Demigod Mage in America

Brother, you should check it after you finish writing, there are many typos. Sometimes even the character names are typed wrong.

I took the wrong path. If I'm invincible, it's better to go directly to the upper level.

I guess it's not suitable for me. The more I watch it, the more boring it becomes. The setting is very similar to "Pawn Shop No. 8". Just like some book friends said, since you are invincible, why start from the bottom?

Real-life examples are better than the novels you wrote. If you are brave enough to adapt Manichaeism, it will be more interesting and attractive than what you are writing now.

Very well written. . But the pace of the story is a bit slow. . Actually, your story should first be written as an American TV series or American comic, and connect some world views and mid-level combat capabilities, and then form a complete set of world views and combat capabilities system of the behind-the-scenes Dharma boss Mowang to promote the American private server live-action game. . At the same time, I will gain readers and then write this kind of semi-original

The starting point now is to really poke holes in the American nest 😥

Overall, I would give it a 7 out of 10 points. The advantage is that some plot ideas are quite interesting, and the overall look is quite refreshing. The shortcoming is that the plot design is inconsistent and not very systematic. It feels like I write whatever I think of. Furthermore, the group portraits, which are more important in the behind-the-scenes story, are not particularly good. The characters of the female policewoman, female hacker and bar owner are not particularly likable. There is no character arc and no personality charm. Also, the protagonist, as the mastermind behind the scenes, is a bit too fond of showing off in front of others and going out to show off, especially when the protagonist is not completely invincible to the world.

No, there are no monsters and monsters in America. There are so many supernatural events. This is a good opportunity to harvest faith Immortal people, mirror killings, weird rules, blood demons, angels, Demons, bad guys, reborn ones, Goldfinger, God, those old myths. Myth system Zeus system God system Devil camp Vampire camp What is America? It is a chaotic, murderous, illegal disgusting, perverted, world of melee between gods and demons What is the core ability of God, that is the law For example, the God of War. The core is the power of war, then fighting can make you stronger. As long as there is war, you will become stronger Thunder God, master the power of thunder and lightning The core ability of Zeus is also thunder and lightning. But Zeus still holds many smaller branches of authority Hera, the mother of the earth, the snake god, the Egyptian Beerus the god of death, and the sun god. Apollo, Poseidon, gods of these camps, why do they fight for life and death? Isn't it just for faith and power? Unless the sun god Apollo is dead, the power he holds can be controlled by others Gods fight, just to become stronger and live longer

I feel like that policewoman is a failure. It's no wonder that two-thirds of a month has passed and only a monthly ticket of more than 100 is available.

Pure No. 8 Pawn Shop is a bit boring, it would be nice if there was a little fear like weirdness

It's okay if it's not on the shelves, but if it's on the shelves, there will be fewer people.

After reading the introduction, I collected it first. Why not take over Christianity through a backdoor listing?

One second he said he wanted revenge, and the next second someone came looking for him

After reading more than ten or twenty chapters, the protagonist seems to not care about anything, there is no main line, the plot is quite scattered, and it is uninteresting like boiled water.

If there weren't too many typos, I would have dismissed it entirely.

In fact, it was well written, but the progress was too slow and everyone ran away.

If there are any games or good (bad) things you want to see, you can mention them here and I will pay attention~

Does Shennong have it? Are there any typos now? Have you made any changes to the less likable characters like the policewoman?