Game Development? No, the Lord of Fear and Disaster

Game production, player play, and daily life seem to be the three main axes of this book, and they are all well written; in addition, there is also a very novel setting of the Outer God Space. The biggest problem is that in order for the protagonist to advance the plot without being clear about the alien space, as long as the interaction between reality and reality is involved, the plot and characters will become very separated. It is best to deal with this as soon as possible. Either the protagonist awakens directly, or the people around him awaken. At least there must be understanding people on both sides. Stop deliberately cutting off opportunities for awakening just to pave the way; there are obviously big screens and broadcasts at the venue, but how can anyone still be immersed in comics and not realize that there is a familiar situation?

Author, the character you describe for the protagonist conflicts with the background. It will be difficult to write later. Unless your writing is very good, no matter how you write, people will say that the protagonist is hypocritical Or you can set the character of the protagonist as a purely selfish villain and don't write anything kind. After all, you have written a good background. If you don't pass the level, you will die Or you can change the background. Think about it, if a kind person knows that he has directly or indirectly massacred hundreds of thousands of people, the consequences will either become self-deception and pretend not to know, or he will be completely crazy. Of course, if the protagonist does not know this all his life, there is nothing to say.

There is a problem with the author's setting. The Senluo support you set up seems to be recruiting and deceiving the protagonist to lure the protagonist into the trap. After entering the trap, he said that the ancient god has revived. Then the protagonist killed so many people without knowing it. What will he do later? Continue or feel guilty? Or do you feel that the character has suddenly switched to a bad lineup, and the behavior has also changed? The plot in the palindrome also tends to be relatively white, which is not satisfactory. I can watch it before the settings are broken.

The first female character the male protagonist met was a 12-year-old girl who was wandering near his shop. He gave her something to eat before the start of the first game. The male protagonist could not find her at the beginning of the game. After the game ended, the unconscious homeless girl appeared again and was woken up by the male protagonist. Then the male protagonist did not ask about her. Why was she homeless? I didn't call the police or find anyone to ask her where she came from, so I took her in to work as a child laborer in the store. The salary was 1,500 yuan a month. When she didn't say anything, it was raised to 2,000 yuan. She said that she didn't lack the money, so why not send her to a milk tea bar? (It's a lot of work). The second female character at the back is a good girl who has just grown up, and she feels like she is turning into an Internet addicted girl. Judging from the age of the female characters, the range at the starting point is a bit too small... I haven't read the later parts, but I always feel that the two female characters written by the author are not right, and there is a sense of beauty that has not ended compulsory education. As for the plot, others have complained about it.

A lot of classic problems in two-world novels are that the supernatural world is well written, but the reality is messy. This book is also like this. Zhang Xiaoyun appears in a good way. Does the significance of this character have any other effect besides making readers disgusted? What else is there about pilgrimage? Are you bored? Who likes to watch this kind of daily life? I just watched it for the game. As a result, the game has only a few chapters and the player ran to the protagonist. What are you doing?

I didn't like the plot of the little girl Zhang Xiaoyun, but other than that it was pretty good

Without the low-level bumping into the wall and being slapped in the face, it would no longer be a feature of Qidian.

I've only read Chapter 5, and I couldn't help but write this review! It seems that I am using a separation technique to write about what happened in two time and space, but there is no foreshadowing or interweaving in the front. I forced my brain to fill it in and asked him to complete it. Then the second point is that in the subsequent chapter, the protagonist's role is quite serious. I wrote a lot of irrelevant things. I don't know if he is foreshadowing or what, but it has exceeded 2k words, and there is no subsequent stretching! I directly personally judge it as nonsense or hydrology! I feel like I can understand it a little bit, but the writing is not particularly clear! In the early stage, I did not see the difficulties that the protagonist faced, nor did I see the means by which the protagonist solved the difficulties. Anyway, it was a very dull process! The subject matter is quite innovative and the angle is good, but I just don't have the desire to continue reading!

The sense of fragmentation is too strong, and the elements that don't match at all have to be sewn together, which is also confusing. . . .

No, bro, I want to watch the game live. Isn't it nice to find a video? Do you need to read your dry words to explain so many chapters? After integrating so many settings, the result is really just a light setting. You have already made a copy of the divine power and are you still going through the grid? What about the turn-based system?

Currently in Chapter 7, what I dislike the most is the plot of Little Girl 352. . .

The plot is fragmented, like two people who can't get along and the world is fused.

The writing is relatively okay, keep up the hard work.

I can't tell from your introduction what you want to write about.

So far so good, the protagonist should be integrated into a setting similar to "The Evil God's Henchmen". It's not a big deal to kill people in the dungeon. Pan-universe civilization has gathered, so what's the problem if a few aliens die? But this setting brings up a problem. It cannot be that all intelligent civilizations in the universe are primates, right? I look forward to the author opening up his imagination and breaking through the limitations of the game itself, such as how things like silicon-based life and Martian jellyfish will unfold.

Boring, inexplicable😒

There are so many poisonous points, just to name a few, 1. Human beings casually use guns to attack stellar combat threats, 2. Human beings casually investigate the Lord God Company, 3. A ruthless alien man actually becomes a civil servant, and a puppy is actually honored 666