Mortal: Starting from the Holy Son of the Demon Sect

It is recommended to have more female protagonists. Recommended collection: Nangong Wan, Xin Ruyin and Xiaomei, Dong Xuan'er, Chen Qiaoqian, Hong Fu, Zhong Weiniang and her master Jiang Yun, Nishang Fairy, Zi Ling and her mother Wang Menzhu, Fan Jingmei, Zhuo Ruting, Yuan Yao, Yanli, Wen Madam, Ling Yuling and her mother Wen Qing, Yinyue, Bingfeng, Han Zhixian, Mei Ning, Wen Siyue, Liu Yu, Gongsun Xing, Shidie Fairy, Xiao Cui'er, Nie Ying, Yan Ruyan, Bingpo Fairy, Song Yu, Tianlan Saint Lin Yin Ping, Mulan Prairie Saint Music Master, Feng Bing, Mu Peiling, Bai Yaoyi, Saint Ancestor Yuancha, Saint Ancestor Baohua, Dai'er, Fairy Black Phoenix, Jin Yue, Xianxian, Liu Leer, Bai Suyuan, Mo Caihuan, Mo Yuzhu, Mo Fengwu, The four wives of the Mohist family (Yan, Li, Liu, Wang)

Tsk tsk, it really gets more exquisite as you go to the back, why don't you grab it?

This book is pretty good, it doesn't have any minor or major flaws, and its grades are pretty good. The reason why the work is not popular is because the number of readers is too small. Nowadays, readers are divided into those who lick Han Li and those who don't. The author's writing at the beginning looks like he wants to lick Han Li. Those who don't lick Han Li basically don't read it. The remaining readers who lick Han Li find that the protagonist doesn't lick Han Li either. These licking readers also leave. The number of readers who are left indifferent is really too small. It may take a lot of effort to accumulate readers, and it will definitely take a long time.

Even if the harem novel is a harem novel, it should have some plot. Mortal's original novel has millions of words and didn't include much about the heroine. You've written so many chapters about the heroine before it's even been published. There shouldn't be any plot at all. The plot behind you is all about refining treasures, practicing, and having women, refining treasures, practicing, and having women in an infinite loop. The plot is not pushed at all. How about traveling across the sea of ​​stars and downloading dungeons to show off? Even if you reveal to those Chaos Xinghai monks that you are a descendant of the Great Jin Dynasty and have the blessing of the Ancestor of the Transformation God, it will be more satisfying than the bland plots that follow.

A copy of Xutian Temple was watered down for thirty chapters, and the book was abandoned.

Write less about women, these chapters are all about women. 😅

The only beauties in the human world are the ones Han Sheng met? If the protagonist lived as another Han Li, wouldn't it be equivalent to reviewing the original work?

Nowadays, mortals are the same as the old slaves. This book is a good idea compared with those old slaves.

It is better to write a book by the reborn Wen Tianren. It should have a sense of oppression, the upgrade speed should be normal, and the cheating should not be too high. The six paths are above the head, and Han Li is hit with a big disaster. It should be just like Han Li's 50-50. After fighting with Han Li, I heard that the land of the underworld teleported to Tiannan to escape the six paths' evil hands! Then the Valley of the Fallen Demon released the ancient demons, and Kunwu Mountain plotted the Yuan Cha. During the Yuan Dynasty, he went back to conspire with the Two Saints, and collected Ling Yuling to kill the Six Paths! Conquer the Six Wings in the spirit world and go against Han Li! Han Li is the anti-hero, Wen Tianren is the male protagonist of the devil 🤭🤭🤭🤭

The first book is still new, and the results of successful signings are not bad. Although this book is the second, the results are average, but it is also signed. I wrote another book: I Refined a Mortal to Become an Immortal. I was originally planning to take over this one, and I actually had enough time to write the two books together. Unexpectedly, the editor did not sign it, and it was put into the public library and was scooped up by other editors. I felt so sad. For those who are interested, you might as well go and take a look. If you think it is good, vote for it and continue to read it. Thank you.

Personal suggestions on the creation of female characters in this book At present, the trend of the harem characters in this book is becoming more and more obvious, and the images are becoming thinner and more similar. This is gradually moving away from the author's hope that the harem should have its own characteristics and not be a vase. In addition, there may be more to collect in the future (I personally hope that the author would rather lack than overuse, be good enough and can actually help the protagonist before collecting 😌), this issue feels quite critical. I boldly give some superficial tips that I personally think, hoping to help the author a little bit: 1. Deepen the anchor point of the character (the unique appearance of each female character, the difference in personality, the difference in skills and magic weapons) (1) Appearance characteristics. A character anchors one or two characteristics, such as which leg is longer and which is bigger 😏, so that readers can immediately outline the characteristics of its external image when the name is mentioned. Of course, avoid using the same angle over and over again. When writing about tallness, you can directly write about tallness, slenderness, and tallness. You can also compare different female characters to highlight their characteristics, and you can also show them through daily actions and fighting postures. (2) Personality differences. You can simply give each character a relatively fixed personality, such as Zhuo Qing is cold and arrogant, Wang Huixin is tenacious, Fan Yaorao is charming, Yan is innocent and brilliant, and Yuan is restrained and tenacious. You can also use multiple perspectives, such as other people's perspectives and response styles. Of course, the character constantly changes with the development of the plot. The purple spirit in your article is very obvious (although the change is very unsuccessful and the character traits are all gone 🤔). It can completely be Green Tea's scheming → wise and resourceful, using wisdom to help the protagonist break the situation. (3) Kung Fu, Magical Weapons and Fighting Techniques Currently, the female character Mie Qing Yang Ji Yin showed her face and hunted monsters twice, but the description was quite brief, and then it disappeared... After reading it twice, I still don't know the skills, magic weapons and fighting styles of the concubines. If you bring more female characters, you can download the dungeon. If you have more palaces, you can only bring one or two. (You can download the dungeon if there is an unexpected accident. It can always be designed. Refer to the original book on how to download the dungeon while eating hot pot and singing 🥱). When fighting, you can show off the characteristics of the skills and magic weapons: Xuanyin Sutra Insidious and good at sneak attacks, the Qingyang magic skill explodes with damage, and the illusion of the girl's skill traps the enemy (I made it up 🤤)... The same goes for magic weapons. Swing Yanli's hammer a few more times, Yuan Yao's golden thunder bamboo arrows shoot a few more times... I have repeatedly emphasized that it is not a vase, wouldn't such an excellent woman know how to use it? As soon as the plot is pushed, it will be left aside to eat dust (complaint: if there is no mustard space, it is okay to build a two-story boat. Picking up and dropping off concubines is like carrying luggage 🤫) Second, increase the subjective initiative of the characters. Don't always make arrangements for them by the protagonist, making it like raising animals in captivity 😥. (People will always have emotions, past, and social interaction, so they will have desires and motivations, and they will design their own plots.) (1) Caused by the character's past experience (cause and effect). For example, if there is hatred to be avenged, past troubles come to your door, or even the skills and magic weapons are involved in cause and effect. Just like Zi Ling wants to seek revenge from Ji Yin, the subjective initiative of the characters is very obvious at this time, and the plot can be easily advanced 🤭. (2) Motivation for improvement in cultivation. In order to find their own opportunities to break through, the female characters need to find materials, collect spiritual beasts, sense Qi and temper their bodies, etc. The protagonist cannot decide whether they are suitable or not. The protagonist can just take the initiative to follow 🙂. (3) Help and support each other. The protagonist had an accident, was caught, trapped, poisoned, and seriously injured. How will the harem beauties help the protagonist? This can easily enrich the image and reflect the value of the female character. I am exhausted after writing so much.

This book is quite good, but there is one flaw. It lacks communication and discussion with fellow monks, and the lack of pretentiousness in front of them. Didn't the author notice? The writing is all in front of the heroine, the supporting character, and her subordinates, and there are very few descriptions of fellow monks. For example: Unexpectedly, fellow Taoist Feng possesses magical powers at such a young age. So-and-so is really ashamed of himself. Why don't you follow the story of so-and-so's cave, and you and I, both casual cultivators, can discuss the Tao. (That is, being friends with the protagonist) Another example: "Great Elder, there has been a lot of turmoil in Chaos Xinghai recently. The Qingyang Sect was destroyed not long ago, and the old demon Qingyang died silently." Elder Wu Xinggong said respectfully, with a hint of uneasiness in his brows. "It doesn't matter, now the two forces of good and evil are fighting happily, and the death of the old ghost has greatly weakened the evil. All we have to do is sit on the mountain and watch the fight between tigers and tigers." Jin Kui snorted and smiled, with a cold light in his eyes and a hint of depth. "And with the two saints of the Star Palace here, no matter how panicked these demon thieves are, they can't affect us at all." Jin Kui turned around and stood with his hands behind his back. "Yes, Great Elder Shengming" Elder Xinggong surnamed Wu bowed his hands in humility. I saw Jin Kui turning around and saying, "As for the strange Nascent Soul monk who killed the Qingyang Gate, I think he is quite capable. Go and investigate, and don't provoke him easily." (Similar to this writing method, write a story, write out the conspiracy of the other party, and lay out the underlying logic) I think this enriches the plot, and can also explain in advance that the protagonist and Xingong will have intersections and disputes in the future, so the background of the story is laid out. All you have to do is follow the story as you wish. This is my advice to the author, I hope you can see it.

Friends, it is very important to read new books. Although my expectations are not high, I am still quite interested in this book. Of course, my writing skills are a bit poor, and sometimes I can only rely on my imagination. If you like it, please read the latest chapters. Thank you.

Dear loyal readers, dozens of chapters have been written in this book and it will be on the shelves soon. If you have a good picture of a character, you may wish to submit it to your friends for a look. If the image is excellent, the author will look it up regularly. Friends who have beautiful pictures, please participate enthusiastically!

People from the Yinluo Sect also look too yin

First, speed is a must

I just bought all the subsequent chapters. Please don't give me the eunuch. I know you are writing another one. I am also reading it. Now I plan to read your book first. But don't let me down. Overall, it is quite to my liking.

After looking at the character modeling of Yin Luo Zong produced by the production team, I have to say that it is indeed handsome.

The content is okay and the plot is good! Chaotic Star Sea, Ling Yuling, Zi Ling, and Mei Ning

When I saw the episode about killing Ji Yin, your ideas and the protagonist's skills and plug-ins were quite novel, and they developed more comfortably than other cliche plots. But your description of the heroine's concubines is almost meaningless. Your current description makes it difficult to distinguish the differences between Yuanyao, Yanli, Fan Jingmei and Zhuo Ruting. Every description is of the slave family and the young master. The characters of these four people are too superficial. Now, the four of them don't feel like they have any distinctive personalities, and so does Zi Ling. The protagonist Zi Ling in the first part has some characteristics, but after she is brought into the house, she is no different from the first four people. The writing on fighting and other things is better than yours on the heroine.

I still want to say sorry to the readers who are following this book. As everyone knows, my book's performance was average when it entered V. My follow-up subscriptions have always been good, but the total number of subscriptions has never been able to increase. In the end, I had to stop updating after three months. Now I have some problems with my previous new book, and I am often harassed by all kinds of people. I think I got a lot of reports when I counterattacked. I was banned on both platforms for half a month, so I was even less in the mood to continue writing. However, I have talked with the editor in the past two days. Because I have always been the first publisher on the Qidian side, Qread can remove it from the shelves. After I learned about it, it was removed from the shelves on the spot. There should be no problems in the future. In the future, there will be no chaos affecting everyone's energy, and the efficiency of coding and updating should be higher. I originally had the first drafts of several imaginative books, and I was thinking of publishing the almost complete version of Mortal, but judging from the current situation, I can only postpone it. Finally, thank you all for your continued support of this book, thank you.

The protagonist's surname is Feng. Could he be a descendant of Old Monster Feng?

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