Douluo Wuhun Holy Master I Gathered All the Twelve Zodiac Signs

The problem lies in the first chapter, which must be changed. The reader is thinking about the Holy Lord killing everyone. The first chapter forcibly arranges such a strong contradiction. Even though it may happen objectively, it seems uncomfortable, as if such a contradiction is forcibly created for the sake of justice. The subsequent writing is okay.

Haven't those of you who write fan fiction read Dou Er in detail? The Evil Eye clan will not explode the soul rings directly. Killing the Evil Eye clan will only explode the crystal blocks. If you don't explode the soul rings, you will only explode the crystal blocks. Do you understand?

I see that the only problem now is that there are too few people. The core problem is the first chapter and the introduction. I came here from the short video. Starting from chapter 20, the overall rhythm, key plots and writing are still very good. It can compete with the white tiger sacrificed to Zhu Zhuqing. The problem is that the first few pictures look like the angry youth's brushwork. If you modify it, it should be in the top five thousand in the monthly vote list.

I finished it. I don't want to click on it after reading this introduction.

The introduction is not very attractive, and when I click on it, it's just mindless 😒, and it's just vernacular writing.