The Wish to Eliminate Immortality

It is a very good book. The disadvantage is that it is slow to enter the plot in the early stage, and a lot of ink is spent on the characterization and background of the supporting characters. The main plot is not pushed fast enough, and the content is relatively depressing. This should be the reason why there are not many new readers. But after the first volume, as the story begins to advance, the world view begins to unfold, the characters gradually become more fleshed out, and the plot begins to show some levity and humor, making it more attractive to readers. Overall, there are no problems with the writing style of this book. The dialogue between the characters is also very fluent, the character creation is also good, and the ideas are quite good. If you can read it patiently, it is still worth recommending.

Like the title, really, it is my favorite book at the moment, the author writes it so well (see the part about brotherhood). Maybe it's a book that everyone likes to read at different ages, but it's really good-looking, not in line with the mainstream, and at the same time deeply shocking. The only book in my heart now may be The Panda's Sword Bones, my favorite book in the senior year of high school. There are almost no more books going forward. If the enlightenment book Perfect World counts (but I can't read it now), Perfect World was completed when I was in fifth or sixth grade. It was my first favorite work. Unknowingly, I saw it now, and I couldn't sleep at night.

The plot concept is good, but sometimes there are dramas. I often felt like I was traveling between the Xianxia set and the two-dimensional set. There is also the intersection of modern science and fairy tales. I think the plot of the savior of civilization is too modern, and it is explained too clearly and too early. I think the riddle could be more interesting. It might be better if the terminology and name setting are more like ancient fairy tales. The writing is good, but many times I feel that the progress of the plot is very slow, the amount of information is insufficient, and there are some repetitive descriptions. Coupled with this strange paragraph and sentence, it is difficult to read. The description of the male and female protagonists is good, but when I think about it carefully, this is not a young and self-sufficient male protagonist. Overall, it has the flavor of two-dimensional love. In short, I have a lot of criticisms, but if you like Xianxia, ​​I still recommend it. I wish the author will sign a new contract as soon as possible. I want to watch the double heroine, the king meets the king Shura! ! ! Promise me not to leave any sister behind, okay? Author.

I would like to say that this kind of writing style is not "literary youth". According to an academic perspective, in the highly commercialized online literature market, it is actually difficult to see the author's "literary consciousness." The reason why this book is so moving is because of this feeling of "literary consciousness". In discussions of pure literature, judging a literary work is usually done through the four elements mentioned in Abrams' "Mirror and Lamp", so we look at it from the first element (that is, the author's dimension): the author has completed his basic task as an author in this book, with both a substantial narrative script and well-sculpted characters. The creation and selection of materials are even more bold, trying to combine two completely different narratives: science fiction and classical fantasy. Domestic science fiction started very late, and its audience is not as large as classical fantasy. However, science fiction literature is serious literature and has the meaning of guiding the future. Adding science fiction elements can completely increase the humanistic ceiling of the work. I think the author really has his own ingenuity. And the author's attitude towards the creation of this book is what reflects the "literary nature". Although, I would like to say that writing modern poetry in a novel is a bit awkward, but the narrative techniques such as narration, flashback, and retelling used in the opening dozens of chapters are really eye-catching. It can be said that the several narrations are perfectly integrated, without logical flaws, giving people the beauty of a loop. Literature is the knowledge of playing with words and words. The author's technique seems to be completely different from that of a novice in writing. I very much look forward to using your ingenuity to create a beautiful online masterpiece. Click again: I just noticed that there are so many free chapters. I am very grateful to the author for sticking to his heart and writing without stopping!

The overall review is a very complete first volume (except for the plot about pre-civilization, which is too much information in one breath). There are a lot of foreshadowings and allusions. The looping narrative structure does have a charm that is very different from ordinary writing. Is it true that it was published after the first volume was written? In fact, I am quite adaptable to the techniques of reverse order, narration, and narration that are commonly used and even abused in the first volume, although this is obviously not in line with the reading habits of online articles. But why it is said in three breaths, because there are several overly large narrations (memories of such a large size cannot be said to be narrations) that interrupt the consistent flow of reading. The first time is a story with Zhang Sheng as the main body, the second time is the story of Lin Yin, and the third time is a dream story about pre-civilization. In fact, the content of these stories alone is okay, but the problem lies in the narrative structure of the entire first volume. In short, there are two problems The first is that the content is too long. The content ratio between the protagonist's line and Zhang Sheng's line in the first thirty chapters is almost 1:1. This is a devastating blow to the flow of the protagonist's line all the way through. Moreover, the author has stuffed too much content into Zhang Sheng's line, and the narrative is too detailed. The same goes for the pre-civilization section. Too many settings were crammed in at once, and these settings have nothing to do with the content of the first volume, unlike Zhang Sheng who has some reference to it. The second is that there is a problem with the insertion node. The chapter about Zhang Sheng was inserted after the protagonist shot the crossbow. Readers were still curious about the result, so they were stuffed with many chapters of Zhang Sheng's content. Moreover, one chapter of the book is obviously more than 4,000 words, and some chapters may have about 10,000 words. This long and intermittent reading experience is a huge barrier for new online readers. The same is true for the pre-civilization plot, even a little more extreme, because the settings such as the redeemers mentioned have nothing to do with the first volume. This is the content after that, and the result is that it is all crammed together. As for why we say three breaths instead of four breaths, the first breath was taken when I was halfway through Zhang Sheng's story (I was about to eat at this time), the second breath was at the beginning of Lin Yin's story (when I was about to go to sleep), and the former Civilization story was finished in one breath after I woke up. I won't mention other minor issues, such as some sentence fragments that are too stiff. But actually, my first purpose of reading this book is to read about romance. If the author wants to write with multiple female protagonists, then write well and don't be influenced by some people who inexplicably want a single female protagonist.

It is a book worth reading. The foreshadowing and decryption of the world view, character creation and interaction, and story advancement are all excellent among online texts. There were some controversies about the writing of supporting characters in the early stage. For example, Zhang Sheng's length can be said to be too long. Although overall, I agree with the positive significance of such a length, it will inevitably scare away some potential audiences. Fortunately, this will not happen in the future. The choice of words and sentences can be carefully considered. Some sentence fragmentation and repetition are a bit strange, but it is still within the acceptable range. I'm just curious about how this emotional scene is going to be handled. There seems to be a lot of ambiguity. Will it lead to a big harem in the future? Of course, I personally am a harem lover, but if I write too much, it seems a little difficult to control the direction. Whether it is too many heroines or missing heroines, I am afraid that many readers will not be able to accept it. I hope the author can make a reasonable arrangement. I hope it won't be a eunuch, I hope it won't end badly.

There is a female protagonist chasing me 😍😍😍

The second volume is overall better than the first volume. [Don't read for spoilers] Excellently created three characters. Master Rao Zhirou is different from the formulaic beautiful fairy master. Wang Dahai, the bodyguard, I can understand the dream of three generations of his Wang family. Senior sister Ning Tao, I can feel the vitality and beauty of my senior sister. The early stage of the second volume has better shaping of Qi Shuangxin. As I continue reading, I think the author is very good at creating characters. Next, let's talk about the shortcomings The conflict with Kuang Lei Xianzun is too sudden. I can understand the use of Lei Lei's setting for the protagonist's dream. Author, most of the problems in the second volume are just not enough foreshadowing. The final summary is that I am willing to pay for a subscription.

The witch shows her tricks. My girlfriend comes from the future. My daily life as a monastic in my youth.

Thank you for your support all the way. The author has broken through the contract signing stage. Now he hopes to break through the street fighting stage. Friends, let's continue with this story together 🤝

Who on earth said that Xiao Xiao can be a mother, an older sister and a younger sister at the same time? 🙂 What a genius

I read someone else's recommendation: "Can endure long interludes and flashbacks balabala" I want to see what happens. Jpg Halfway through: Damn, bro is really good at interjecting flashbacks

(Because the author found that many new readers seemed to have expressed vague feedback about the story in the first volume. I specially spent time and energy to collect the previous replies and wrote this introduction article, hoping to help more new friends understand this story. This introduction will be put into the comment area later, and today's update can only bring this up.) Because the author wants to play with a structure of re-narration of the text, polyphonic voices of the characters, and retrospective narrative. First of all, this is definitely a story with a protagonist and an absolute character axis. Even if there is a certain "other" perspective, this is centered around the protagonist's social relationship and unfolds from the "protagonist" in the eyes of the "other". In the first volume, the story of the protagonist is explained from the eyes of others, cross-narrated and then brought together. It looks like a story told twice, but there are many changes in the details of the text description. It's like playing galgame, the first time you get the normal ending. If you continue to fight, you can get the true ending. After understanding the motivations of each person's behavior, their characters will become three-dimensional. In fact, this kind of writing wears down the author's patience, as well as the reader's patience. The advantage is that the characters can be better shaped. The author believes that the characters in the story should be heavily affected by social relationships, environment, and choices, so he will not only use the ink to shape the supporting characters, but also use the opportunity to shape the protagonist. The first volume will use techniques such as narration, flashbacks, interludes, and retrospective narration. Cross-check a story from the perspectives of different people at different times. This kind of POV-like treatment is relatively close to the author's first volume of the story. Animation works such as "Wine of Eternal Life", "Hellless Horseman" and "fate/zero", and similar online works include "Trading Crime", "Zhou Lin" and even the popular "Xuanjian Xianzu" can also be regarded as POV group portrait narratives, but "Xuanjian Xianzu" does not integrate the time latitude. This creative technique is actually quite common in various genres of literary and artistic works such as animation, comics, movies, novels, dramas, and games. It's just that there are relatively few online articles doing this. Maybe most readers of online articles are not easy to accept this, and most authors are not willing to try this field. Because there are indeed very few authors who can write well. But the author is stubborn. In fact, he knows that doing so will reduce the audience of the story, but the author can't help but want to make things better. He knows that there are tigers in the mountains and goes to the tigers in the mountains. In the first volume, the group portraits that the author will create will only focus on a few very key specific perspectives, and the main purpose is to shape the protagonist's social relationship and the protagonist's character image. Friends have all seen this location. If you have the patience, please take a look. There are also people who like this kind of game-like writing method like solving puzzles, maybe there are not many people. The author still hopes that every reader can find what they need in this story. It is very laborious to write like this, and it is thankless. Because the context needs to be verified repeatedly, the gears must be able to mesh. I won't do more of this in the following content, it's too tiring. Only depositing manuscripts allows for such a bold attempt. The author estimates that he will use this writing method less in the future. When the first volume was still in the preparation and polishing stage, the author felt astonished after reading "One Hundred Years of Solitude" and "Crime and Punishment". Therefore, we also plan to create characters so that they can fully express their voices, express their thoughts, and reveal their background. This is a kind of polyphonic narrative display. At key nodes in the story, their concepts will collide and spark. The first volume of this book makes a different attempt from most online articles in terms of narrative time structure. "Xuanjian Xianzu" is similar to the family management simulation game CK3, that is, "Crusader Kings 3", which has similar gamification treatment of the characters in the book, so some people say that Xuanjian is like the Chinese version of "One Hundred Years of Solitude". But Xuanjian did not try to show the present, past, and future of One Hundred Years of Solitude as the magical unfolding of time in the present. However, this book wants to be somewhat touching, so many readers see it as full of riddles as soon as they come in. This book will talk about what will happen in the future and what will happen in the past in the first volume, all of which will be mentioned in the present. Finally, when the volume is being wound up, it will all be recalled as the plot progresses. There is not a single riddle in the first volume here that is idle, they will all be recycled. The ink spent on character creation in the first volume will be called back at key nodes in the future story, that is, in the outline of the future story. In the first volume, when a character first appears, you will not understand everything about the character. After reading the same but heterogeneous text content, you will have a completely different feeling. If I skipped reading, I would have swallowed it whole, and I couldn't feel the details of the characters created with passion by the author at all. There are also readers who will like this kind of writing. For example, a reader told the author before that he really likes this kind of playing experience that is close to the game "The Mystery of Werewolf Village", peeling back the secrets of this character layer by layer. Reading the same text again, as long as the reader is patient, he can feel the different characterizations. This is indeed a creative method close to game narrative. "Thunderstorm" is similar in dramatic structure to the entire story in Volume 1. The main plot of the drama is concentrated in a short period of time. The conflicts of all characters break out in this "now". Thunderstorm is a typical drama with a retrospective structure. Its core feature is to use the "present conflict" as the framework. Through the dialogues, memories, and actions of the characters, it constantly looks back and reveals the "secrets of the past", allowing past grudges and present conflicts to intertwine and detonate layer by layer, ultimately forming a strong dramatic tension. The author created this story out of ambition, so he compared many excellent works before starting to write. Just as the Analects of Confucius said, "If you take it from above, you will get it from within; if you take it from below, you will get it from below; if you take it from below, you will get nothing." If you want to gain something, you must first set a goal with a high threshold. Don't jump over it, and let it go before you touch it. Frankly speaking, the first volume of this book is indeed a story that requires some patience and a certain threshold to read. But the author still sincerely hopes that every reader can find what he needs in this story. If you are highly dissatisfied with this creative method, please summarize your feedback in this thread and do not open a new thread. The author will go through the opinions you want to convey one by one.

My county is so small that it only takes 20 minutes to go around on an electric bike, and it is so small that a newly opened milk tea shop can be spread throughout all middle schools in half a day. And I am the only one here who watched "The Wish to Exorcise the Immortal". When I opened the red APP on my phone for the first time and discovered this book, I didn't know that this decision would lead to a "secret world" for me. What the students talked about during class was the ranks and skins in mobile games. In the eyes of the elders, online articles only had four words: "delaying learning." No one knew how lonely the ringtone in Linzhai was, how lively the lantern festival in Escort City was, and no one could lament with me how grand my wish was to light the fire and eliminate the immortals. During an art class to draw "Landscape in My Heart", I drew on paper the bustling scene of the sea of ​​flowers and fields on Futian Mountain. My deskmate came over to look at it, frowned and asked, "Are you painting an alien planet?" I wanted to explain that it was the residence of immortals, a wonder of another world, but I swallowed it back - the names of places that were vivid in my heart were just a string of unfamiliar words. Just like when I walk through the old streets of the county with my schoolbag on my back, I always think of the night at the Magpie Bridge Lantern Festival in the book "Shuangxin Shining Fire", but the people around me will only urge me to "hurry up, I'm going to be late." But this secret also gives me special joy. On weekend evenings, I would sit by the window and watch the story in "The Wish to Remove Immortals" over and over again. At that moment, the small room seemed to be connected to a distant alien world. I will save the screenshots in the book and occasionally show them to my deskmates: "Look, this is the place where I have 'traveled'." " Some people say that reading novels is "not doing your job properly", but "The Wish of Exorcizing Immortals" gives me more than just entertainment. It lets me know that even if you live in a small county town, you can see a wider world through a screen - there are immortals, gods, and all the characters who are spelled out for obsession. Just like now, I will take the initiative to look up words I don't know because I want to understand the characters' lines; I will take the initiative to look up words I don't know because I like the descriptions in the book. I started to pay attention to the humanistic knowledge in the textbook. I am still the only person in the county who reads "The Wishes to Eliminate Immortals", but I no longer feel lonely because I know that I have found the content I need in this book, and I will continue my "travel" in reality with this curiosity about the world. Maybe one day, my deskmate will suddenly come over and say: "You are very keen, my friend 😉"

Friends, this book, which has only been officially signed for a few days, is currently competing in the [First Round Recommendation PK Competition]. If you win, you will be on a bigger and higher stage. If you lose, you will have to leave sadly. The author really wants to bring this book to a higher and bigger stage - let more people see it! Friends, please lend me your strength! [Reading the latest chapters will determine the outcome of the PK] But the book currently has 660,000 words. New readers may not be able to read the latest chapters for a while, and the time limit is only 7 days. Our opponents' word count is between 100,000 and 200,000, so their latest reading may be easier to maintain because the word count is relatively small. I'm afraid we will fall into a state of decline and be unable to defeat other books. Friends, try your best to keep reading and vote for recommendations during this week. If you want to vote monthly, it depends on fate. After all, this book is not listed in V for the time being, and it cannot generate monthly votes if it is not on the shelves. If friends have idle monthly tickets on hand and are lucky, then you can vote with your small hands. Today, Monday, we still have 6 days to stay in the stage spotlight. I hope we can win at least one game; I hope it's not the last dance. Let's dance together until the end! Every day without dancing is a betrayal of life! Thank you my friends. Let's go to the end of the story together!

Rao Zhirou, you have been harmed by the fire all your life, and you cannot deal with the young and beautiful young lady in a serious manner...

Thanks to the author for his love secrets and guidance, which allowed me to have my current partner. Thank you so much, author. Come on, author, I will always support you.

The wish to eliminate immortality makes me infinitely charming 😉

A reader friend asked about this reason, but he took the initiative to delete the post for some reason. But I think what he asked is meaningful, so I wrote a reply. I hope he can see it when he browses the comment area and get the answer he wants. First, I want to lower the reading threshold. In order to make reading more comfortable for readers, I reduced the information density on a single page, but it seemed to make more readers feel uncomfortable. Therefore, I will adjust part of the text in the first volume later and replace it after the changes are completed. But the original first volume will be saved and distributed to readers who may like to care about this kind of writing, that is, the original readers who like the original appearance of the story. Second, I want to imitate some religious classics. At that time, I had insomnia and read some religious-related books. These contents all had an inexplicable musical structure. The Christian Apocalypse, the Buddhist apocalypse, and the concept of doomsday, in my knowledge, these sources all came from religious texts. I wanted to write A story that is highly related to these concepts, so I have to visit the source. These contents have affected my sense of language, and I also deliberately want to imitate this musical structure. Of course, since it is my first time to write a book, I want to try more ideas, but the result of execution may not be so good. Third, I want to convey a sleep-like feeling. The first volume is a story highly related to dreams. I hope that by creating a sense of hallucination from the beginning of the text layout, it will affect the content in form. A long text with logic will appear very rational and very unlike a dream. In fact, when I was writing the first volume and saving the manuscript, I was often in a state of half-dream and half-awake, with day and night reversed. Dreams can give people a sense of intermittent dislocation. I want to convey this feeling of talking in sleep. Probably based on these three reasons, I wrote the first volume like this. I am considering revising it, but there are some shortcomings in the first volume, which are also a kind of flavor. I will improve it in the future to make the first volume straight and straightforward, and try to retain some of the original flavor as much as possible. I will make revisions to this book at different times out of the idea of ​​disseminating and improving the work. This is also due to the persistence of the work as a creator. I will stick to this book until the story is written to a state that I feel is suitable and satisfactory, and then I will start a possible second book. The content that is being served now is all based on the roughest appearance of creative impulses and original ideas. It is a kind of clay embryo that a newbie touches to create and feels out. It can also be regarded as a kind of practice and experiment based on writing. I write stories based on the overflow of my desire for expression. It seems that many readers have noticed that writing is a kind of release for me, so I will still write if I don't make money. Of course, if you can make money, it will undoubtedly stimulate more creative desire, which is also a feedback incentive. I came to write a book because I gradually couldn't find stories that fit my own interests, so I will try my best to write the story in the way I like it most. Of course, if I can try my best to reach more readers, I will also be willing to try. However, even if only some readers who like this book come to watch it without paying any money, I will continue to write it. I have considered that even if the contract is signed and put on the shelves, different versions of this story that have been revised at different times will be released for free at the appropriate time. Even if the contract is signed and put on the shelves, only the latest calibrated version will be charged. Writing novels and being a creator is, to me, an interesting game worth spending time on. I hope that more like-minded people can participate and witness the birth of a story with me, but I must be the one who gets the most enjoyment from this story, so I will never tire of doing it. Of course, all my ideas can only be implemented one by one if I overcome my naturally lazy temperament, hahaha.

I got this from another book review. I stayed up late and read the first volume. I felt it was very well written. It's better than many books on the monthly list. Keep up the good work, author. I'm optimistic about you.

It's true that the first few chapters were too confusing to read, but if I kept my patience and read on, I found that it was indeed getting better and better. It's worthy of being a king.

Come on, 10,000 recommendation votes is great, which proves that this work has weight in the hearts of many people. 👍👍

I was inspired by the fact that the author wrote hundreds of thousands of words. Those who get dozens of monthly tickets a month can sign the contract, but this one cannot. The author uses his love to write hundreds of thousands of words. He has such strong perseverance and enthusiasm. It is obvious that he has signed a contract and will definitely finish the novel. I don't know what the risks are. New authors with no resources and connections must start with a formula to get noticed. Saying this is not questioning the industry rules. After all, they do have to eat. A formulaic assembly line is indeed the best way to make money. At the same time, I think some idiosyncrasies should be allowed to exist, and they are just based on what they feel. The author is of a high standard and is quite capable of writing formulaic light novels. Keep up the good work. If the author opens a new book in the future, he can scan the list to observe how the rhythm of those novels is integrated into his own words and thoughts. But having said that, I will always support this one. 😁

Although I haven't signed a contract, it's better than what's on the monthly ticket list. Come on, say goodbye to eunuchs, and try to write 5 million words.

Why bother, the author, this book is so well written but he didn't sign a contract. As my title says, I really admire the author's persistence, but the wine is also afraid of the alley. I think this book should have had many opportunities to sign a contract. It is really a pity. I want to pick up all the cold branches and refuse to live on them. The lonely sandbank is cold and out of the mud but not stained. It is the best portrayal of the author. In today's era, there are not many people like this. Mr. Wang Zengqi is the last pure literati in China. The author also gave me such a feeling. I still want to thank the author for bringing such wonderful writing and allowing me to watch it for free. Let me tell you my feelings about this book. I feel that this is an autumn book. It has all the atmosphere of autumn, quiet but not dead, empty but not desolate, full of life but not noisy, possessing the past but not trapped in it. My favorite season is autumn. It is a quiet season, a season of hope, and a season of nostalgia. This book brings me this feeling. It gives me a moment of peace in my heart. This is the meaning of reading. It is to open up your own world, appreciate your own heart in a moment, and enjoy the charm of words. This book undoubtedly did it. Although it did not bring tears to my eyes while reading, it did move me very much. I think this book is very similar to my favorite book "The Temple of Earth and Me"

It's beautiful, and the emotional scenes are very touching. It's even more delicious with a little bit of literary talent. Sometimes different books by the same author don't have that feeling (I can only call it feeling if I'm not educated). For example, in the Kingdom of Swords, the gods felt a bit uninteresting later on, and the witches didn't mention the annual update, and they felt that they couldn't stand it. The chicken fork only appeals to the appetite, and the Book of Troubled Times and Shanheji also... It feels like a fairy looking at the sky and a magician listening to the sun. It's so hard to find romantic dramas about young people on male channels, and I really can't stand female channels. Summary: jelly grass jelly grass jelly grass jelly grass

It's all subscribed, and there are still about ten pieces left to tie it up. I think I'll start automatically subscribing later 🙂

Qi Shuangxin's writing is really good, and the emotional development with the protagonist has some twists and turns, but the development is smooth. The other female supporting characters in the back are a bit like those qcqs guides. This type is actually not popular at Qidian now (mainly because they are tired of reading it). The more popular love stories at Qidian now are like Nv Wei and Winter. The author's portrayal of the first two female protagonists has a bit of this flavor, but the style of the latter part suddenly feels a little off, but of course this book is still gray and good-looking.

Feeling inspired

Although the part about Zhang Sheng was very lengthy, it really brought this man to life. I still felt a little sad after his death.