Peter Parker Doesn't Want to Be Spider-Man, He Just Wants to Chat

First of all - too "two-dimensional" Especially the heroine Gwen Spider-Man, her image is too "light novel". There are no advantages or disadvantages, you can understand it. It just depends on whether the reader can accept it. The second is the male protagonist - he is obviously a "genius" and what he says is a bit "unconventional", but what about what he does? When I fought the lizard man, I didn't expect that there would be a little lizard man... But I only took Harry with me when I went to see the rhinoceros man. Yes, the rhino man is "kind", but if there is a conflict, you are like Peter Parker and you are worried about the author, what about Harry? Obviously the setting is a genius, but he behaves recklessly again and again... I hope the author will think carefully about the character

I was scolded by the editor and readers. Now I am revising chapters fifty-six and seven. They will be revised by about this afternoon. Let's take a look at it when it is updated in the evening. Hey, everyone, don't abandon the book.

Others are constantly assassinating the protagonist's family, and the protagonist is constantly being passively defensive. Today his family is attacked, and tomorrow his family is in danger. The enemy's mastermind behind the scenes comments on the protagonist. The United States feels that the protagonist needs to be monitored and assigned tasks to control. The protagonist... If he doesn't catch the girlfriend of a high-level executive, he is a vigilante and keeps bringing enemies. The protagonist is similar to a clown who lives in Gotham City controlled by capitalists. He wants to be a normal person but is constantly driven crazy. He never engages with high-level capitalists and crazily targets the low-level tool people.

In fact, there is no need to modify it, just remove the setting of time traveler. There are too many time travel stories these days, and time travel is actually a minus point.

Speechless, author, have you ever been Spider-Man? Some things were written randomly, taking it for granted 😐

. . . . I just read Chapter 2 and I don't understand. Aren't you a time traveler? Why are you still speaking like an indigenous person? You are neither a time-traveler nor aboriginal, but you are so cool that it instantly makes people have no desire to read on.

The writing style is a bit dull, but the writing is actually pretty good. It's at a food level. The character of the protagonist is a good guy with a clear distinction between good and evil. The plot doesn't have any bad points. The shortcoming of the writing style is that the author is a little uncomfortable with serialized novels. Every plot in the article should emphasize the protagonist's position, goals, and psychological activities, so that readers can better understand the plot. For example, if the protagonist wants to achieve a good ending, then when a good or bad route choice occurs in the story, he must immediately describe the thinking and analysis, so that the reader can feel the protagonist's thoughts. Many authors are overly worried that emphasizing the same thing over and over again will make readers complain. In fact, it does not. Because the author's perspective and the reader's perspective are different. The author's perspective is a well-conceived story expressed with complete elements, so the author thinks that one element of a story appears once is enough, but the reader's perspective is different. The reader reads and understands the plot gradually. You have to emphasize the key elements repeatedly to make the reader feel clear. Just like the "good ending" trend in the article, you can't just emphasize the "good ending" at the end. You have to think of how to lead to the "good ending" as soon as the protagonist sees the character, how to develop a "good ending" when encountering unexpected events, and constantly add "good ending" elements. In this way, the "good ending" will not appear abrupt, and readers will not have the illusion that the plot is "a hammer here and there". In terms of the three-dimensional image of the characters, all kinds of interesting little details in the gags written by the author are quite interesting. In the future, you can consider adding more to the shaping of the character. The protagonist's genius setting does not need to describe much professional knowledge. It can be reflected like the various genius inventions in the book and being recognized by other geniuses. This aspect can be described more, and the protagonist's invention before You can provide some foreshadowing, such as when a bit of inspiration occurs, or the protagonist works hard until early in the morning to use technology. These detailed descriptions are like "Chekhov's Gun." Rome was not built in a day. I hope the author will write better and better. Come on.

The previous plot is probably about the protagonist not having a no-kill principle, but the enemy keeps sending people to target the people around the protagonist. The protagonist has to play house and abide by the rules and only engage the enemy's minions. It's probably a round-robin round of playing house.

I don't like this kind of gag-style plot, so I ran away.

Blushing at every turn😡