One Person: This Yin Wu Lei Is Awesome

One person has the highest level of fandom. Beyond the barriers of the original work

I write a variety comic but what do you say about the heroine of the TV series 😅? The author really likes Zhao Jinmai

The whole Trump thing is really uncomfortable to watch.

The first two pictures are stills from "The Beginning"

The poisonous point is that you will reveal yourself as a time traveler. If the protagonist has invincible strength, you will be exposed. But the problem is that this is a hodgepodge world that also integrates the Marvel world. The protagonist's strength may not even be able to blow up the city, right? It would actually be okay if it was exposed to an expert like Gu Yi who didn't care, but to Zhang Chulan? I have also been to the X-Men Academy, so the peeping bald man must have known about it, and there was no transition at all. On the previous page, I had just passed the cliff with a few ropes hanging on the Dragon Tiger Mountain. On the next page, I started competing with Zhang Lingyu. After the previous page, or after beating Zhang Lingyu, on the next page, I knelt down to Zhang Zhiwei to ask Yin Wulei? Please tell me, shouldn't we find a quiet place to meet alone later? There was no transition at all. In the end, Xia He still liked Xia He, but many people probably didn't like her. But anyway, I was greedy for her body 😏

It was fine in the beginning, but after it was released, generally, the protagonist was a little constrained. It seemed that there were many relationships, but in fact, most of these relationships only prevented the protagonist from doing some things. He was very strong towards the Wang family in the front, but he promoted the Wang family in the back, and there was a sense of separation between being arrogant at the front and respectful at the back. I said I was looking for a Taoist friend, and I wrote chapter after chapter as if I were a nanny, but I lost all my composure. There are more than ten chapters written about the Wang family. It's not that the writing is bad, but it gives people an inexplicable and strange feeling. Overall it's pretty good

Lsq becomes the heroine... And then sews so many worlds into it. Which one can lsq compare to? Not as smart as Hermione, not as courageous as Lu Linglong, not to mention good-looking. A bunch of heroines and supporting characters can beat her. Natsume and his grandma can crush lsq in terms of good looks... I really don't understand.

It makes me laugh to death as a time traveler. How many times can you survive?

Don't sew. You can wear more clothes, but don't sew. Once you sew, the story line will be messed up.

I feel like if you don't have the layout skills and writing skills, you shouldn't cram in too many things.

Are you broken at writing? I was completely confused after reading Chapter 4. Not to mention the pleasure, let's just say that this dialogue also has a big problem. Who has a long dialogue? Loosely eloquent? Do you think you are debating? You don't need to use so many words to explain. Writing a novel is not a thesis. Writing a thesis is about factual evidence and complexity. Writing a novel is about simplicity and beauty. The words can be plain or hazy, but they must not be piled up. For example, if the protagonist reveals his identity as a time traveler, you can definitely Let's say that the protagonist in his dream saw a Dharma-ending world with no powers or spiritual practice. The culture of that world was developed, and he even saw you in one of the comic books. This can also avoid fatalism. You must know that the content of the comics is an established fact, but the world the protagonist lives in is not!

At the very least, you have to pretend to be Zhang to have a chance to learn the Five Thunder Techniques. Comics or animations. Which of the people who learned the Five Thunder Method is Zhang?

It doesn't feel like it was written by a new author, it just has too much moisture. It is recommended to invest 6 cards first to test the water. I would like to give you some advice, don't mix dialects into the text. Mandarin text expressions do not have the flavor of dialects, but it will affect the perception. Just like "Hama Pi, there are so many cutscenes" that non-Sichuanese won't get the laughs. 😁Come on! 😁

This is about connections. .

I think the protagonist's madness is not strong enough, but looks like an arrogant clown. Later, I think we can change his character a little, to the kind of restrained madness, the madness that looks down on the world, more like the old master when he was young. This way he will be very strong, otherwise it will feel a bit awkward! Invisible pretense is the way to go 👍👍👍 Come on

I've read Chapter 4 and I still can't stand it. Why don't you read another book?

Leifa will not pass on his surname. Your surname is not Zhang

Let's stock up on this first, maybe we'll become eunuchs.

After deviating from the one-person plot, you can see for yourself what the writing is, and a lot of inexplicable and bizarre plots have been added, like a headless chicken.

The dialogues of blockbusters, the settings of blockbusters, your... Second-generation logic is acceptable, but it is too dry, and it looks awkward, and the dialogue is really second-guessing.

Why is this book getting worse and worse as I write it?

Saw Chapter 5. It feels more and more biased,

If his surname is not Zhao or Zhang, can he still teach the thunder method?

Why did you delete the comment? I thought I didn't say anything very sharp, maybe even a fairy grass can't stand it, right?

So it's not just one person but another person?

Come on, author, it's a little flawed but very good.

What the hell is that with his eyes round and his feet jumping in anger?

Have you really never thought about writing the protagonist directly according to Infinite's character?