Kaio Ring

Bro, today is Wednesday, February 11th, 11:25 pm. I have finished reading it all, but I still have to keep updating and finish it after writing 1 million words. Don't end it halfway. This is the bottom line. Let me make a critical comment first, don't take it seriously. I started writing. Be mentally prepared. If you are not ready, don't read it. Just think that I am praising you. The three golden chapters at the beginning are simply a stinky response. We have changed the logic of the first chapter to be basically smooth, but the organic problems cannot be corrected. As you know, I will not go into details. The overall atmosphere in Chapter 1 is depressing. There is no need for clerk No. 18 To write. It's not very relevant, just a word count. Little days with pink hair. There is no linkage behind. The characters are relatively thin. When I read the story behind it, I didn't bring my cell phone with me when I traveled through time. Those plots about the mother and brother are not immediately satisfying. The first chapter mainly tells the story of a mother who is a crazy brother-protector who wants money. The protagonist makes a wish and inexplicably meets a pink-haired girl who gives her a cheat. The repressive plot of the mother in Chapter 2 is not directly satisfying here. The plug-in sent by Fenmao is still passively activated. The protagonist himself has no ingenious ideas. In the end, he fled to the takeout station on a battery car and waited for death. Overall it is depressing. Chapter 3. I just want to quote your original text, "I closed my eyes in pain and took a deep breath." I really want to close my eyes now, but Rui Ping, I am responsible, I have to read your entire book, so, brother, torture. That's the overall plot of your first two or three chapters. I was so miserable, my mother was a crazy brother-guardian, she asked me for money, I made a wish, let me be the protagonist, hey, Fenmao gave me a bracelet, I rode a battery car, escaped from the shadows, and ran to the takeout station to wait for death. I put my life in the hands of the webmaster and asked him to call the police. I lost my phone on Earth, and then I traveled through time. Well, let me put it mildly, it is extremely boring. The protagonist has no bright spots. The story is pretentious and unfounded. Brother, in Chapter 15, just writing about taking a bath and two men staring at each other while taking a bath, it would be enough. It makes me feel bored, boring and powerless. The lengthy dialogue between the new characters later steals the spotlight from the protagonist. These new characters are boring and uninteresting. The protagonist talks to these people in a low-key manner, just like a roadside person. There is no change in essence before and after time travel. And you also wrote in the third chapter, didn't you drop your phone? Why don't you go back and see for yourself that the phone you dropped on the ground can still travel with you and your bracelet. Otherwise, you should write that you put it in your pocket, otherwise you should not write that the phone fell to the ground. There are many choices. Can you read the book you wrote yourself? Do you see it yourself? Originally, the plot is boring, procrastinating, and a waste of time. The characters lack souls, the plot is dry, and the writing is straightforward, without tension, and is so boring that it makes people distracted. Where is the fun, where is the passion, where are the little clever ideas that make people's eyes shine, it doesn't matter. Nothing. At least you can practice your typing speed. This is probably the only experience I can think of that you can get from this book But this is just what I can think of. These things are important or not. How I view this book is not very important. What is important is how you view it yourself After suffering the negation from the outside world, will you deny yourself? Are you turning attacks from the outside world into your own judgment? Have your hopes been extinguished bit by bit after your expectations failed time and time again? Writing will withstand a lot of mental attacks, it is no easier than carrying a big bag. If you really love writing, as I said before, if you can finish writing more than 1 million words, you will have surpassed 80% of the authors who started at the starting point.

The first is the title of each chapter, which basically has nothing to do with the content. For example, in the first chapter, there is a plug-in for my birthday. Where is the plug-in? Then there is the main plot. Let's consider the encounter with the shadow in the first three chapters as the main plot. To be honest, I didn't realize that the arrangement of the content of these three chapters is not suitable for the first book. Zhu Tianwen, you haven't started the first three chapters, how can you retain people? Even if you draw traffic, you have to read half of these three chapters, and it's too slow. I looked back and was still struggling with that administrator. To be honest, you want to write a work with depth and content, but you can't attract people or retain them. I can say that the expectation value is 1, a little but not much. It just depends on whether there are people behind you to read it, not to mention that most people don't have the patience. The writing style is quite mature, much better than most authors. If you don't write about the most attractive things in the world, how can you expect to retain people?

In the field of book writing, the threshold can be said to be low or high. Just looking at the author's description, it actually meets the requirements for writing a book. The writing does not need to be very good. The author's problem is mainly that his storytelling skills are quite poor. Moreover, he is a bit of a novice who takes it for granted. He always feels that his plot is just like this for the sake of something later. When I first wrote the book, I thought the same way. If you don't get rid of this problem, I'm afraid it will be difficult to sign a contract. Let me start by saying that most of Qidian's readers are office workers. After get off work, they read books in their spare time and want to relax and feel refreshed. You always write the kind of frowning plots. Who can read it comfortably? Even if you have to suppress it first and then raise it, you should suppress it and then raise it immediately. This can actually be a refreshing point, and revenge does not take overnight. It feels a little better. If you have a little bit of IQ and a smooth rhythm, it will be a good book. In fact, it is not that difficult. But if you stick to your "art" and don't consider the readers and write what they want to read, then naturally you will be criticized. It is recommended to put aside your own "art" and study how to write a plot that makes readers feel happy after watching it. You can dissuade most of the plot of Fu Di Mo in the first chapter. If after the Fu Di Mo episode, there is a protagonist who rejects Fu Di Mo and cuts off the original family, I feel it would be much better.

Brothers, I am the author myself. I have taken on a cargo hauling job in the past two days, from Xinjiang to Beijing, and will set off immediately, so there will be fewer updates in the next week. The author has a deposit of manuscripts, but in the coming week he will only post them and not write anything. If there is no supplement, the deposit will be used up quickly. I suggest that you save it first and continue to update normally after I get settled in Beijing. I will add more updates during the Spring Festival. Thank you for your support!

At the invitation of the author, I came to this book's book circle from the comment area of ​​other books. This book review is not to belittle the author's writing skills, but only represents my personal opinion; good books are written by people, and the writing skills are improved step by step. As a reader, it is also a good thing to be more considerate of the author's articles. The author grasps his own outline and organizes the plot well. The characters grow in the book, and the author's writing style will gradually grow. The author only needs to maintain high quality and up-to-date writing. Readers with monthly tickets have more to consider

After reading eight chapters, I still don't understand what is written. It's too long-winded. It mainly focuses on three points: world background, protagonist's ability (Goldfinger), and the relationship between the main characters. There is no need to lay out too much. They are all old book fans and can figure it out by themselves.

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Come on, old man, I really like reading the books you wrote before.

It's so short, old man, it's not enough to read 😍

You invited me to test the poison. I'm here. Just read the first few chapters. There are many questions. The male protagonist is so useless. This is not the case with the Waste Chai Rising Stream either. Character. IQ. No way. No one can step in. Everyone who reads your book resents the words of the male protagonist. Who would want to see it? Besides. You talk too much nonsense. Not concise enough. Know what you want to write in detail. But you can't write it like this at the beginning.

Generally. Mainly the beginning is poor. Generally speaking, it's best not to write about parents when writing. It's also a bit confusing to read.

There is nothing wrong with the part the author wrote, but there is something wrong with the whole thing. The technique is right, but the wrong thing is the way. . . The protagonist doesn't need to be too detailed at the beginning, I don't care much about the ordinary lives of strangers.

I have just read about 10 chapters, and the introduction is too naive when I want to talk about my questions. It's like saying I'm going to tell you a story. Then I went in and saw that the protagonist had a family and a younger brother. There are too many background decorations and descriptions, and the reader's sense of involvement is low. The overall feeling is that animation is about daily life, and there is a difference in performance between novels and animation. How to write it specifically, unlimited fan authors can read Virgo's Journey, The Otaku Demon, and The End of the World. These are pretty good. After reading a lot of fan fiction, I can remember these few. I'll take a look later to see if there are any problems.

Let me comment. Just one sentence, I can't stand it. I am a reader who likes to read short stories, so if you don't like it, don't criticize it. In the first three chapters, the main plot line, strength setting, and world background were not fully revealed, and the beginning did not attract me. Can't stand it anymore

When will it be put on the shelves! ! ! ! !

The solution is to reincarnate like the gods in fairy tales. This statement is very useful. You can also change it to other terms Those gods have reincarnated. Their weapons and so on are still their own.

If it doesn't work, don't update it. The male protagonist's character is disgusting. Really, I really want to see what you write at the end of your story, because your writing is not so bad that I can't read it. But every time I see the male protagonist act, I feel like vomiting. I stopped watching. Deleted, sorry.

I'm too discouraged to quit. Everything I get these days is my own. It's all about chance. I don't care about the big boss chess game. It's all over if you see if I'm a dick or not. After reading the introduction, I feel aggrieved. I don't really want to watch it.

I used AI to create an illustration of the bison tribe in Zhangjiang Triangle, for reference only.

Using AI to create an illustration of the beast king of the Yushan tribe [Qingyuan Zi], for reference only

Inspired by the tiger pet Beruka in the ancient online game "Stone Age", the image has been reconstructed by AI for reference only

Turn on the [Beast Humanization] AI modeling of the Unicorn Fairy, for reference only

I used AI to model the character of [Yushan Tribe Elder] Qingyu, a mature and open tribal beauty, for reference only

The administrator on the 7th floor of the Management Bureau, the daughter of the Chosen Son of Universe 616, is known as "Team Leader Han". She possesses powerful spiritual and ice powers. Based on the images from different periods in the book, I used AI technology to draw several character pictures for reference only.

After seeing the advertisement, I can only say that it is not as good as the one written by AI.

There are too many shortcomings. Just resorting to words is no longer enough to explain my thoughts. Even a phone call can probably last half an hour to an hour. You guys don't understand what online writing is at all. Brother, don't waste your energy. Go explore what online writing is and then start writing. Otherwise it is useless.

The car was hit in the past two days, and I went to deal with the damage, which delayed the update. I am really sorry that the author did not enter the palace. Please rest assured. I am even preparing to open a double version and a triple version. I previously published a new book about the origin story of the Authority, but it was rejected. I had no choice but to change the platform for publication. I will talk about the follow-up later. Thank you for your support

Spring is the breeding season, spring is the mating season. The plump swimming crabs cost 180 per pound. I didn't dare to buy too many. I only ordered three. The crab paste inside made me happy. I even found a creature suspected of being a crab crab.

A disciple of Tianjie Academy and the chief disciple of Feng Shen Daofeng Yayuan, he is known as "Senior Sister Ruoyun". He likes reading and drinking tea. He lives in seclusion all year round and devotes himself to spiritual cultivation. However, because he saw his own "Mortal Calamity" in "Jing Hua Shui Yue", he and the protagonist developed an indissoluble bond... Based on the characters in different periods in the book, AI modeling is for reference only. Reference.

I advertise everywhere, is this a full-time job? Did you work so hard, author?