The Person Is in the Shape of the Moon, and the Beginning Is Mei Zhen

Let me talk about the conclusion first. The author wants to write a good result a little too much. First of all, there is nothing wrong with the outline itself. Use RE0's power and Xingyue's world view to cross-introduce the comprehensive comic story line. As long as the follow-up is written step by step and the discussion of good and evil is done well, there will be no big problem. P. S. From what I've seen so far, because you've described a lot of settings and content related to Christianity, such as the Hell chapter to be written next, I temporarily believe that you want to quote a discussion on the concept of good and evil based on the protagonist's story. Secondly, given that the title of the novel contains Mei Zhen, and most of the first volume contains her scenes. I assume that she is the heroine of the novel, and hope that she will have a follow-up plot. Otherwise, it is recommended to change the title to avoid offending readers due to title fraud. P. S. This point is based on the fact that the author attaches great importance to readers' opinions and perceptions. Finally, some suggestions on the author's style. The novel itself is created based on the outline set by the author himself, so essentially the content of the novel is a reflection of the author's own views and stance. Excellent novels are based on their own originality. Specifically, they can be originality of content, originality of subject matter, originality of writing method, and, most generally, originality of idea. If you want to write a successful work and achieve good results, it is a good thing to refer to the opinions of readers more, but it is too much to focus too much on the opinions of readers. The idea is something that belongs to the author, and it is especially important to you, the author who writes about fan fiction. The beginning of the first volume does not have any unnecessary delay in the description of the protagonist and Mei Zhen and the development of the plot. Instead, it is just a rush in the middle period. Author, if you think people don't want to see this part of the plot, then fast-forward and then fast-forward, which obviously destroys the integrity of the story in the first volume. If everyone only chooses the content they like to read, why not let the AI ​​summarize it and then choose the chapters they like to watch and pay for it? This is the same as when some people watch "A Dream of Red Mansions" and jump directly to "Grandma Liu Enters the Grand View Garden". Of course, it is possible to make amends for the finished first volume. In subsequent updates, it is enough to recall what happened at that time through flashbacks of previously appeared characters, which can also make up for the lack of portrayal of character growth. Overall, I personally think this novel is well-written and interesting. Readers' opinions are of secondary importance to novel creation. The most important thing in novel creation is the author's personal creative purpose and the integrity of the outline. Specifically, the most important thing is to tell your story well, and readers' opinions are just the icing on the cake. If you are worried about writing some "poisonous points", it is better to read more novels with good scores and learn other people's story structures before writing. As long as there are no problems when creating the outline, then you can write according to your own outline.

What a pity, this book may be fine for us oldies, but it is not suitable for today's edgy atmosphere and impatient readers.

It really seems a bit confusing. Has the author himself read the novel he wrote? The protagonist explodes so quickly in the early stage. Then even the protagonist's role basically disappeared. Once it disappeared, it lasted for dozens of chapters. The protagonist appeared in a dozen pictures in total. Are you kidding me?

Although, this Metatronic angel seems to be from the Judean religion and is also regarded as apocryphal by Christianity. No one in Judaism recognizes it.

I'm afraid the love between the two will not lie from the beginning to the end in the Holy Grail War 😠

The idea is good, but the writing is so messed up that people who read it can't figure it out. It feels like I'm writing whatever comes to mind. It's quite boring.

Go to work. The protagonist in the front can still use skills, but the protagonist in the back can't control his skills.

It's really a narcotic. I was attracted by Mei Zhen. Rather, the attraction of your book is the plot of falling in love with Mei Zhen. In the end, there is nothing, the protagonist is even more invisible, and there is no desire to read it. To be honest, your book is already on the verge of cutting off (it's nothing special to tell the truth)

Just go and sit at the same table with tomatoes.

It was too rushed, and the first volume ended too quickly. A lot of things feel like they were just brushed off. It starts from where the protagonist becomes the evil nothingness of mankind and Mei Zhen self-destructs, and ends with the Holy Sword wielding the split cannon. The story moves forward quickly like a torrent and is told in a straightforward manner. Moreover, the protagonist's state is not clear during the process. The description of the protagonist's state is mostly explained through the dialogue between Mei Li and Gudazi. I vaguely remember only a short paragraph describing the protagonist's state from the protagonist's perspective. Is the protagonist fighting against nothingness? How or why he is fighting against nothingness? I don't know at all. I seemed to be standing in a distant place, watching the protagonist turn into a human evil void, and then all the heroic spirits joined forces to fight against the human evil void, and then it ended. Specifically what the protagonist is thinking, I have no way of knowing what the protagonist is thinking since he left that note. From that moment on, the story becomes a body dominated by the protagonist's unconsciousness, or a war between another thing called [Human Evil] and heroic spirits, while the protagonist himself disappears from the story. The abnormal appearance of all the evil in this world is not clearly described. After Arthur's light cannon struck down, I subconsciously thought it was not over yet. But when I look back, I jump directly to the next world. It gave me an abrupt feeling of ending like this and dying like this. Mei Zhen's development is a little more like the Holy Grail War in the previous chapter, but her weakness self-explodes later and reappears near the end. There is too little shaping. The problem is the same as the protagonist, but the tool attribute is more important. Summing it over in one stroke is a big problem later, and it is easy for people to look at it without knowing why. Chaldea seemed to appear to have a conversation with Mellie and explain the situation. How did the Kingdom of Shadows appear? The background should be the fading of modern mysteries. How did Golden Sparkle break through the restrictions of the Holy Grail War and create Avalon as a Servant? How was the relationship between Golden Sparkle and Tokiomi handled? Did Kiritsugu and Kenny die during the period when the protagonist turned human and evil? Judging from the previous chapters, it's actually not bad. But the subsequent development was too fast, which indirectly caused me to feel that there was no beginning or end in many places, and I did not fully explain it clearly. It's good to listen to readers' opinions, but you should carefully consider whether to change your content. I feel that the speed suddenly increases later, which leads to a bad impression.

The writing is not good and the author will not change his mind.

The most essential thing is that the writing is boring. It's not about which volume it is, but the writing in the second half is boring. After reading each chapter, I feel the same as if I haven't read it. After the protagonist comes into contact with the evil in this world and goes offline, write a group portrait to fight the boss? It's too bland and boring to watch. The last part of this volume, I thought that after writing more than 50 chapters and setting up the protagonist after the protagonist is offline, the more than 20 chapters will be interesting, but it turns out that I didn't have any impression after reading it once. Teacher Qiao pulled out the gun, Michael came on board, and then, I had no impression. The writing was too boring? You laid the groundwork for almost an average chapter, almost half of it was boring, and the ending was so boring. It doesn't matter which volume it is, the main reason is that the writing is boring. Even if it is the third volume, I went to read the first two volumes specifically for you. This volume is essentially boring. Or do you mean that my first two volumes were interesting enough to attract readers. This is not my first volume, this is my third. It doesn't matter if it's just boring or boring, everyone is like this. I emphasize again, it doesn't matter which volume it is, the important thing is that it doesn't look good! It doesn't look good! Do you understand? Boring and not good looking! Why do you people who write books still have unspoken rules for starting from the beginning, so that the third volume can be written poorly?

I would rather you wear the three big blood and die in the sea of ​​​​fire, at least have you heard of it?

Great, there is also a story about Mei Zhen as the heroine 🙂

The main character hasn't come out yet, so this book can be considered GG.

Brother, your writing style can't save you at all. As I read the whole article, I only felt like I was reading the outline, and nothing else 😅

It was written too fast, and I feel that the author was still affected by some comments. Originally, the fate chapter should have at least a hundred chapters including the first reincarnation, but in the end, there was only this little.

There are too many characters written later. In fact, there is no need for Chaldea to come in (they can't do anything if they come in. It is better to describe the crowned heroic spirits from the perspective of survivors. The other heroic spirits can enter the plot earlier without being so careful)

What are you writing about in the latest chapter? It's inexplicable. I feel like I just write whatever comes to my mind.

This book is also called "The world is destroyed because of being too lazy" 🙂

What is Hell Inn? Seems a bit unpopular

This book is the third volume I originally expected for another book, not the first volume, so it seemed a bit groupy at first. Since I didn't pass the first two volumes, I started the third volume directly.

After reading the first volume, it's a complete account, even poorly written, and the narrative seems very tiring.

But I suggest you change the title. After all, I'm not always in the spotlight.

By the way, in the world view of Xingyue, ORT is stronger than Archangels such as Mei Zhen/Michael. If Quan Sheng ORT cannot beat these titles, angels will just fall by the wayside.

The classics are invincible, so go to CB. It's not impossible, but it's just this kind of pretentiousness that slaps you in the face, and there are too many CB novels that make me feel bored.

The process is not well written, but the outline is not boring at all.

Why is the author updating so slowly?

A mess😒

What's going on? It used to be two chapters a day, why is it only one chapter now?