Tokyo: I Took in Homeless Female Subordinates

It's normal for light novels with multiple female protagonists~_~😅😅😅, some eunuchs and monks regard this as a poison point, I am speechless😓😓😓, but the novel is indeed a bit stomach-ache for young literary people

The male protagonist is too naive and has no sense of responsibility at all. He is just a rotten person.

Today's novices really can't write without the harem, and their skills are not enough to support you in describing multiple heroines in multiple lines. In the end, all the heroines are like empty shells, with no characteristics of their own at all. The so-called characteristics are just xp forcibly given, and there is no place that can be remembered.

I bumped into my ex-girlfriend before I even knew the highlights of my female subordinate, and I was a bit persuaded to quit.

It's so outrageous. Yamazaki suddenly turned into a serious yandere + lesbian, and even changed the male protagonist and slept with Shiori. Shiori also became severely depressed and self-mutilated. What the hell is unfolding, and now she suddenly changed into the first person. I can't write anymore and let myself go. Not to mention that there is Sato brother who beats the male protagonist every time he sees it, and even forces the male protagonist to resign. The abusive protagonist is also very poisonous...

To put it simply, the impression is that the male protagonist of an old light novel is gentle and scumbag. Every woman is as "beautiful" as Galgame, surrounding the male protagonist. Others are a matter of opinion

The protagonist is really rubbish, it doesn't matter whether it's a harem story or a stud story, he looks like he dares to do something but doesn't deserve it, he has no sense of responsibility at all, he looks no different from the kind of person who abandons his family and his children.

There is too little external description of the characters, so the heroines seem very hollow. I have no idea what it looks like.

I did go too far in some plots 😥 For example, the male protagonist's lack of responsibility for Chinatsu Shiomiya was lacking in foreshadowing. Too many people complained about this, and the moral bottom line was suddenly too low. Actually, I don't mind readers complaining about this. It's like looking in the mirror, which shows that most people's moral standards are still very high. This is somewhat different from what I had in mind when I started the book. I was surprised, and it seemed to be reasonable, just like the female high school student I met at the canteen downstairs yesterday, so sunny and positive. However, this may be the first time I have written such a long novel. It is almost a hundred chapters long and takes less than a month. I really lacked consideration and did not make a good starting point. It should take a little longer, the relationship should be flowing slowly. Regarding the discussion about whether the heroines' plots have collapsed or not, except for the fact that Yamazaki Yukiko suddenly moved out and the plot was a bit stiff, I felt that the rest was progressing steadily and developing according to the plot ending I thought about. As for the male protagonist, I seem to have written it too vaguely. For Chinatsu Shiomiya's character, I wanted to write a villainous young lady from the beginning, but the plot about high school was a minefield. It has been reviewed several times before. I didn't dare to write in detail, so I put it aside for the time being. Probably the male protagonist is irresponsible and was seduced by Chinatsu Shiomiya. It should be written out in detail later. As for Yamazaki Yukiko, I originally wanted to write about the contrast between pink and black, but then a reader complained about it, and I realized that I didn't prepare the groundwork well. I don't think it's a spoiler. What I wanted to write about when I started the book was that all the characters were evil, and they were extremely twisted and had stomachaches. Looking back at the more realistic light novel themes, it seems very unpleasant. Naturally, there are many sword-man plots, which I didn't consider enough. Finally, I don't mind if people say something bad about this book. Both objective and subjective ideas are useful to me. As a new author, I can learn and change. It's like the male protagonist treating Sagawa Shiori's brother, why does he want to anger him? Because if you have ever tried to deliberately irritate someone, and then experienced being irritated, you will find that we should be happy when others want us to be angry. Because the people who are provoked are on the first level, and the people who try to provoke others to achieve their own goals are on the second level. By writing stomach-ache and twisted light novels, I try to manipulate the emotions of my readers. Sorry. I'm so sorry.