My Adventure Team Is Full of Troubled Girls

Alternative team withdrawal flow. Giving up teammates is essentially a problem of the protagonist. It is difficult to write. I feel that it will collapse if the author does not grasp it well.

It was so depressing and confusing at the beginning, which was quite discouraging. After all, most readers just read online articles to relax. If you really want to explore the beauty and ugliness of human nature and morality, you can just go to classic literature. Why bother reading this kind of play-house-style sadistic novel.

Essentially, it's the protagonist's problem, because the protagonist is not rational enough. He mainly assists the female swordsman, but is the captain. I didn't do a good job of investigating in advance and finally decided to give up rescuing my teammates. Then I became enlightened, became rational and determined, and began to make my own decisions. . I feel like the author should write this transformation in more detail. Or just acknowledge the protagonist's little problem and then lead to the next step. Otherwise, just remove this plot. . Otherwise, there will always be people talking about this plot.

It's obviously a high imitation of Mygo. It takes two months to form a hen card. It's very likely to be a eunuch. The original teammates obviously can't keep up with the cheating protagonist. So aren't all the character settings written in the beginning useless? They have no meaning.

What did you talk about in the first three chapters? "With such a group of friends, there is no need for plug-ins at all." "I have been hanging around with brats for 8 years, and I am not clear-headed, so I will hang up." Is it necessary to talk about it in three chapters? To be honest, two chapters at most. If you didn't introduce a bunch of female characters in the first chapter, it could even be compressed into one chapter. The patience and trust of readers are limited, especially when the author does not show enough control. How can it be okay to put so much invalid information on the shelves at the beginning?

It's not a case of quitting the team, it should be said to be a breakup of the team.

I think it's well written. The protagonist makes the decision because the protagonist wants to protect the lives of the remaining companions, not because the protagonist is an indifferent person. Therefore, it is natural to write about the relationship between the protagonist and his companions. If the protagonist is ruthless, it would be a different kind of writing. I still like to read this kind of flesh-and-blood writing by the author.

It's not bad, but the problem of dead people in the early stage is a bit depressing. It's the protagonist's fault that he didn't apologize, but there is no way to escape.

Why do you always write about the eldest lady? Can you distinguish priorities? Just write occasionally. Just two pages a day for writing.

Are you the panda I know? 🧐

Boss, I've already fucked you before I even looked at you?

I like the writing style very much, I hope my grades will be better

Well written, reversing the flow of quitting the team