Cultivation of Immortals and the Strange Tribe: Marrying the Strange Bride at the Beginning

No, buddy, you didn't say anything in the first chapter. Where did the protagonist come from? Why did he come to the bridal chamber suddenly? You didn't explain it, so you were very disconnected. If you didn't look back, you thought the protagonist was an aborigine. It's really difficult. You didn't write anything at the beginning. You went straight to the bridal chamber and then directly entered the soul. Then the system gave you a reward. I don't know where the system came from, and then it's the second chapter. . .

Although I know there is a mythical beast named River Crab. But you have three golden chapters, and the first chapter is confusing... Goldfinger doesn't explain anything clearly, it has to be delayed, and the protagonist's situation is not clearly explained. 😠My conclusion is to rewrite the first chapter to be more obscure and provocative, so as to capture people's curiosity and motivate them to read.

Why do you feel that some paragraphs seem to be missing some description when you look at them? The connection between front and back is weird

I haven't read it yet, but I just saw the title of your book. I have a suggestion. You can think of these weird families as NPCs. What will he do if he is forced to set it? Weirdness has no will of its own and will only act according to rules. Then you let him keep refining elixirs and practicing Qi. Is it better to use it as an NPC? For example, there are some weird ones that will rip out your heart as soon as you meet them. It can be set up as a slaughterhouse. Some of them can refine blood and can be set up as a blood refinery. I feel like I'm a genius. As long as you can control these weirdness. But if you are from a weird family, you can definitely control it. Let's take a look first to see if what you wrote agrees with mine.

Many paragraphs are inconsistent and have no punctuation marks. It looks like it was written by AI. It feels messy.

I hope the author can optimize it

Either a newcomer or a robot. All are typos.

The world setting is novel, and the plot is okay, but the character expression and setting conflict seriously. First of all, how is the behavioral logic defined? The independent behavior of the characters conflicts with the logic, which greatly affects the viewing.

The road is long and long, I will search up and down, and encourage each other😁