to see a protagonist with some positive energy

One chapter is not finished, it is best to finish it before posting. This is important. Every time I send it out without finishing it, it kills my desire to read

I originally followed it every day, but since it was being revised, I was too lazy to open it within a few days. There are already 18 chapters that I have been too lazy to read... I really don't like criticizing the author like this, but it really affects my willingness to read. It's like a child herding sheep. Every day it says it has been updated, and it is being revised again. Over time, everyone will be too lazy to click on it when they see the update, right?

After reading the introduction, the reviews said it was pretty good, but the pace was too bland. After reading a few chapters, I felt that part of the reason was that the content was too confusing and I should make appropriate choices. Taking employee points in exchange for canteen food as an example. After two conversations about points in exchange for food (independent acquisition and professor guarantee), the description of purchasing food was clear enough, but the next time it appeared, it also described what the protagonist bought with points. In fact, it can be solved in one sentence. For example, the protagonist uses points as usual. . . In this way, it can still complete the function of revealing that the employee certificate has been issued, and at the same time, it also increases the information density and puts the center on the main line of the plot. You can even not write it at all, but briefly mention it after a while.

This is being revised frequently. In fact, it also affects the experience. I originally thought it would be updated, but it turned out that it was not updated.

Is this thing dead behind?

I really read it in one sitting, the writing is very exciting~ But I still have a question, no matter which country has a pure-blooded human race, how can they establish historical origins and call each other "the devil world"? The "Devil Realm" is also invading there. The Demon Realm wants to cross the empire and go to the Holy Kingdom to cause destruction. Isn't it a bit too far? What is the strategic goal? It would be better if there was a world map

I really like the characterization of the characters in this book. Some characters are indeed very interesting, but there are indeed big problems with the data. There are various deliberate suppressions on the protagonists. It may be the first time I write a book, and I am afraid that I cannot control the rhythm, but deliberate suppression will reflect the inconsistencies in the setting, which are becoming more and more obvious!

It's a bit like a traditional novel, very good and enjoyable

1. So far, the protagonist has maintained the mental state of a young child. It's a bit uncomfortable for an adult to watch. After all, the original intention of reading the novel was not to read fairy tales or children's books like Harry Potter. 2 The protagonist received too much help, but most of the explanations given in the story were well-intentioned. The protagonist also helps others a lot. The pure confrontation between good and evil seems a bit different in online articles.