Lord of Mysteries: I Can Play the Role of Beng Tie

Personally, I feel that the abilities gained by the character Xing Tie should be those in the plot, rather than limited to the way they are expressed in battle. For example, during battle, you can pull a mop over and hit someone on the head, but Qing Que also hits someone with a card! This is too fragmented. Also, can you please stop saying the battle voice when activating the ability? Very embarrassing! For example, to activate an ability, you need a medium. Just touch it, but there is a time limit. When you activate the ability, wouldn't it be cool to take out a pocket watch and press it! In this way, you can perform various cool operations, such as enchanting bullets and then shooting them out. Another limitation is the time stop. I don't know if there is a problem with the description or something else. After the time stop, you should not be hit directly by the bullet, but should hover at the edge of the time stop area. The items that can be moved in the time stop need to be in contact with the protagonist. Also, don't make it too big. One four-star character and one mechanism are enough. If there are too many, I'm afraid you won't be able to set it up. For example, if Nastada is a rich woman, you can set the money ability, the green bird has strong luck, the friendliness of passers-by in Tingyun, etc.

1. Writing 1. Overall, it's pretty good. It looks like a composition But compared to those that are not logically logical and have many typos, this one is pretty good ——Tip: Write more and read more to improve [Writing]+ Add points 2. The plot description may be a bit neglected. Some scenes and plot details are mentioned in one stroke Perhaps, adding more detailed descriptions in some important places can increase [readers'] sense of involvement ——Tips: [Important details] determine success or failure, too much or too little will affect [immersion] 3. The surrounding perspective, which determines how much information and sense of immersion the [reader] can get For example, what kind of person is the [original protagonist]? What is the [surrounding environment] like for the protagonist? What are the effects of [System] problems and [Beng Tie Character]'s abilities? ——Tips: Most of this kind of information comes from [daily life], or is expressed in [other] places ——Note: Information ultimately serves the content of the [main line], please pay attention to judgment Two, main line 1. [Temporarily] We have not found out what the protagonist's own main line is, or what his actions are. The author wants to directly apply the story line of [Lord of Mysteries] ——Tip: Everyone has his own [main line], calm down and think, there is always an idea that will make people shine 2. There are many [daily life], but they are all idle, basically nothing, the present is very watery, lack of [attractiveness] —— Tip: Write your own [Main Outline], this may be helpful to you Three, System 1. I feel there is something wrong with [System Card Drawing], I don't know how [Card Drawing Resources] are obtained If it is really expensive, then [System Drawing Cards] will only have one more [Choice] for [Ten Continuous Drawing], and after the selection, other [Characters] will be directly Gone, nothing is left [Summary]: A story with a decent subject matter and writing style But it lacks its own main line and has some flaws If you can improve these problems and increase shipments and attraction, you may be able to attract a wave of people to watch I hope you can become a writer who writes good stories!