You Are a Pirate, You Are Not Allowed to Rob Tombs!

The plot is good, but there are many bad sentences or lack of punctuation. I won't talk about the problem of "De Di De". Nowadays, many authors use it incorrectly. I hope the author can pay more attention to the details of the writing and other issues.

Is this introduction to the rebirth of Taoist priest Duan De as a pirate?

The front is very beautiful, I received gifts from the dead and fulfilled their wishes. It's a bit unexpected why Fish-Man Island suddenly became a grand narrative of resistance against oppression.

It's good to have a little ghost as the heroine, but don't be Robin again. I feel like every One Piece book wants to be Robin. . What's so good about Robin?

The writing is good, but the details are not rigorous Also, the protagonist is too young. He is still ten years old when it is released. His physical strength and defense are seriously insufficient, and he cannot even return life. He relies entirely on Ryoma, a novice gift bag. The protagonist's strength depends entirely on plug-ins and talents, but the protagonist's hardware is not good. The best equipment and talents are too low level. The protagonist is good at everything but lacks time to grow or develop physically. The protagonist wants to do things, so he must eat animal fruits or ripe fruits to grow faster, instead of adding talents all the time. Unless the protagonist can dig up space pirates' tombs in Rafdel and have alien talents, no matter how he cheats, he will still be insignificant.

It feels weird to only have physique and strength and no reaction speed.

Cut it? ? ? ? !

Now the plot of One Piece has already had its body taken away, for example, Yi Mu took her body from the Celestial Dragon Army, and it is also speculated that BGMM was also taken away by the nun, and that Hawkeye was taken away by Ryoma or reincarnated? , I don't know if it's true or false.

Moria, she still has this kind of past, fighting Kaido, falling for more than 20 years, and found that the characters of One Piece that I watched early on are not very understandable.

Shennong has read it. A small book of food and grass, you can read it if you are short of books

Although brushing proficiency is a bit cliche, keep this pace and write down slowly. Also, don't be a licking dog or a nanny. Ever since Robin fucking appeared, I felt that your dog-licking nature, the author, was about to awaken. Anyway, the content of the dozens of chapters currently written is reasonable and relatively smooth. It's best to be more decisive in killing later, and don't write pirate fan fiction as a dog-licking novel, a harem romance novel or something like that. It's easy to look at and make you sick.

Except for the Mermaid Island plot, which is a bit stiff, everything else is smooth.

Improve some basic writing layout details, especially punctuation and language logic.

It's been 8 days, and I haven't seen anyone asking for leave, so there won't be any updates? ? ? ?

I just fully subscribed and didn't pay attention to the update time! WC

Please read and collect it, all you little cuties, I beg you.

It's full of pirate flavor, the collision of body and will between strong men

What is the difference between this and two chapters a day? Short and sweet

I didn't mean to put it on the shelves so early. No updates yet. Everyone can only give one monthly pass. No more. 🤫

I haven't read it yet, but I like this book very much. Please give me an initial subscription and a monthly pass.

Explosive update(づ′▽`)づ

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