My Little Eevee Is Going to Blow Your Head Off

I don't understand... A Pokémon kid goes to the Pirate King to mess with him... The Pirate King doesn't kill people? There are pirates everywhere... If you want to write about darkness, darkness and cruelty, don't choose Pokémon World... If you want to write about truth, kindness and beauty, don't choose One Piece...

The plot concept is very interesting, a young trainer brings Pokémon with human thinking ability, but the writing is very radio, too many large paragraphs of Pokémon settings are crammed in, and the key character interactions are too little, very simple, and very draggy. The first 4 chapters explain the main heroine as a new trainer to Dr. Oak. After the original Xiaozhi, the Pokémon and the origin of the protagonist are introduced. The protagonist is introduced at the beginning as a rare person who is not close to others in Dr. Oak's laboratory. The process of Pokémon being subdued by the heroine is too simple and almost brushed off, and there is almost no emotional story between the protagonist and Dr. Oak. Everyone who has watched Pokémon knows that this kind of bridge is often the first level where the bond between Pokémon and the trainer begins. How can I put it, I feel that the idea is good, but the setting of the paragraph ignores the plot, and the reading experience is really difficult to read. I want to see the plot and the result is all about the description of the setting.

How should I put it? I read it very well earlier and thought that pirates should be pirates. But then I found this self-pleasure article.

If you want to find a trainer, why not look for Xiaomao? The scholar is top-notch in all aspects and is very friendly to Pokémon. He won't accept the heroine as if he were opening a blind box.

The wording is like that of a Pokémon cartoon, it's smelly, long, and verbose. I tried to resist watching it, but when I woke up after the sixth episode, I couldn't stand it anymore.

It's too tiring to read, and it's too wordy. The idea is not bad, but it's not suitable for today's fast-paced online novels.

No. It gave me a headache. I've only read chapter 4. Your words are all piled together. And the segmentation is not good. Do more segments. I'm going blind.

No, all the green ones are here? He knows Pokémon better than me?

The writing of "Golden Lion" is too crazy. Is this a novel that a normal person can write?

At the beginning, you thought it was a Shilipo Sword God Eevee, but in the end you couldn't beat the green caterpillar of the same level. Traveling through Pirates, you have learned a bunch of trainer skills (which are basically useless later), but you haven't learned anything about a single Pokémon. When you came back, you were beaten to death by Sakaki and you still couldn't win, but it turned out that the opponent was a cute new Ogawa at the same level as you. The group at the back is trying to fight anyone, but no one can beat them, and the pirates' combat power has been reduced to the sewer. I just want to say that as a time traveler, you are too sexy, please take off your skirt.

The plot concept is interesting, and the teammates you choose are okay, but you talk too much nonsense. I feel like I don't know what I'm looking at every time I look at it. Ever since Xiaofeng grew up in Chapter 30, I felt a little bit uninterested.

The author's paragraphing is really poor and gives me a headache

I voted for a monthly ticket and found out that it was the sixth one this month. . . .

I feel that the writing aspect is quite novel. There are currently 29 chapters. The author's story is very warm and the characteristics of the super true newcomer 🤭 are also fully displayed. It is a bit like a group novel. Looking forward to the author's next stories. I just don't know if other elves will be arranged later 😁

Speaking of which, what does the author plan to write in his next book?

I couldn't stand it anymore when I saw the golden lion, and suddenly I couldn't understand the writing. An inexplicable guy appeared, what kind of time travel could he do, and sent the golden lion to Bucky's Cross Guild in the future. Then a group of people from the guild surrounded the golden lion, and suddenly that person appeared again. It turned out to be the protagonist Xiaofeng, and then he brought many Pokémon to beat the golden lion. Then I stopped reading. The previous part was actually okay, but the whole section of the golden lion fell apart, and the grade dropped several levels.

Don't you think that my cousin's symbols are used in a messy and complicated way? It's hard to finish participles and sentences in one sentence, and there is still a lot to add in English and parentheses, which seems very tiring.