JOJO, but the Substitute Bai Jingxing

What I regret the most is that I just booked it all and didn't know what I was looking at. It was very confusing.

I'm a little curious. If the title of your book is based on the remake of Bai Jing, it's a bit of a super model. I've read two opinions. One is that Bai Jing's normal speed is 7 times the speed of light and pseudo-light speed, and his power is more than millions of tons. How do you calculate this? If you call the priest over, he will be kicked to death by the roadside, but if the combat power is suppressed, it will disgust the readers.

Substitute black essence? How to become stronger? Catheter? Why not change the title of the book to "Substitute Black Essence, grow a, and the conduit will become stronger!" 🙂

I can see that the author likes the characters of Jojo very much, which is reflected in the various reactions of the protagonist. The protagonist is portrayed like a pilgrim, but the protagonist behaves very cautiously. It feels like an ordinary three-dimensional otaku sees the characters and stories he likes, and is reluctant to change and cautiously interact with them. The problem is that such characters are unattractive. The attraction of the fan work itself lies in the way the author portrays the protagonist with a distinctive image and outstanding personality. He participates in the original story to influence and be influenced by those charming characters. However, the protagonist is different from the original character. The interaction between the characters is superficial, and the feeling of interacting with others step by step and deepening the relationship step by step is not written. At the same time, it is afraid of change and easy to be shaken, which is common for homebodies. The interaction with the original characters is not written well, and the protagonist's personality is not well portrayed. It really needs improvement. Furthermore, the plot of the protagonist appearing in a cell and later joining the protagonist group is quite inconsistent. The protagonist first appeared in the cell inexplicably and found an inexplicable reason for "amnesia". Not to mention that the protagonist's natural appearance is completely unlike the case of amnesia. Pretending to be anxious and panicked twice, and explaining that you are worried about how to retrieve your memory when mentioned can increase your credibility. Moreover, the part about helping Holly is quite difficult to explain. The protagonist is a person with self-set "amnesia". Not only does he not worry about retrieving his memory, but he also risks his life to save others when he has amnesia? And the original characters asked a man with amnesia to fight with them without raising any questions? Not to mention Jotaro and Lao Den, Abdel fights together because of their friendship with Lao Den. Even Kakyoin has a life-saving grace and a reason for revenge. In comparison, the protagonist's reason for helping because he is a gentle person is a bit too thin, not to mention that the protagonist himself has his own troubles (original character perspective). Even if the protagonist pretends to be an amnesiac and seems to remember his gentle mother who died for some reason and is determined to help save Holly, it is better than the current reason. I feel that the author's answers to the protagonist's sudden time travel and joining the protagonist's group are just for relatively "reasonable" settings. Even this setting is not reflected in the article (for example, the protagonist should act like he has lost his memory in order to make his speech more realistic). This will make the reader feel out of place, losing the immersive sense of reality, and the emotional interaction depicted is too thin and deliberate. All in all, the writing style needs to be improved, the emotional interaction is more like a setting on paper than a real emotional interaction, the protagonist's character suggestion is more vivid, and the plot advancement and turning points are stiff and not smooth enough.

To be honest, the setting is very attractive, but the writing is very bland and does not describe the characteristics of Black Gold at all. I have one thing to say. Basically, people who read this book want to see Black Gold show off in the JoJo world. It does not mean that it requires crushing all the way, but at least the feeling of pleasure must be written. But so far, it is very dull, and it feels the same with and without the protagonist. Maybe the author is slow to write, but if a new book wants to be attractive, it must at least be refreshing 😎

If this book is to become popular, it should focus on the performance of the black spirit killing everyone in the JoJo world. It is not necessary to write many details about daily interactions, which will make the work look like boiled water.

The three characters in Black Spirit are all highly completed characters. The two protagonists have very generic names and don't even have any personality. They rely on triggering plot dialogues with these original characters to gain a sense of presence all day long. What's worse is that it's hard to say whether Wo has self-awareness. Heijing is self-aware. Is the purpose of the protagonist's existence to provide protein to Heijing? Learning ripples seems interesting, but it's impossible to give too high a value. Generally speaking, it just follows the plot, and there are no exciting points. Even if you start the game humiliatingly and let the black spirit hold up the blackened Bobo's hair to recreate the famous scene of Atomic Samurai, the first impression of the protagonist cannot be established and the story will not stand up no matter how you read it.

It's like bullshit. It's really rubbish. It's also said that the stand-in for the male protagonist in the setting is One Punch Man. The dragon-level monster in it has black sperm. Bullshit. This is not even as good as a fat harvester. He needs strength but not power, and he needs speed but not speed. He has to rely on Only by eating protein can you have more clones. The setting is the black sperm of a dragon-level monster. But in fact, the author wants to suppress the combat power. He severely suppresses the combat power and it is a low-end version. A harvester who is afraid of weight, a black-hearted clone, not even as strong as a fat frisker.

I feel like the protagonist is just like a little fan who meets a big star, he is too intimidated.

What a piece of shit, even though you know the plot, you still get fucked unnecessarily.

The protagonist was punched by Dio and flew to the hospital, saying: "This is my escape route! Dio!", And then the black spirit, which absorbed a large amount of sperm, increased in power! Strong growth! A sudden increase! 🙂

The author's book makes people feel warm in their hearts.

After reading Chapter 10, I felt it was poorly written. A bunch of detailed changes are then classified as Butterfly Effect. Are there butterflies? Are you talking about the butterfly effect? What did the protagonist do to interfere and what led to these changes? If there is nothing, isn't it just you, the author, who made the changes blindly?

Reading the introduction is like seeing clouds. The world can kill people in a time-stop. If you don't have time, stop here and force yourself to do something, and you still have a quick start. Do you think the world is a tank, with no vision and no range? Are you competing with the world?

So, the intellectual part may be unsatisfactory (sad)

Chapter 3: Extremely frustrating. In the first two pictures, he was just like a bystander, neither speaking nor participating in the plot, just watching. I don't know what will happen next. What a great idea

All I can say is that the plot is extremely boring. I skipped it from the beginning on the plane, and after reading a few random chapters, I skipped to the last chapter.

Longing is the emotion furthest from understanding. This sentence is true for Aizen, it is also true for the goddess and the licking dog, and it is equally valid for the fan pig's feet and the original pig's feet. What should I say, not pleasing?

During this short writing career, I have understood that human "capacity" is limited, and it is impossible to sit at a desk and type in cold weather for a long time relying solely on the human body.

The introduction is well written, but it is too different from the content... I was attracted to the game by the invincible White Spirit Star in the introduction. However, the protagonist is a bit too weak, and the appearance of a bunch of original enemies is also quite abrupt. It's so weird...

I don't know why, but I feel like this book has an authentic Chengdu flavor.

Dio's fight against 10,000 black essence aggregates is a matter of life and death. It's too big for the protagonist.

Very few people have written about this in Qidian. The last time I read it was "Le Qing's Bizarre Adventure". The author's writing is still good. Send some monthly tickets to help the author. I hope the author can keep up the good work.

Personally, I feel that the author writes well, and I can feel that he writes sincerely, listens to advice, and the ideas are okay. I don't quite understand why some people criticize it so badly. Anyway, I hope the author can finish this work and work hard to write it down.

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Is this dick thing a black man? Where did your settings go?

Does it look similar? In fact, although this book is overwhelming, it is not that unbearable. After all, JOJO fans have great eyesight and it is not interesting to crush them with the numerical mechanism of flying bricks.