The Road to Immortality Is Difficult

1. It is not recommended to write about a boss taking the initiative to give the protagonist a chance. The spirit beast in the latest plot has this way of writing... 2: It is too wordy and there is too much psychological description 3: The protagonist is not written to have strategic goals, and the structure is not enough. There are many loopholes in the plot: You have obviously earned a lot of spiritual stones, but you have not yet moved to the inner city. You can stay in an inn for the time being. Safety must be the first priority. You must be aware of risks. The main reason is that the conflict in the writing is too deliberate and not well arranged. After leaving the secret realm, when returning to the inner city, you must first buy a spirit beast bag and arrange the spirit beasts, put them on the bed and forget about it. There is no description of whether there are formations in the house. Don't you cherish such precious spirit beasts? There are masters in the inner city who will arrange them carefully. It does not advance the plot, so there is no need to write so much psychological description.

Is there a Shennong? How is this written?

Chapters 8 and 9 are written too much like a game novel. When a few water arrows are fired into the enemy's body, white light will explode. After the explosion, the body disappears completely, leaving only a few rags 😅

My advice to new authors is to copy more. . Whether it's drawing comics or calligraphy, creation all starts with imitation. It doesn't hurt to find a few better works and learn from them a little bit.