I Am Practicing the Devouring Technique in Panlong

Author, let's not talk about the three golden chapters. You have written almost 20 chapters now, and I am less and less willing to follow it. Why? The direct reasons are: first, the lack of cool points, and second, the rhythm is too slow. To some extent, these two can be said together. The lack of cool points is that there is no clear first-mover advantage or golden finger. You are a time traveler, or you should figure out as soon as possible that you are now in the world of Panlong, which has the advantage of being familiar with the plot. Or there is a clear enough link (such as the system, which is the simplest and most brainless) that can push you to take action. In the original book, the opening chapter points out the glory and decline of the Baruch family as dragon-blooded warriors, and they quickly get the Coiling Dragon Ring (I just took a look at it in Chapter 6), so that it can attract people to continue reading. Readers will be curious, what are the advantages of dragon blood warriors? Later we learned that we can transform into dragon blood, and even more later, we can transform into water. Similarly, readers will be curious when they see you get the Panlong Ring, what is its use? As one of the most famous ring grandfathers (probably only Dou Po Yao Lao can compare), Grandpa Delin brought Linley not only tutoring magic and flat sword style, but also a lot of growth. Of course, readers did not know it at the time, but they will be curious about how it will develop later. As for you, there is none. It's time to mention the issue of pacing. Twenty chapters in, the protagonist has neither figured out what world he is in, nor has he had a clear hang-up. If you don't know the world, there will be no plot advantage. It can also be said that there will be no sense of involvement and excitement as a fan. In terms of hanging, the understanding is too vague. I can feel that the teacher or head teacher has a story, and may give his own path and direction of exploration to the protagonist to start exploring the principles. But it's too slow, the author, it's already 20 chapters. In the original book, all these exciting points and even foreshadowing have been explained. You have begun to explore the mysteries of magic and even met Beibei. You are still playing house with the children. What's more, Panlong was a book written in 2008, and now it's 24 years old. The pace can and should only be faster. Don't say you want to tell the story slowly, you must first make people want to listen before you continue. After talking about the direct reasons, let's talk about the fundamental reason that I think is that your protagonist lacks internal drive. For example, the original book tells that the Baruch family was once glorious as dragon-blooded warriors and now has declined. Then Linley's initial motivation to become stronger was to rebuild the family's pride and redeem himself from the sword slaughter. There was also a third party who planted the seeds of his strong heart. You, the protagonist, do not have this kind of internal drive so far. The conflict between the main veins is not clear. In addition, the protagonist is young. What we see from his perspective is a family with little cohesion. The conflict is like a child pulling his hair. You can see how Dou Po handled this situation of opposition and unity back then. To sum up, it is recommended that you speed up the pace, make the protagonist realize that he is coiling a dragon, and let the readers understand that they are watching a fan. At the same time, you should clarify the cheat code to give readers a sense of involvement and excitement. Otherwise, I don't know where you can write before it is put on the shelves.

I just read the introduction. How dare the Eternal God speak loudly in front of Hongmeng? Only a god king can have a universe within his body. How many universes have been created and then destroyed by Hongmeng's experiments.

Don't write Teddy, don't write Teddy, don't write Teddy.

Isn't your introduction the method of becoming a god in Panlongli?

In the first chapter, my 24K titanium alloy eyes were blinded. What hook bar thing dares to hit a noble child? Does the author have no basic common sense at all?

Since you want to write, let me give you a suggestion. The prerequisite is to quickly become the main god. Don't write ink below the holy realm, otherwise no one will read it.

I am cultivating the Holy King in the Holy Ruins I am cultivating martial arts in Dou Po I am cultivating the Immortal World in Perfection I am cultivating the Star Transformation in Devouring I am cultivating the Heaven Covering in the Buddha Base

I cast a few recommendation votes, cheers for the author. A small suggestion, during the new book period, it is best to write more and save manuscripts. The little popular science about local customs and customs in the author's words at the end of the chapter is very interesting and suitable as an adjustment in the writing process, but it is not the main content. The main text is the main thing. I hope you will succeed.

I only read a few chapters. The writing is better than most Panlong fans, but the content is too young.

The writing is very bland, and the pace is too slow. Hurry up and become a god. What I want to see is the exciting journey into the god plane.

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