This Magical Girl Is Unreasonable

The first few chapters are a bit bad, there are too many inexplicable pulls It's like a literary youth patient who wants to show off and can't take one breath, and then the breath gets stuck in the chest and can't be vomited out or sink down, making people feel stuffy It's better to delete it and insert it as a memory later.

Magical girl again? Great, we are saved 😍 Qingyun Sect, you did a good job

Lack of involvement and expectation. Click here to read the introduction. Duanmu is a magical girl. Another god (on the Internet) plus a magical girl. It's quite interesting As a result, ten chapters passed, the events happened quickly, but there was no emotion at all. The protagonist's traditional mixed literary and youth characteristics were insufficient, and the conflicts lacked passion. I can understand that Duanmu did not become a general from the beginning, but the moment when it was most widely spread and most interesting was undoubtedly the moment when he became a killing machine. It is recommended that the first ten minor repairs be made. Abusing four hands for the first time can strengthen the mood and highlight the characteristics of the protagonist. When working later, reduce the non-information paragraphs and focus on describing Xiao Li. Looking for a book that obviously suppresses the emotions of the protagonist, but the follow-up has been delayed. There is no point in holding the reader's breath. It is recommended to slap the face as soon as possible. The fighting performance in Victory Square is insufficient, and the new magical girl is too silly and cute. Generally, it is recommended to write down the advantages and disadvantages of new characters when they appear, otherwise the anticipation and reading will definitely be lost. Finally, please give me a selling point and character design.

To give a rough description, it's actually a desperate sister-in-law who is killing people crazily ()

The author promises me not to be boiled to death by prison salt, okay?

Be the first to surrender, meow

Is it true that magical girls have no future?🙂

The reading was okay. The progress was a bit fast. Some emotions came out before they were dealt with. There was less of a process of accumulation. There was an extra chapter in the middle to accumulate emotions. It might be much better to write about the past with my sister and the chats and exchanges before starting work. Let others talk about the past of the protagonist and her sister, what sister control, worries, etc. From the moment the protagonist returned home to the time they separated, I actually felt that my sister was not that easy to die. The family members hid some secrets from each other, and there was not much written about the relationship accumulated with my sister, which made this breaking point feel hollow and powerless

The sauce is here, bubbling here

It's hard for me, Great Technician Han, to misunderstand me with this name.

I can accept both as long as I don't get married.

This name gives me a strong beauty

Is it Bianwen? Is it a permanent change? What is your sexual orientation?

I really need to edit the front part, there are typos, and I feel like I missed a part of the plot. When did Black Star communicate with the official, and why was he asked to deal with the disaster beast?

Let me ask the newcomers, is your sister pregnant?

Can anyone tell me why there are so many books about magical girls recently?

The Cat Next Door has a book titled Magical Girl Arms Plan, in which the protagonist's background is that something happened to her sister. However, it was originally a single female protagonist, but in the early stage it looked like there were multiple female protagonists, which was quite uncomfortable.

Probably not a eunuch 😠