Begin Immortality by Refining Elixirs

I feel that some settings in the book are not as good as copying them directly from ordinary people. After all, readers have preconceived notions. The realms of junior high, middle and high, Qi, spiritual power, etc. Seem to be quite inconsistent. They are not as good as front, middle and back, and spiritual consciousness.

Is it that unlucky author? If so, I will chase him.

There are some broken sentences, hyphenation, and many typos, which makes it look very confusing.

1. Generally, what exists naturally is called "spiritual energy", while what is transformed through self-cultivation is called "spiritual power". "Qi" generally exists in nature itself, and "power" needs to be cultivated by oneself. Otherwise, the author does not change it, and it will look awkward 2. Change the time unit "hour" to "hour" 3. It is recommended to change "work" to "task", although Although they all express the same meaning, I feel that "task" is more fluent in the fairy tale 4. I have read about 10,000 words. I haven't finished Chapter 3 yet, but I can't read anymore. I feel that the reading is intermittent and not coherent at all. I hope the author can re-read it from the reader's perspective and then correct it. Otherwise, I feel that no matter how good the content and plot are, not many people will read it. 🥵(ꐦ ´͈ ᗨ `͈ )

Something is wrong, 90% out of 10, something is wrong. Your name is very similar to that old eunuch.

You wrote the novel Haoyu Zhenxian, right?

Is there no spiritual chef in such a large world of cultivating immortals?

Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "I will clean up the Tibetan Scripture Pavilion at the beginning, and I will complete the incomplete skills." Mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ will not decrease if IQ is online, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]

This is my first time writing. Please bear with me, readers. You can also leave your comments below.

The plot is good, but the sentences always feel a bit unsmooth.

Does the author have a group or QQ? If so, please post it. I have some questions that I would like to ask. This is not an advertisement or a newcomer. They are two masterpieces.

Suitable for those who like to skip watching and those who only take a quick glance at Golden Finger

Sometimes he is called Zuo Yanyu, and sometimes he is called Zuo Yuyan. Are these two people?

Not bad. Travelers should at least have a slight advantage in cognitive comprehension, and their development choices will be more intelligent.

Big brother, people who like it will eventually like it, and people who don't like it won't come to read it. If you keep persisting, you will definitely have fans. As long as it doesn't end badly, even if the first book is not good, you can write a better second book based on the first one.

The author's writing is quite good. It would be better if some of the conspiracies and intrigues were written more smoothly and rationally. The plot may have been advanced too hastily when writing. You can go slower and make the characters more three-dimensional. The author must work hard 😆, I believe your work will shine.

The introduction and name are similar to that eunuch whom I chased every day

Is there any spiritual beast to raise? Is it good to raise a spiritual beast to relieve boredom on the way to immortality?