Plane War: Begins with the Apprentice Knight

When I first read Chapter 4, it seemed pretty good... The Fighting Knights and the like reminded me of the bloodline of the blue crystal knights... When I read Chapter 8, the plot was old-fashioned, bloody, and there were too many awkward scenes. When I read Chapter 11, the plot of parents and relatives, looking down on others was too embarrassing, and it would discourage readers if I put it in front. When you see Chapter 13, don't always use the shocking template of dumbfounding. It's too poisonous More daily life, dialogue, and occasionally a small plot to make readers laugh. Don't make the protagonist only rush, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, and the plot twist is too dry and there is no tension.

Have you, the author, received a contract? Is it still free for iPower? Just like The Mercenary's book, which had millions of words before it was read

168 minutes... I wish the author a great success!