Douluo: the Peerless Master of Tarot

I saw so many settings in the first three chapters that I was immediately persuaded to quit.

This is the latest

The theme of the idea is good, but it is a little complicated. Douluo is the writing method of the Chinese side of the film, and your setting is a Western setting, which many viewers cannot understand.

The setting of mystery + Douluo is actually good, but you shouldn't let insignificant characters also have the power of the mystery system Shrek is now mostly surrounded by little Yakuza in fan fiction. If you write them as decent characters, it will be easy to make people look down on them. Moreover, the ritual of taking the potion and the process of digesting the potion are omitted. It is just sequence one, which makes the potion seem cheap. If you plan to write another book, please give me some advice The protagonist takes the hunter path, the city of source matter disaster, the creator of the mirror world is very strong, is the first echelon under the pillar, and has a complete promotion ceremony and magic potion formula, which can be written into the book with a few modifications. Some of the Douluo native soul beasts are affected by the source of essence and have some extraordinary properties (which can be used as the main material for potions, and the only relevant channels are witches and hunters), but only up to Sequence 4. Sequence 3 and above are all in the City of Disaster and need to be taken out by the protagonist In the early stage, the Douluo natives only thought that the extraordinary materials were special soul bones, and many people went crazy because of the random fusion of extraordinary properties. Only a few lucky ones fused the correct materials. The hunter path represents war, and the most indispensable thing in Douluo Continent is war. In the later stage, witch + hunter are promoted in a spiral, and the hunter path can also build up his own team. In the later stage, after the demigods, some Sequence 3 characteristics will be delegated You can consider the Noumenon sect to start. In Shrek's case, both paths can give some, but the hunter path can only lead to the Sequence 6 conspirator's formula, and the witch path can only lead to the Sequence 8 instigator. They don't have the potion formulas and rituals to start the qualitative change. In order not to fall behind others, they have tasted the sweetness of the potion system. They chose to secretly cooperate with the Holy Spirit Cult, and half-way to the witch path (with the protection of the golden tree, most of them can successfully switch to the path) Above Written like this, it is easy to attract readers. Shrek's top executives collectively turned into women, which directly filled the drama.

Author, have you changed the settings of Electrolux? It's too outrageous to jump from a priest to a first-level god.

It's not that I'm nitpicking, it's just a bit too natural. The foreshadowing in front of it feels like it's not even hairy. Because of the protagonist's words, the entire academy has to wait for dusk at the starting point. Even if the reason is God, it is too outrageous. I hope the author can revise the front part and pave the way.

Why not let the mirror use thin gold body, Yan body or willow body ( Ordinary regular script does not look good (🐶

I've been talking about the setting, so it's better to just write about the Lord of Mysteries.