Guangling Period

You clearly wrote it from a third-person perspective, right? But I feel that there are several directions that are not third person. Well, it is a bit difficult to understand. Take a look at the picture I posted. My first person is very limited to everything I see, know, and get, so I can write with a lot of feelings and emotions. And yours feels a bit like the second person to me. The frame is fixed on a character, and then the development and everything of this character is seen from the perspective of a ghost, but the feeling behind it cannot be seen. Obviously the second person can transcend the perspective of the protagonist and know who is behind him, but it is just a personal problem for me. Obviously the second person can also use the omniscient and omnipotent perspective of the third person to describe the protagonist's surroundings. And if the technology is better, you can use pseudo-second-person perspective, which can take into account the first-person, third-person, and second-person perspective. So what kind of story do you want to write? You have to figure this out yourself. I have become trapped in the eyes of this character, and this is what I want to write. How does he feel inside, what are his emotions like? Why he did this is what I want to write about. I also took a quick look at your current main advancement, and it feels like a god directing a character, and it feels like a bad command. In short, do you want to think more about why you are writing and what kind of story you are writing for? Just like my character, it has been decided for him. He has no name, past and future. This is a very blank existence. So I have a lot of room to play with his personality in the story. For example, if he learns something, he can apply it in the next second. For example, if he sees something, he will think of how to apply it in the next second. These are all spaces that I can use, but the core shortcoming is that it is difficult to describe a city from a God's perspective. Know what this place is like from a God's perspective. So I focus on describing the inner feelings of the protagonist, and then feed back this feeling to the readers. If you can't find your problem, why not take a small book or a small sticker and write down the problem, and then stick it on your desk or wall, read it every day and then write it down. One day in the future, you can put a new sticker on it, saying that you have solved it, and then write a more appropriate solution. In this way, you can see your own growth in a way that is visible and direct like a growth task. Of course I rely on the book I wrote. I know where the writing is not good in the book, and there are many places I can't see. But I will use this to feed myself back and improve my skills to a higher level, that is, constantly falling into the internal friction of an anxiety disorder, and then solving the problem. Although it is a bit extreme, you can also see that although the growth is not rapid, it is pretty good, right? So I also recommend that you use this kind of small stickers or a record book to record your growth process and so-called adventure gains. Picture Bar.