Water Margin: Gao Yanei Is Actually a GAL Genius

Xiancao, the author is a genius, with great writing skills, interesting stories, and very good writing. You can expect a high-quality book. Just keep writing, and when you are full, go straight to Qingyun Road.

Very interesting, Peerless Immortal Food, I feel like the author has been Gao Yanei before

Aren't you talking nonsense? Do you still need money to put it on the shelves? How can I read a book?

Compared with Chen Liqing, Li Yingqiong can be considered gentle and courteous. But as the process continues, the protagonist becomes too frustrated and hard to watch.

The writing is good. Is the author an extraterrestrial demon or a trumpet?

It still needs too much polishing, which is a pity. Write the next book better

Not a buddy, do you charge for listing? How can people see this? Isn't this discouraging readers?

I feel like it still needs some cultivation, but these few chapters are not enough.

Don't write the protagonist with a low IQ!

Can you see this? A fat bear with a beard, a bunch of big men gathered around and called him "brother, brother, brother"

However, as this is the author's first novel, I can't be too harsh on it. Although there are many problems, I still hope not to write too early. It is best to write out what I thought about from the beginning. The more you write, the fewer pitfalls you will have when writing a second book in the future.

It's time to change [Water Margin] to [Big Coward]

How should I put it? I suggested changing it in the previous paragraph. The protagonist is really unlikable. While it's not on the shelves now, let's think about how to grow and what it was like before growing up. If you don't want to change, there is no need to read below. How can I put it this way, the writing style is acceptable and the subject matter is novel, but the writing is terrible in some places. Read more historical articles. The protagonist can be poorly portrayed in the early stage, but you have to introduce what he is like originally, which is too awkward. Instead of writing whatever comes to mind here. As for the plot, not to mention that the instantaneous body shape change and cognitive modification are a big poisonous point. I haven't used it well yet, my favorability is higher than 70. If I really have to follow game and follow other novels, what kind of situation is this? There is also a favorability display. Chen's line jumps to -0 at every turn. Are you serious? Although a woman's favorability changes easily, I won't let you jump like this. It's just a big thing. Chen, you can obviously write this line well, but according to your thinking in the comment, it is probably a mess. Really recommend a major change.

Even if the protagonist collects all the hero skills in Liangshan, what's the use? In the ancient world, people who came out to hang out had to pay attention to their power background, otherwise they would just be a bastard.

Earlier, you explained why Lin Chong didn't explain to his wife. Why do you say this without knowing it?

It feels pretty good, come on, author.

Actually, it sounds pretty good, so maybe I'm not a follower of it. Novels like yours in an antique style are actually not very popular nowadays. The emotional breaking point of the protagonist in the book has not appeared in almost 100,000 words. You, a newbie, can't handle long stories, so you need to think clearly before writing. Otherwise, even if you don't put it on the shelves, it will be difficult to get readers. The writing style is good, and it reads smoothly. I hope to maintain it.