Dou Po: There Is Something Wrong with This Original Script

After reading three chapters, it is non-toxic, indeed relatively bland and can be raised. At the moment, there are only two small problems. I think that the protagonist with such a bad character will not choose to continue to follow the path of Fenjue. The practice of Fenjue is too dangerous. Watching Xiao Yan collect the strange fire in the novel and collecting the strange fire himself are two different things. It is best to explain in detail the reason why the protagonist is willing to take the Fenjue, otherwise the character will not be able to stand up. Then I remember that Ge Ye brought Yan Ran to the place where the engagement was broken, but here it became Yun Yun brought Yan Ran. The author should be trying to innovate, but it goes against the reality. The leader of the largest sect in the Jiama Empire will not come to a small place like Wutan City. Just send a deacon to follow, and Elder Dingtian will come. And even if Yun Yun really came, the Xiao family shouldn't have such a bland attitude. It would be better to pay more attention to the details. Anyway, it's okay, author, cheers.

The biggest problem is that it is clearly Xiao Yan in this life, but the author also wrote him as Lin Ye in his previous life, which makes it feel quite fragmented.

Why are you still called Lin Ye? Shouldn't it be called Xiao Yan? ?

It feels like these heroines have some memories of the development of the original work and are in a parallel world line.

Now I'm curious whether Queen Medusa will be waiting for the protagonist at Qinglian's heart fire. There is definitely something wrong with this group of people. Why did the protagonist push him away one by one or simply come to the door by himself?

How about changing your name to Xiao Yan?

This Xiao Yan doesn't use a heavy ruler, right? No.

It's so peaceful, and every time I come into contact with a new heroine, she's more or less a little bit poisonous. But it's ok. Come on

Didn't taste the poison, a bit bland, watchable

The separation of names makes the narrative very strange and nondescript.

There is no Feng Qing'er, the author is not good at writing

The writing is quite good, relatively bland. If you have read too many more passionate stories, you can check this one out. The important thing is whether you see a woman who can't walk.

Well written, give me a monthly ticket, please give me more updates 😆😆😆

Faster, faster, faster, faster, faster

I have caught up to the latest, and it deserves praise for the fact that the protagonist's upgrade has not been deliberately delayed. Some unimportant plots have also been skipped. What I am worried about now is that it feels like I can finish it quickly. Overall, it's still comfortable.

As for Yafei, Yafei is not bad either 😌

It looks good, but not enough. I have rewarded it. Please give me more.

It feels ok, mark it

Gu Xun'er should be reborn, right?

How often does the author update this?

Why do old books suddenly stop being poorly written?

What you write is just too bland, so bland that it's boring. The transformations of Xun'er, Little Doctor and the others can only be used as seasoning.