Douluo, I, Huo Yuhao, Am Wumingke!

The world of Douluo is too small. If we only write about the mainland, it is suitable for the fate of fertility, immortality, and reproduction. If you are writing about development, you should at least connect multiple time and space.

The person who can think of Alhajivili is also a god. The author should be playing tricks instead of actually mistyping Alhajivili as Alhajivili.

The writing style is a bit poor, and Huo Yuhao's magnanimity as a pioneering navigator is not conveyed.

Where did Lao Huo get rich recently?🙂

Sorry everyone, when I was studying, I forgot how much older Xu Jiujiu was than Huo Yuhao and became the same age directly. I feel that I have watched too much Dou San recently and confused the two Xu. I'm sorry everyone, please just treat it as the author's personal creation.

The writing is 𣎴 good, the plot is a mess

Do you have to go to Shrek to eat history? 😐

I am Huo Yuhao's dog, woof woof

However, the content of Star Iron has a destiny, and there is no anchor point for leading a team to explore the secret realm or exploring spiritual impressions. Mentioning the term Beng Tie without further explanation, the supporting characters are more ostentatious to attract the audience. Now it's easy to change (;￣<￣) Douluo comes to watch Huo Gua beat up the drowned dog, and the supporting characters in Beng Tie's past story become more and more happy. Literary Theorem Chekhov's Gun If a gun appears in the story, it will definitely go off. At the beginning, it was necessary to translate the soul beast language into the core area of ​​​​the right time and place, but it was not mentioned. In addition, there is less influence and description of forces such as Tang Hao in the Deep Sea in Duel 3, and there are also supporting characters who are deeply influenced by the protagonist in the movie viewing articles and act chivalrously. Such fanfics neither please Huo Yuhao fans nor the Bengtie audience, so the article will naturally only contain anecdotes from the original work! Then why not use the protagonist to connect the two, and create many forces who want to get the conveniences of the iron collapse system from the protagonist The cool thing about a man is always simple is to go from being unknown to being famous all over the world. With the alien system, more people can see it but it cannot be deeply affected. It is also a kind of fame

Then let me ask you, what is the driving force for development? What are the capabilities to develop? The one whose destiny is ruined if it becomes contaminated? What happened to the final divine power? Why couldn't Omphalos move? What is the relationship between Wuluo Jingzi and the Memory Star God?

Is the content of Tang Sect Heroes in other planes such as Dionysian Dzi Bead Transformation 3 written? It is easy to write about the fate of rescuing troops across time and space, and it is also easy to write about the balance of combat power.

Everyone's development of Huo Yuhao is not enough.

The novel itself tells other people's stories. The author writes it like an autobiography from a first-person perspective. Some of the content is too wordy. For example, the part where the head gets stuck and enters the forest really looks like it was run by an AI.

The subject matter is good, but the author still has a lot of shortcomings. The characters are almost all OOC, and the logic in some places is inconsistent.

I want to watch the shadow of the train come and go

Don't like the world line changes and naturally introduce the concept of destiny

The author's writing is not good enough. At this pace, I still need to add some more material until the number of words is enough to read. Add some more material to the worldview and extend the width to The Legend of Tangmen Heroes. Add a fateful enemy to the length or engage in something like the revival of fate.

What the hell is it that you suddenly start writing a running account?

There are many incorrect settings and typos. Some people have pointed them out, but the author has not corrected them.