Serfs Who Don't Want to Be Lords Are Not Good Time Travelers

The author writes about the protagonist's treatment of Buck. The author thinks that the writing is very good, but in my eyes it is not satisfactory. The protagonist is not even a knight at the moment, and it is not yet time for you to win people's hearts. At this time, you just need to be a strong general, and there is no need to write as a leader. The two people who come with the protagonist are the protagonist's most loyal younger brothers. This is the power that truly belongs to the protagonist. Don't you see what Liu Bei did to Guan Yu and Zhang Fei? When Guan Yu and Zhang Fei were bullied, would Liu Bei only do this? What about the protagonist? That Buck humiliated the protagonist's younger brother, and the protagonist just passed away so lightly. A likable leader not only needs to be generous, but also needs to protect shortcomings.

The pace is a bit slow, but I can live with it. There is also a sense of immersion, but the protagonist has not received professional training and has high strength. The serfs should have little fighting power. This needs a reasonable explanation. The prices are too high, and a few broken weapons have used up all the savings of a small businessman. It can be changed to say that the weapons purchased by the three protagonists are relatively sophisticated, so they are expensive. (The most expensive thing for a knight is plate armor and war horses, and other equipment is not that expensive. The technological content of plate armor was extremely high in ancient times, so it is expensive; while war horses need to be trained from an early age, and the elimination rate is high. A knight needs to be equipped with several war horses and ride them in turns, and the war horses cannot eat grass and need to eat refined grains, so they are expensive)

I am the only investor and received a reward of 20 yuan. Personally, I think the writing is quite good, but the pace is too slow. After the protagonist group joins the army, they keep competing, and there is too much writing. The plot of the martial arts competition should be a short plot and should not be written so long. Only big plots like "war" and "consecration of knights" can be written longer.

I stopped reading after a few chapters and had no desire to continue reading. Dude, are you writing a novel or a biography? During the war, the country on this side of the pig's feet was a loser. Isn't life like pig's feet normal? Do you need to make it bold? You only need to briefly describe the background of the pig's feet. Start directly from the place where the pig's feet became slaves. The first few chapters are not needed at all.

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