Lingque's Visit to the World

I am the author Xiao Zhai. I have been researching for a long time and finally got the account. Hahahahaha (sorry I am so stupid) Because it is my first time to write a long novel, there are many parts that I am not familiar with, so thank you for your understanding of the plot, characters, and my update speed! (Because I am in a gray pit industry, and sometimes I am under a lot of pressure and time is tight, so I cannot update in time, please understand) If you have any feelings or doubts about the plot (I feel that I may be a bit of a Riddler, sometimes I bury too many foreshadowings), you can tell me~ If you have suggestions and opinions, I will also take a good look~ As I said, I look forward to your comments!

The opening chapter introduces the destruction of the Sharman race through a dream, and the protagonist is forced to take on a mission and is caught by the demon-catching gang. After waking up from the dream, he escapes on his own and continues directly to the first chapter. The writing is interesting, but the plot changes so quickly that you don't know what to say. In just two chapters, there are at least four characters and a lot of dialogue between the characters. There are too many characters and the portrayal is not very vivid. In addition, the heroine's escape here is too simple, but it fails to highlight the clever setting. The plot needs to be expanded and some descriptions of the environment and characters added. (According to common sense, the demon-catching gang should capture more than one shark. Since the sharks can bring a lot of pearls, they should be guarded more closely. You can consider adding a description of the guard. A person who is extremely vicious but addicted to alcohol? He got drunk and was stabbed by the heroine. This requires persuasiveness.) In addition, you may need a worldview introduction to introduce the background of the world and the basic settings of the races? Spiritual clan, Chang clan, etc.