Xuan Jian: Chi Family Treasure Tree

Were you still full of energy in promoting books before? Persistence means being open-minded and able to endure

Not bad: the writing is smooth and has the air of a great master. (I'm not exaggerating, it's a conservative estimate. Of course, it may be due to fandom. You can judge how much the ingredients are.) Question 1: Who are the protagonists Chi and Ning? Anyway, I have no impression. Of course, I read the original work half a year ago, so these may come later. (My suggestion, these two impressions are too low. Choose the area around Wangyue Lake to have a deeper impression and more people to see it. For example, An... This genius with a deceitful personality, you might as well write about him. They are all geniuses, and An's impression is profound, and the key readers are regretful. What is the purpose of fan fiction? It is about the regrets of the original work and the changes.) Question 2: The issue of sense of substitution. In fact, I think the world view needs to be laid out step by step. Even if it is a fan fiction, I understand what you are saying, but I still feel that something is missing. Not to mention the passers-by. (The world view and background of the world are not enough laid out. There is no description of appearance and no vivid pictures. You can't be lazy and let the original work be written for you. Can't you even copy it? This is your world and it should be shaped by you.) Question 3: 2...2? 2! You changed the perspective in the article and wrote 2 directly and abruptly? I am so angry that I am speechless. This is a very basic question that should not be made. It is too ridiculous and should not be done. I feel like you forgot to delete it, because this shouldn't be done, but you forgot to delete it. Didn't you check the side before posting? Points will be deducted. After reading the first chapter: It turned out to be a wedge... Comment, deleted, I don't know what you want to express, who is the protagonist, are you imitating the time traveler like the fake time traveler Xuan Jian, why did you get such a supporting role, it hurts to be idle, I want to watch you tell a story, not to show off. (I have a poor memory, so I commented while reading, please forgive me for some inconsistencies. No modifications, because they are all true thoughts at the time.) Question 4: The first chapter of the text is here again, and it is more serious. There is no character introduction, world background or foreshadowing, just inexplicable who fights whom, what realm, and the same sentence, this is the world you wrote, you have to shape it yourself. Forget that you readers have read the complete original work. (What is the difference between your writing method and excerpting a paragraph from the original work and then writing it? To read your novel, do you have to read the original work to this point before you can read it?)

Chi Gou Ben Gou is here to support me, come on, brother

Later, I felt that the author was tired of coding.

It's not that easy to generate electricity for love, so let's make a cover first

They say a million-word sermon can be preached, but you wrote more than 10,000 words, so why did you cut it?

In fact, the writing is really good, these two chapters