See Me Once and for All

The memory of the protagonist has been read, and it makes no sense whether or not there is a protagonist. The protagonist has no special characteristics at all. The other side kills him casually. If a normal person enters, the best of luck will be achieved.

(There are some spoilers, please read the first thirteen chapters before reading.) 1. Su Ming's memory has been obscured. He himself was sure that there was a big shot behind him after going through a six-pass mission. I wrote it directly in the article. 2. In the first six-path mission, Su Ming had already warned about the dangers of "Heart-stealing Pills", but they took the initiative to relax their vigilance. This really can't be blamed on Su Ming. 3. Qingjing's death is inevitable. The highest recognition of combat power in the world is the Dharmakaya, and Xuantian Sect is not afraid of the Dharmakaya. With his character, he will expose the Six Paths if he survives (I am not belittling Qingjing's image, this is the original work). There was no way I could let Su Ming press Qing Jing's head and tell him that Liu Dao was a powerful person beyond his knowledge. 4. I don't want to change the Xijiang Pavilion technique to Liu Dao. I think this is the basic principle of life. He is not at the point where he will die if he doesn't change. And large sums of good deeds are of no use to Su Ming. If he wants treasure soldiers, he can just apply directly to Xijian Pavilion. I mentioned Su Ming's special status in the article. Practicing in front of the location only requires time, and exchanging time at the Six Paths requires the reincarnation talisman. 5. Killing education, everyone has different feelings about this, just like the handymen I wrote about in the article, but Su Ming just felt uncomfortable for a while, and immediately took the initiative to adjust the atmosphere. This chicken killing was actually arranged for Jiang Zhiwei. Even Su Wuming knew this, so he brought Su Ming, who was two years younger than Jiang Zhiwei, to help Jiang Zhiwei. 6. Su Ming did not express anger at Qing Jing's death. His only feeling was "unexpected, but reasonable." Finally, how can I add people to the immortal game? I'm still waiting for Ruan Yushu to appear.

The previous writing was quite good, but these chapters are a bit weird The reason why the protagonist goes directly to Ruan's house is a bit insufficient. On the one hand, from a reader's perspective, the protagonist's reason for going to Ruan's house seems to be a sudden love (there is no foreshadowing in the beginning of the book), and now that the bosses are supporting you to grow up quickly, you ended up going to fall in love? On the other hand, judging from the NPCs in the book, the protagonist has not known snack food before, and he has a childhood sweetheart, a senior sister, but suddenly ran to propose marriage to the Ruan family, and the protagonist's behavior is also very strange In summary, it feels that the protagonist's personality is a bit broken In fact, the previous writing is quite good, but the plot here is a bit fragmented, I hope the author pays attention to it 😜

The writing is too bland, there is no fighting scene, and there is no eye-catching plot. Everything feels like it has been brushed off, there is no merit that can be said, and there are few updates. At first, I clicked in to read the fanfics of Shi Yi. I really like reading this kind of fanfics, but now I have no desire to read them.

The protagonist doesn't have a golden finger? If not, with all due respect, it would be better to go to Zhongwudu than here

At first I thought it was the single heroine Ruan Yushu, but by chapter fifty-two, it was Jiang Zhiwei too? Feeling a little uncomfortable. If there is a single heroine, it is possible to change Jiang Zhiwei through contact since childhood, but she is unlikely to accept working with the same husband. Her character is probably to cut off love with a sword. The same is true for Ruan Yushu. They have their own persistence. Multiple heroines are too destructive.

The protagonist's combat power expands a bit too quickly. Originally, enlightenment was the main plot, but when you go on location later, there is nothing to write about. Then you jump to the location combat power in just a few chapters.

Isn't it too blunt to just go to the Ruan family, and to get involved in Liu Dao's affairs when you are so weak?

Don't be a eunuch. It's too little to write about one life.

? ? ? Didn't the protagonist watch The Lord of One Life? I was shocked when I saw Jiang Zhiwei in the six realms of reincarnation. What exactly was he shocked about? I remember that in the original work, people who were not in Shaolin were dragged in. So what's so strange about dragging in Jiang Zhiwei who was not here? And the protagonist's thoughts are also very strange. Why does he think that Jiang Zhiwei will be fine if he is not in Shaolin?

Introduction: The second Jiang Zhiwei is Jiang, not Jiang

Thank you for your invitation. I have also read them all to the latest chapter, because I have read relatively few fan novels and don't know much about the original works, so I just want to share some thoughts and hope to discuss them together. Let me talk about the advantages first. The writing style is very mature and it is actually good in all aspects. But after reading the full text, first of all, it is a bit bland. First of all, we must understand what the audience wants to see when watching fan fiction. They want to see different things from the same world view. In one sentence, it can be described as: new wine in old bottles. So the most important thing for a fan is to write in detail, quickly go over the old ones, and write the new ones in detail. In the first chapter, the protagonist traveled through time and became a baby and was picked up by Su Wuming and brought back to the sect. In fact, there is very little information. If I were to write it, I would probably start like this. My name is Su Ming, Su from Su Wuming, Ming from Mingshuihe. (Paragraph) Since x years ago, when I was a baby, I was picked up by Su Wuming from the Mingshui River and brought back to Xijiang Pavilion. I experienced the legendary Cut Me Sword Wen Xin. Since then I have realized that I have entered a whole new world. (Segmentation) Yes, I have traveled through time, and here is the Supreme Being. Of course, the above is my personal opinion, because I feel that if you are a fan, you don't need to introduce too much about the origin of the protagonist. You can tell readers directly what is going on, and then we can fast forward to what everyone wants to see. So what do readers generally want to see when reading fanfiction? Contrast. You see how the original work arouses the interest of the audience (I temporarily read the original work). It first writes about daily life, and then quickly leads to a hook (now it is all about Little Karami martial arts, but here there is the Tathagata Palm), then it writes about cultivation, and another hook (modern people have poor practice, but I have the Jade Buddha). In other words, the original work uses contrast to attract readers. When I read your fanfic, the first thing I want to see is, is there any difference in the protagonist's cultivation? The result is a very bland description and introduction. Anyway, it is successful as a running account. The second time I saw the dungeon world, I hoped to see the protagonist behave differently, but the result was that it ended indifferently. It's like looking lonely. If it were me (forgive me for not overestimating my abilities), if you want to write about cultivation, you can't just write about cultivation. You have to write about him going through all the worldly affairs to keep his innocent heart, and writing about how he worked hard to cultivate but was questioned by thousands of people. After falling into the trough and then stepping onto the mountain top, it is written that he was able to understand his mind and nature by reciting the Jing Jing Sutra thousands of times, and he was willing to cut off his heart and ask me not to change his mind. Write about his suffering and sorrow, write about his thoughts and enlightenment. At this time, the growth is completed and the first mission can be started. At this time, I wanted to see the protagonist of the first mission take a different path. For example, in the mission, can the protagonist analyze the elixir and reproduce it in the original world? Another example, go directly to the boss for a showdown and cooperate and then make the game with the oriole behind? In short, writing fan fiction means to use the right combination and the strange to win. The old tree blooms new flowers without departing from the original work. With so much eloquence, I will not briefly mention it secondly, otherwise it will be suspected of being preachy. In fact, it is just the interaction with the characters in the plot. How to write it later is very simple. Highlight the protagonist and use him as the perspective to experience the original classic plot. At the same time, it will influence the direction, but it will be deviated due to fate. The simplest thing is about Jing Qing's death. I will write about the protagonist trying his best to avoid his death. However, the protagonist still died in the same ending because of his personality, butterfly effect or other reasons. For another example, the protagonist has tried hard to prevent the heroine from making the mistake of practicing cultivation, but the result is still the same for some reason. But everything has not changed? No, Jing Qing died but left more information than in the original work. The heroine went astray but was broken and stood up. These are old trees with new flowers. Of course, this is also one of the ways to write. In fact, there are many ways to interact, so I won't go into details one by one. It's too late, I have to work overtime now and I have to work overtime tomorrow. So far, the above is just a discussion, and we hope to make progress together.

No system? Pure one life? What a hell

The whole text has been greatly revised, and the second chapter is complete There are many female protagonists, including Little Fox, Ruan Yushu, and Jiang Zhiwei. Ethical investment, approved by the Demon Emperor (Demon Saint), and with the Human Emperor Sword, from the small world of fairy traces to the cave of all things, to the real world of the Northern Zhou Dynasty and the Southern Jin Dynasty, humanity reigns supreme!

I got the flag, but it's not suitable after all. When will I get the sword🗡️

I got it from another comment section by the author... This writing is a bit smooth. Is it the reincarnation of an extraterrestrial demon or some vest? Anyway, please vote for the monthly vote and write well.

With one Qi transforming into three pure beings, and with the palm of the Tathagata, you can cut out a holy Buddha. After all, it is equivalent to another person practicing Buddhism.

These few chapters have not been ordered recently...

If you want a eunuch, just do it as fast as you can. Why are you squeezing out toothpaste like that?

Update quickly, love watching, and have voted for support

Writing about traveling through other worlds, writing about one life alone is too boring

The protagonist can't really be the reincarnation of Zhenwu, that would be boring

Does the protagonist have anyone investing in him? It's too slow for no one to invest in cultivation, at least it's the Moral Heavenly Lord, or the Lingbao Heavenly Lord. Meng Qi is destined to be the Yuanshi. Even if you write the protagonist as the Yuanshi, then Meng Qi is also the Yuanshi of the third generation, and the writing is not like the earthly language. It should be as funny as Meng Qi. Show yourself in front of others and stop Meng Qi from pretending to be cool, black history, and gossip 🙂🙂