Tokyo: I Have a Sister and a House, and My Parents Are Both Busy.

I don't know how many times I have to say that newcomers should not learn how to write Japanese light novels. In Japanese light novel dialogues, it is easy to distinguish the speaker in the Japanese context. However, if you write in Chinese, if it is a long dialogue or multiple dialogues, it will be difficult for readers who are used to reading quickly to distinguish who is speaking at the first time. There is also the problem of scene jumping. For example, you are in school one second, and then you are in the club immediately after, and then after a while, the protagonist returns home again. Even in Nikkei novels, there are very few such frequent scene switching. Another point is that Japanese light novels are written in a volume for several months and are polished. However, in China, because they are updated daily, if you blindly imitate Nikkei, the quality of the writing will actually be very poor. There are frequent scene changes, and the relationship between the characters progresses too quickly, but there is no clear main line. It is a long and daily routine. I can only say that domestic people should not learn from Ri Qing's writing method, and it is difficult to write successfully. There is no problem in arranging the main plot through the system, but if you want to write about Riqing's flavor, the author should put in more characters, then think about the character's background and personality, and then write the interaction with the protagonist. The female characters in the book are basically written backwards as soon as they appear, which is even more brainless than the famous wall. Don't be too harsh on newcomers and new books, so come on.

The author is a newbie, and my brain is overloaded. I am very sorry for the inappropriate wording and mistakes in some places. The author will correct it immediately. Just leave a comment. The author will read the comments every day. There are also some plots involving my sister. Will my sister be eliminated? ——Of course not, the title of this book is still there "A girl has a house, parents are busy" Please rest assured, no matter who is eliminated, it cannot be this. About the Japanese male protagonist Asashi. In fact, some psychological descriptions are the psychology of other people, and everyone can find them. The male protagonist in this article is not the original Japanese Asashi male protagonist (ask me to write it, and I can't describe the taste...) I wish everyone good health and happiness every day. 2024.10.29 New writers are fishing

This time jump is a bit shabby. This should be a foreshadowing, but it has a heavy dream-like feeling and is more like a stream of consciousness. The Q point is not easy to attract readers.

What's your segment? The span of the plot and scenes is quite blunt. One moment I was talking in the kendo club, and the next moment I was talking to my sister at home. There was no transition at all... And they just continued chatting.