Dungeon Vole

I was a little tired from reading, but unexpectedly the more I read, the more I got into it: The reason for tiredness: The author assumes that the languages ​​of the various races in the world are not interoperable, and established a separate self-organized language vocabulary for each race, which made the early stage confusing; The reason for good reading: The value of the book is very close to my heart, what kind of rat do you want to be

How to say it? I can understand that the author wants to express language differences in this way to improve the sense of reality, but it is impossible to actually compile a long list of non-repetitive words to symbolize it. This is a transliteration of the language of another world, and can only use short and repeated syllables. Therefore, for me, not only does it not enhance the sense of reality, but it almost destroys the sense of reality, because generally the animals described in this way are not people.

Did you save a field mouse on a snowy mountain?

It doesn't feel too hardcore, if the whole text were written in different world text and grammar. Then I will follow the author to the death

It feels like a light novel, but it is more like a group novel. It is not the mainstream style of Qidian. It is a farming style in a sense. The author should be a newcomer but the writing is smooth and the plot is also very interesting. The development of the world view is a bit stiff but it is indeed full of suspense. As for the different language issues mentioned in the comment area, if you don't feel that the impact is not great, it is completely acceptable. Recommended

Ji Li Gua La affects reading. After reading a few chapters, the plot has no special features. The eunuch is scheduled.

I don't believe that the author can understand what those strange creatures are saying. I guess he is just typing it up, Tado.

Briefly tell me your personal evaluation. The world view is too spread out, and obviously I have no grasp of it. It is a good idea to hide the existence of the system, but as a system, it does not show the important role of "its" tool attributes. The blurring of racial characteristics. It is mentioned earlier in the book that voles "like to stick around, like to be praised by their boss, and are loyal but a bit silly." The conversation between the voles later made me think it was more like a human being. The main plot has never been shown, writing a little in the east and a little in the west. At least I don't see why the protagonist wants to open fast food restaurants all over the world in this world view where humans will be defeated by demons in a short time.

The dialogue feels uncomfortable. I think the dialogue between the protagonist and others is original, but when it comes to the fishing turtle, it's normal dialogue. Isn't this possible? Otherwise, according to the writing style, the dialogue between the fishing turtle and the fishing turtle should be "Snoring, snoring" (this is the translation). Make it like this. Either translate them all, instead of just the protagonist, which is very fragmented.

Damn it, have you considered the people who listen to books? It's so uncomfortable to hear the strange onomatopoeia mixed in the dialogue.

It's quite uncomfortable to listen to the book, these self-made words.

I write with pursuit and tell the truth. The frequent perspective changes in the middle section lead to a chaotic rhythm of the narrative and the cuts are a little scattered. The key point is that it does not stop where it should. Hi, I won't say more, it's just like preaching. I'm more sorry for you. If you just add a little more "win, win, win, it's so cool," that's fine. It doesn't have to be too much. Just build up your popularity first. I'm afraid you'll feel discouraged as you write. However, the description of people is good. There are many characters, but the anthropomorphism is not heavy. This is very powerful and the look and feel are great. I feel that you must have put a lot of thought into it, or maybe you are gifted. As I said at the beginning, "write with pursuit", I hope your adventure is exciting enough, and I will continue to support you.

It is true that some jiliguala language affects the perception very much.

The perspective change is too confusing. I have to watch it several times to understand what you mean.

After reading one chapter, I found the setting quite interesting. Each species has its own language, instead of everyone learning human language.

Haha

How should I put it? Ignoring those self-composed words, this plot has a daily and warm feeling, which is quite interesting.

It's true, this book is different from other books

This span is too big. The medieval warhammer is written to be changed to 40k... The audience is not the same...

Can't the alien mosquito be replaced with a Martian text? It's a bit noisy to the eyes.

It feels particularly like a web version of a light novel. The changing perspectives and fragmented main lines do not spread out over the parts of farming and development that everyone loves to read. This is not a written book, it seems to be written by you.

It turns out to be a group portrait article 🤐

The perspective problem is really big. I suggest that the title could classify the perspective of other characters as xxx side stories.

The group portrait article is a bit messy. Moreover, I have read Chapter 48 so far. According to the conventional routine of Internet articles, I feel that Rhodes, an idealist, will die, and this will push his emotions to a peak.

I quite like it. Worth updating.