I Returned from Dragon Ball and Became the Hokage

The main reason is that you haven't done well with three books in a row, and you are an author I like very much, so I would like to share my opinion. I have read your two previous books, One Piece and Naruto. The one in Liuyuecheng was too slow to update and I had not read most of the worlds traveled through, so I had no sense of immersion. I only read the previous content. In the book "The Rise of the Human Race in the Age of Destruction", I did not read a word and only read the comments. I think from the comments in the book circle and the number of people on the book list , the number of monthly tickets, and the 52-word synopsis, the book was completed early. From these aspects, this book should be quite a failure, so I think most fans including me and you yourself should think that writing fan fiction is your strength, and originality is your weakness. The peak of your achievements is also the two books of Dark General and Konoha Light. It can be seen that you are in After the failure of the original novel, I started writing the book "I Returned from Dragon Ball and I Became Hokage" thinking that I was not suitable for original novels. I jumped into it as soon as I started writing it, but I still wanted to write a book, so I wanted to try to return to my comfort zone and write a fanfic first. But in fact, whether it is Liuyuecheng or the current "Return from Dragon Ball and I Become Hokage", these two "fanfictions" The scores in the novels are not very good. What I want to say is that your idea is wrong. Your comfort zone is not comprehensive comics at all. The comprehensive comics are fan fiction, but they are completely different from the dark generals and the light of Konoha, which you have the best grades. The comprehensive comics are not your comfort zone. Fan novels are also different. Single world fan fiction (this single world refers to the one here) One world, instead of changing the world every dozens of chapters. For example, in a One Piece fanfic, the protagonist's system is a lottery, and he draws Naruto's skills, which is also considered a single world) and comprehensive comics are not the same type of novels at all. Your comfort zone is a single-world fanfic, not a comprehensive comic Then let me summarize your strengths, First of all, you are very good at adapting original plots. For example, the three systems of immortals, gods, and monsters native to the ninja world that you adapted from Konoha Light are quite creative and indeed reasonable. You are also good at deducing the butterfly effect caused by the arrival of the protagonist. At least I don't see anything very unreasonable. Most of the dramas you have performed The plots are very reasonable and story-telling. For example, the plot of Dark General's "Devil Sword Apophis" contains many interesting points in the book. You are also good at the writing method of "Dihua". I believe most readers who have read your two books, Dark General and Konoha's Light, know it well. I won't go into details about this. You are also good at writing about wits. I think that at the average level and above, most of the writing is quite good, especially the layout of the protagonist. You are also good at genius flow and invincible flow. The protagonists in your books have quite high talents. If I remember correctly, you have said before that only when the protagonist's talents are high can he do things well. Otherwise, if the protagonist is weak, he will be able to do anything. There is no room for manipulation, (probably this is what I mean) and when you write a character with a clear personality, what you write is very consistent with the character's image. I will give you a few examples (Garp) (Tsunade) (Blackbeard). At the same time, you also adapted very well to this kind of character who has this character but there is very little description of the character in the original work, such as Mizuki and Jhin, these two adaptations are very good (One Piece Jhin had very few plots at that time. It would be great to think of changing him into a character who pushes into the city, and the subsequent development is very reasonable). In fact, Jhin is written by a completely different person from the original work. Mizuki is also a pure adaptation, and there is a big gap between it and the original work, but I don't feel disgusted at all. The main reason is that the character is written in such a three-dimensional way. Isn't that what I read the fanfic for? The main character travels through time and the plot remains the same, and all the characters' personalities and experiences remain unchanged. So why don't I read the original work? Of course, your original character is just a pure lump (Apophis is considered part of the protagonist, not a part of it) Original characters) Adaptation is your strength, originality is your weakness. Of course, the originality I am talking about is originality from scratch. You are still very good at adapting if you are given an outline of the world and a character outline. It allows you to create a world and several characters. That is your weakness Those are the things that come to mind for the moment, maybe you still have There are other strengths, but I really haven't thought about them now. In short, these are actually your real "comfort zone". The main reason for your success is your adaptation of the plot, your deduction of the butterfly effect of the protagonist, the protagonist's various wits and layouts in the plot, and the performance of the original character perfectly matches the character image. This These are the basis of your performance. These are all based on a ready-made world view and ready-made characters for you to adapt, so you are good at doujin. Then the genius flow, the invincible flow, and the Dihua are just your bonus points. With the bonus points, there is no impact, but it will not hurt your bones. They are just bonus points, and there is no ready-made world or ready-made characters for you. When you adapt it, you step out of your comfort zone. For example, your first fantasy book (I really forgot what it was called) is pure and simple. Your original novel, "The Rise of the Human Race in the Age of Destruction," is also pure and simple. And the full-length comic seems to be your comfort zone, but in fact it can only be half of it at most. If you are writing a full-length comic, is it a world? Only about a hundred pictures at most? Doesn't a book require at least 5 to 10 worlds to travel back and forth, so how can you use your strengths? How to adapt the plot in 100 chapters? How about the butterfly effect? It's only enough to fight one wave and run away, and you can visit a world twice at most. How to layout it? How many original characters can appear in 100 chapters? The space is so short, how many times can they appear? No matter how in line with the character image, he will only appear a few times anyway, and you will not be able to bring out your strengths in this area. As for the genius stream, invincible stream, and Dihua, as I said before, they are bonus points, not the foundation. There is no other foundation to build the foundation to more than 60 points. , Genius flow, Invincible flow, Dihua, just add a few points, you can't even reach the passing line of 60, and you can't support a book. On the surface, you are returning to the comfort zone. In fact, it is half of the comfort zone at most. In fact, this is also the case. The book "Hai" you wrote in the comfort zone "The Dark General of Thieves" and "The Light of Konoha" are your best books. "The World Begins from Liuyue City" and "I Become Hokage After Returning from Dragon Ball" which are within half of your comfort zone can only be said to be a little better than a complete rush. Compared with your best books, the results are much worse, and completely The book "The Rise of the Human Race in the Age of Destruction" written out of the comfort zone is completely pure and simple. Basically 9 out of 10 people in the book circle are saying that this book is not good, and no one has read it. Why is no one reading it? Why are the old fans reading it also saying that this book is not good? It's because you have thrown away all the things you are good at and are simply stepping out of your comfort zone to challenge what you are least good at. It's like asking you to write romance and asking you to only write emotional scenes with a few female protagonists. Can you do it? As for "The Rise of the Human Race in the Age of Destruction", do you really feel that there is a big difference between writing it and asking you to directly write romance? To be honest, if the author was not you, I would have no desire to read this book Finally, I want to say , I suggest that whether the book "I Returned from Dragon Ball and I Became Hokage" is finished or eunuch, after finishing it, if you want to open the next book, I suggest that your next book should be a fanfic of a single world, and return to your comfort zone first. It is actually quite torture to keep writing for such a long time, write so many books, and get such bad results, so I recommend you to return to your comfort zone and then write a fanfic. I recommend writing some fan fiction that has an audience, such as Pirates, Naruto, Douluo, and Pokémon (these examples are just to say that some people read them, not to say that they must be written). It is not recommended to write fan fiction like Death and Bone King at all. It has nothing to do with whether the original works are good or not. The main reason is that no one reads their fan fiction. I have never seen a successful fan novel about Death and Bone King, while Pirates and Fire There are so many achievements in Shadows, Douluo, and Pokémon that they are too numerous to count. Of course, if you want to use love to generate electricity, just pretend I didn't say it Then, I don't recommend you write Naruto, I recommend you write Pirates, you " The book "Light of Konoha" has actually written everything that can be written, and Naruto is actually a completed work. Now I can only write the content of the sequel Boruto or write system stories, or write about the protagonist who is not from Konoha? A protagonist of Uchiha origin? I guess you haven't read much of Boruto and you don't have the energy or interest to read it all in order to write a book. Moreover, the audience of Boruto is definitely much smaller than the audience of Naruto Shippuden. I don't think you like to write system stories. In fact, it is difficult to have any new ideas in the plot But if you write about pirates, there is still something to say. , Although "Dark General" is your peak book, you still have to write about One Piece from two aspects. First: One Piece is always updated. When you first wrote "Dark General", the plot of One Piece was much more updated than it is now. There is completely new stuff to write. As long as you complain more about the garbage plot of Wano written by Oda There are many people watching it, and then sorting out the plots other than these garbage plots, and writing around them. Compared with "Dark General", it is a completely new story Second: When writing a pirate fanfic, you can write about the navy, pirates, revolutionary army, and the three camps. "Dark General" in your navy style is the ceiling, but there are still pirates. , Revolutionary Army can be written. Although the first Pirates fanfic was about the Pirates camp, the setting has been completely different after many years, and the writing in that book was also average. It was not as good as the "Dark General" one, and it was far from reaching the ceiling So I suggest you open a Pirates fanfic where the protagonist is the Pirates lineup or the Revolutionary Army lineup.

Uchiha Madara did not betray Konoha. On the contrary, Konoha betrayed Uchiha Madara. Uchiha Madara was not a fool like Senju Hashirama. He left Konoha only after seeing clearly.

How well written Longinus was. The black goat who wanted to be the king of the world put on the white sheepskin of a saint-savior and deceived the whole world, and ascended the throne with everyone's blessings.

Why is it written like a manual, so dry?

I just want to complain about why fairy beans, omnipotent capsules, weight-bearing bracelets, qi, cave waves, and dancing sky skills are not weakened and invalidated. The immortal body is weakened. Why can people in the prisoner of delicious food be able to channel all the snakes normally?

I read it for the second time, and when I read Chapter 50, I remembered why I didn't continue reading last time, because I couldn't figure out why the transplantation of gourmet cells was arranged. Gourmet cells are very powerful, but they also have serious side effects, especially how many worlds can satisfy the delicacies of gourmet cells, and the author did not describe the idea of ​​removing the side effects of gourmet cells. Ming got Goku's hair and Piccolo's blood at the beginning. I couldn't figure out why he would get the food cells first. I can only say that it is limited to free and just to pass the time.

I don't know whether it's because my requirements for the quality of books have improved in recent years, or whether your skills, as the author, have declined. Anyway, it doesn't work. The Dark General back then finished the book after seeing the ending, but gave up halfway through Light of Konoha. I can't even read the free part of this book, and I won't want to take advantage of it after the two-day limit. The Dark General once left a very good impression on me, so I hope to see a better version of you in the future.

Since Pirates and Naruto are both your comfort zone, why not write a double-crossing article 🙂 I have never found the ideal Pirates-Naruto double-crossing.

What does this novel say? In the later period, the strength expanded too fast, and it expanded to an unknown height during the time of Hokage. Especially for high-level anime like Jin Gourmet, what is the most important thing? The author's combat performance is not very good, and it's not very enjoyable to watch.

This is the author who really wrote The Light of Konoha. How do you feel that he has been replaced?