Man in the Underworld: Become a Human Being at the Beginning

I feel like the protagonist is too talkative, and it doesn't matter if others try to tease her! The fighting description does not show the protagonist's extraordinary talents.

After taking the oath of heaven, it is logically difficult to escape, unless you have great supernatural powers or pay a huge price. It depends on how the author writes later.

The author is a newcomer writing a book for the first time. I have many shortcomings now. I also know that there are some problems in the previous writing. I will learn and improve during the writing process. I hope you will support me. Please 😭😭

I must give Tie a thumbs up, with this willpower, he is a perfect real man!

It's not very good to be honest from the beginning.

It can be seen that the author has some ideas, but the details are handled very poorly. For example, the progression of the plot is stiff and even feels extremely incoherent. And some old routines are difficult to read without polish. It's almost the same as putting it on a tomato, but it's really too immature at the starting point. Also, it's like pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger. Hiding your strength and talent doesn't work at the starting point. I only clicked in when I saw the genius flow on the label. It feels a bit like trying to sell someone else's meat. Old bookworms usually quit when they see this kind of plot. One more thing, you need the character dialogue to give me the feeling of an NPC speaking lines, speaking for the sake of speaking. Come on

Have you ever used ginseng fruit? I wrote some things randomly, taking it for granted.

Why should I delete it😡

It feels like there is no main plot, the protagonist has no idea what he wants to do, and his goal drive is very weak.

Many brothers reported that confessing Daohen Full Gold was a poisonous point. I may not have grasped the scale well when writing a book for the first time, so I revised it a bit. The protagonist now did not tell Qin Hongyi that he was Daohen Full Gold, but only seven gold.

This is because the way of heaven was injured by powerful powers from other worlds, and then was invaded. Heaven has no selfish motives and will not favor any party, because the whole world belongs to Heaven 🤓

I have been following it until now, but I haven't posted many comments. I saw the author's listing, and I hope this book will get better and better.

Dude, are you a full-time writer?

Think about it, those who can become gods are all leftovers

Dude, is it because there is no traffic or what happened? There is no increase.

If I persist for more than a month, I will write one million words, strong!