Magical Girls Can Transform, but They Can't Be Perverts

Dear Chars, the girl on the cover is called Senya Luluka. She is not your loli mother. She is just a child, a JK, who likes to eat ice cream and works as an intern in the Phantom Thieves. She is a Pretty Cure. Char, please don't lose your mind😤

1. Congratulations on the completion of The Abnormal Demon. Forgive me for calling this book The Abnormal Demon. Brothers and sisters, you've finished reading. I finally finished reading this book "Magical Girls Can Transform, But Can't Be Perverted", and it was really a big deal (Tokugawa-kun, I don't have to fight anymore). First of all, I have to give the author a round of applause (oh, so much). I respect you for being a man and at least finishing this book without eunuchs. This is already considered a rare "medal of honor" in the online literary world where eunuchs are everywhere and authors cut books faster than vegetables. But congratulations, congratulations. The problems exposed in this book are simply more confusing than the protagonist's thought palace when I played "Disco Elysium", and more heart-wrenching than having a card ripped out due to a teammate's first aid punch when running in a group. This book gave me the feeling, from beginning to end, of a person sitting in front of a computer, with a great idea, an explosive start, and a series of climaxes that he thought were particularly "cool" in his mind, and then he eagerly started writing. He didn't write an outline, or rather, his outline was just a few pages of scratch paper filled with keywords. After finishing writing, I can even picture the author breathing a sigh of relief (in fact, I also breathed a sigh of relief, finally finishing it!), Looking at the hundreds of thousands of words of the manuscript, and saying with satisfaction: "OK, my task is completed, let's start!" This feeling is like a passionate but disorganized game host. He designed a map with amazing details, many traps, and cool monsters, but forgot to design reasonable motivations and story lines for the player characters. 2. Is this the fate of a piece of writing? After the gimmick goes out, the story comes to an end. The most fascinating part of this book is the beginning. It was a quick moment of love, a little surprising and even a little curious. A 24-year-old handsome boy who is 1.83 Meters tall (but your name is Luo Li, isn't it a bit abstract? Also, 24 years old is a student), woke up and found that he had traveled to a world with "titles" and "disasters", and his title was Mahou Soju. This sense of contrast, comedy and crisis is full of excitement. As soon as I saw the beginning, I thought, "I'll go, this young man." The author has indeed done this. The previous nearly twenty chapters are all about the identity of this "man turned into a magical girl". From the fear of being regarded as a pervert, to using this identity to fight back, to forming my own small group (alas, I was isolated by the small group), this plot is as smooth as Dove chocolate, so refreshing and dense. This is also the reason why I got into the trap in the first place. But here's the problem. This core "idea" is like a tube of toothpaste that is almost empty. After about thirty chapters, it deflates. When the protagonist walked out of that shabby rental house and officially became "Magical Girl Yuri" (Luluka's mother was right), the most attractive "counter-intuitive" label lost its impact. What then? What happened to your kidney? The narrative driving force of the story suddenly slipped from the tense "identity disguise and self-identification" to the most boring and low-level "fighting, upgrading, and defeating new monsters." It feels like you excitedly go to eat a newly opened Yunnan mushroom hotpot. The first few bites are so delicious that your eyebrows almost fall off, but then the boss tells you that the mushrooms are gone and we will start serving the bullfrog in a dry pot (actually, I prefer to eat bullfrog). What can I do? Everyone has sat down, and now that I have left, what should I eat? Yes, what should I eat? Since I have come, I can only bite the bullet and eat. This is like playing "Cyberpunk 2077". What was advertised at the beginning was an immersive plot and a high degree of freedom of choice, but in the end, it turned into a linear shooting game with a gun (actually it is not the case, the plot design of 2077 is still very good, I can only say that it is worthy of being a wizard's CD). How should I write it normally? Look at "Puella Magi Madoka Magica", it starts with a lot of gimmicks, and its cute style hides murderous intent. But the great thing about Laoxu is that he didn't rest on his laurels with the "Dark Magical Girl" gimmick, but used this gimmick to draw out deeper things: the price of making a wish, the end of the law of cause and effect, Kyubey's game, the cruel operation of the witch system, and Tomoe Mami's head (alas, the Headless Senpai Strange Story). This is advanced gameplay. Or take a look at "Lord of the Mysteries". "Travel + Resistance" is also a gimmick, but Squid uses this gimmick to build a complete world view and sequence system, allowing readers to maintain a sense of excitement while exploring the unknown. Going back to this book, the author obviously didn't think about what the "Lights and Sparks Sea" and the "Great Secret Realm" were, so he was in a hurry to use up the gimmicks and start the infinite brawl mode. (Fighting, cool!) 2. The number of your characters is modern, but your design is quite ancient. Who are you? How many magical girls are there in this book? I counted on my fingers: the protagonist Youli (Luo Li), Wu Menglian (Ningshuang), Zhou Zhiwei (Zhifeng), Hua Zianai (Ni Ge), Li Siyuan (Nayue), Zeng Niya (Guangli), this is the protagonist group. Then the villains were cleared of Han Feiying, Sunflower, and Hyacinthus, followed by Hengxin and Yingge, not counting the dead Wild Rose. There are all kinds of them, adding up to about ten. Okay, okay, this is to collect 12 spells to resurrect the Holy Lord. Moreover, the magical girl names of these characters are all Huacaofengyue, such as Ningshuang, Zhifeng, Sunflower, and Hanfeiying. They sound quite literary, but after reading the whole book, can you clearly recall their personality differences? I can't do it anyway. Moreover, the most terrible thing is that the magical girl has a dual identity, she is both a human and a magical girl. This determines that the author must devote more pen and energy to describing the conflict and cognition of the two identities. It is necessary to write about the conflict between the identities of humans and magical girls, especially the protagonist Luo Li (Youli), because he is a male magical girl. Except for the protagonist You Li, and Wu Menglian, who left an impression on me in the early stage because of his troublesome "demon fixing" game, my impression of the other characters is just a bunch of labels fighting. This one has the wind attribute, that one has the ice attribute, this one is the mine-type licking dog, that one is the arrogant senior, this one is the aunt, that one is the junior, this one is a mother's party, and that one is the loyal dog of the two. Gone! Their joys, sorrows, joys, and past experiences (don't you really remember all the past events? Alas, what a pair of fateful couple) and why they want to be magical girls (except for Wu Mengli's "I want to cure your mental internal friction" type of reason) are all briefly mentioned, or even not mentioned directly. They are the puppets written by the author to advance the plot. Once the plot of this mission is over, they will go offline or wait in the next scene, without any souls of their own. "Magical Girl Nanoha" also has multiple characters, but through a large number of daily interactions and theatrical versions, the personality and growth arc of each character are clearly explained. Even the delicate emotional changes between Nanoha and Feit are convincing (you even have a daughter, how can you not be convinced?). As for this book, towards the end, the protagonist team plus the whitewash team, I feel that they can gather several tables of mahjong, and even have enough people to form several teams to compete in the "World of Warships" Neptune Tournament, but I can't even match the names and faces. 3. There is no such person in the tag that is full of comedy effects. This question is the most abstract part of the book. In the opening chapter, the changing "title" above each person's head, representing identity and tendency, is the narrative core of the entire story in the early stages. The title of "Magical Girl" for the protagonist Luo Li (loli, homophone, deducting money) is both his golden finger and his life-saving talisman. In the early stages, we saw how Luo Li used the credibility of his title to win over Wu Mengli and intimidate those officials. He even relied on changes in titles (such as from "Silver Technician" to "Gold Medal Technician") to induce and intimidate others and promote the development of the plot. It can be said that most of the conflicts in the first forty chapters revolve around the "title" setting. It is simply a stand-in for "Jojo" and the telekinesis ability in "Hunter" (but I don't like Hunters and I don't think it looks good). It is a setting that can be played with. However, when the story entered the middle and late stages, this setting seemed to be suddenly forgotten by the author. It was only pulled out towards the end to make a "magical girl god" gimmick for the protagonist. This feeling is really wonderful, just like Xiao Yan was refining medicine in "Fighter", and suddenly took out a Poké Ball and said, Yao Lao, I don't want to practice anymore, strange fire and other things are too weak, I want to become a Pokémon Master. The setting of this "title" is like the world line change rate detector that runs throughout "Steins; Gate". It is the cornerstone of the entire story and the key to logical consistency. Isn't it really a pity to throw away such an important thing? Moreover, it also caused the second half of the plot to lose the most basic logical support. Why can the protagonist win? Because she is strong. Why can she subdue these men? Because she is stronger. (Enough! Domineering enough! Strong enough!) Everything has returned to the simplest numerical competition of combat power, and the immersive and attractive features brought by the "world view" in the early stage have completely disappeared. 4. Eat the core, is this still a magical girl? Where did you come from? I have to complain about this "core" setting. In the plot, in the laboratory, when a magical girl dies, her heart will become a "heart core" that can enhance the power of other magical girls. In order to fight against the witch, the protagonist even needs to actively dig out and "eat" the cores of other magical girls. Wow, this picture is so beautiful that I dare not look at it. Author, tell me, is this cool? Handsome? Do you feel like a "magical girl"? Isn't this the same dark plot in "Demon Slayer: Kimetsu no Yaiba" where ghosts eat people and people eat ghosts? And it's even more disgusting than Demon Slayer. In Demon Slayer, turning into a ghost is forced (or maybe active), and at least there is humanistic care (?) In it. This directly becomes a necessary nutrient for the growth of magical girls, and becomes a decision-making dilemma of "you can't win if you don't eat it." This completely goes against the underlying logic of the "magical girl" genre. What is a magical girl? It is love and hope, friendship and bond, and "the heart that believes is your magic". That's good for you, it directly turned into "the heart of plunder is your strength". This feels like when you watch "Precure", instead of using their power to purify the enemy and influence the villain, they chop the villain into pieces, take out a "dark core" and eat it themselves to upgrade. This is simply a blasphemy against the word "magical girl". I understand that the author wanted to write something dark and delve into the setting, but this is completely wrong. Take a look at "War Princess's Song". Although it relies on holy relics, blood, and singing to fight, and the system is also very cruel, the core is still protection, song, and bond. There is no mention of killing teammates and eating their hearts to upgrade! (Wait a minute, Mitsumi's eldest brother is a knight, and it turns out to be the world view of Kamen Rider. That's okay, but who can help me make up for the "henshin!" I lack?) 5. I haven't understood the setting of the Sea of ​​Lights and Mars until now. This is definitely one of the biggest failings of this book. From the middle of the story, almost all the grand narratives, all the protagonist's cheating, and all the enemy's conspiracies revolve around this "Sea of ​​Lights and Sparks". The protagonist wants to protect it, and the villain wants to pollute it. It is the source and final destination of all magical girls' power. But! But! But! From beginning to end, the author never gave a clear, intuitive explanation that could allow readers to form a picture in their minds. Sometimes it is called a "domain", sometimes it is the "source of power", and sometimes it is the "seabed", where people can be fished, people can sink, and a throne can be seen. As an ordinary reader, I can only try my best to figure out: What is this? Is it the root of Fate? Is it the egg of Lilith in EVA? Is it the reverse world in "Pokémon"? There is no clear anchor point at all. (Mom! I can't tell, I really can't tell!) This is like running a Cthulhu running group. KP keeps telling you that this ancient god is very evil, His power is very powerful, and He is dominating the entire world. But if you ask KP what He looks like, what weaknesses he has, and how he was sealed, KP will only tell you mysteriously: "You don't need to know, you just need to experience this 'indescribable' terror." That's indescribable bullshit! CLLL! In novels and running groups, "indescribable" is a staged description of a powerful enemy, and you must eventually land on it. You can't ask readers to guess the whole story and then tell you in the end that they were both right and wrong. (Both are possible, this is the answer) This is a typical "setting without explanation, readers rely on their imagination". Take a look at how "Puella Magi Madoka Magica" is made. Their setting of "witches" is logically self-consistent (a magical girl system created by Kyubey using a black box mechanism to combat the increase in entropy). Not only is the painting style unique, but each witch has its own "enchantment" and "inner world". The pictures will shock you directly, and you can intuitively understand the composition and principles of that world. 6. The setting of remembering an untimely death: tag. The growth of the protagonist Luo Li (Youli) in the early stage is clear. Through "contact" with Mahou Shochu (including an aunt in her 30s), he copied other people's abilities to change his "title" and "six dimensions" (is it you? Kakashi.). Growing from 6F to having S level is a very clear RPG-style growth line. Readers can intuitively see "Wow, he has become stronger!" (Is this sentence suspicious of awesome reading?). But when the "title" display panel became dispensable in the later stages and became purely for showing off and shouting slogans, the protagonist's growth lost its specific scale. He became stronger because the author needed him to defeat a more powerful BOSS. He cheated because the climax of the plot required him to do so. His improvement became a "storyteller" Long Aotian-style description of "he felt the power surge in his body", instead of the early step-by-step "he copied the ability of some unlucky guy again". This feels like in "The Witcher 3". Geralt suddenly stopped relying on swordsmanship and sigils to fight monsters. He started to glow with green light and turned into a green-skinned orc, shouting: "To mess with Brother Mao!" He used the "power of my thinking" to stop the Wild Hunt. It was extremely ridiculous and very ugly.

People scold Qiubey, but everyone is not as good as Qiubey. After all, they have given me wages (wish) and transcendence. There are too many people in the world to support Kyubey. Haiti, the Middle East, Myanmar... And the goal is to save the universe. The only mistake is to find underage children. This conflicts with the Chinese moral values. Our ancestors fought life and death, and I acted like a cow and a horse, wasn't it just for the future of a child... At first, I felt that Kyubey was really an alien, and he really didn't regard the earthlings as human beings. Now I have never seen anyone treat magical girls as human beings: Not only did they look at magical girls in vain, but they also felt that they were dangerous and needed to be controlled, and some kind of XX bureau was set up. I have never seen a magical girl-themed person pay a salary, let alone a pension after sacrifice. On the contrary, there are endless moral kidnappings such as magical girls shattering my dream of going public and working hard for decades to pay off the house. Suddenly being kidnapped by magical girls... "Children will never be allowed to go to the battlefield until the last adult in China dies. This is not just a belief. Every time a child goes to the battlefield, it represents the incompetence of the adults. It's better for you, a group of big men are hiding behind underage children with peace of mind, watching other people's children being beaten to life or death, but also persecuted. When it's over, they say: For the sake of the overall situation, it doesn't matter if I suffer a little injustice... The people also point their fingers, magic girls do what they should do, and if they make mistakes, they will be punished by the Japanese. Forget these, in recent years, there are still new versions under the rule of politicians or capital... Isn't it just bullying other people's children for their low intelligence? Just dismiss it with the saying that magical girls are the embodiment of love and justice.

Been a magical girl? Let's win the monthly ticket lottery for defeating cg

No, buddy, the witch before was sent from the headquarters. She has killed people for decades without being caught. The headquarters has probably been leaked through the sieve long ago, and I haven't seen any use of you people investigating. In the end, I fought hard and fought hard to defeat the witch. At this time, I became suspicious. This is a human being. The abstract brain circuit is so curious. To be honest, I don't believe that something like this would happen if there weren't a few witches at the top. It's too abstract.

No, buddy, it's 30 chapters and it's still in the fog. How can I keep reading?

Why are they all words? Can't stand it anymore

1. Multiple female protagonists. 2. Whether transformed or not, the male protagonist has a succubus physique. 3. As the plot progresses, there will be many more transformation scenes, and everything that should be there will be there. Please be patient, it will be exciting. 4. There will be depression, but the core is a story of love and hope! If you like it, please read it, you will not be disappointed! If you have any other questions, please leave a message '͜'

The protagonist was controlled by the organization from the beginning, but his whole family was not killed later. Since he was such a weakling, why didn't he kneel down and pray for peace from the beginning, so that the treatment would be better?

How does this book compare to After Hours Magic? I've been unlucky for eight lifetimes after reading a particularly well-written novel about a great eunuch.