The Second Best in the World Starts with Lu Xiaofeng!

It's very abrupt and unnatural. The male protagonist also inexplicably dotes on this original female protagonist who has lost her moral character. It's just the author's own pleasure. And there is a high probability that the first few chapters were written by ghostwriters, and the value of the Jianghu freehand writing in the first few chapters begins to increase.

There is a reason why Gu Long's novels cannot beat Golden. His book, just reading a few chapters, is extremely amazing. But after reading the whole book, it is very ordinary and the story is not strong. I have read ten chapters of your book so far. The writing style is very Gu Long and the writing is quite good. However, the narrative is more streamlined than Gu Long and the reading experience is not good. Sigh... I really miss the martial arts novels of my youth. There are so many amazing ones, but it's a pity that I haven't finished them all. Nowadays, the martial arts theme of Qidian is not very popular and there are not many good-looking works.

How? Did he sign a slave contract by mistake?

Why do people think that Shangguan is stronger than Ye Gucheng? It's just to strengthen the protagonist and to strengthen the villain without any thought.

It's not bad, but the main character's emotional line is really out of nowhere.

The protagonist inexplicably likes Bibi

If combined with other original martial arts works, the combat power will easily collapse.

I'm not a fan of Li Xunhuan, so I can't stand the grinding.

Alas, this guy, Lao Ma, is doing a lot of harm to people and is misleading his children.

Why do authors now like to write about mixed martial arts? Alas! Mixed martial arts itself is illogical.

Cut after the third update...😒

No, buddy, just write like this piece of abuse and end it as soon as possible. Also, can you not make the protagonist look like a native? Otherwise, you just don't write about time travel.

The writing is great, but the plot develops a little too fast

I've said it before, mixed martial arts is a dead end.

It has some basic skills, and for today's broad fan martial arts, it is still watchable; but the original character creation is not good, and there are behavioral logic problems; although the author seems to deliberately write less about emotional aspects, but everything written makes people feel abrupt and tight. In the end, I didn't quite understand the change of Qing Mo Shou's surname.

Why don't you clearly state in the introduction that it's mixed martial arts? 😭 waste my time

The purpose of mixed martial arts is to increase the interest of the plot, to enhance combat power, and to enhance the mystery of the world. The fun part is either fighting, relying on prophets to use plot wits, or constant adventures to enhance combat power. If it's even worse, some even have a harem. He Jianzheng's ideological output or something, your protagonist is just on vacation, the main line is walking around, wandering around, always feeling like something is missing, the world background is not strong enough, the main character's purpose when he appears is not strong enough, making friends is not strong enough, the fighting force is not strong enough... How to put it, it is similar to the lack of necessity. The protagonist's behavior feels that the success rate is only 50%. It is very ordinary and does not pass the passing line. But the author wrote 50% is enough. It is very casual. If there is no necessity, it lacks rationality and rationality. Read The author lacks a sense of immersion. It feels like the author has written the wrong subject and the style of painting is wrong. The author is suitable for writing about children, or anime themes such as healing and cute pets. Martial arts did not write that feeling. The protagonist is Wen Zheng, but the overall style of painting does not have a "competitive" feeling.

Isn't this updated as soon as it's released? It's a bit of a trap

At first I thought he was a new writer, but he turned out to be another wolf in sheep's clothing.