The Meat Pigeon Cultivates Immortality and Is Regarded as the Holy Body of Swordsmanship at the Beginning

There are a few typos and illogical sentences in the first three chapters, but they are not major problems. The biggest problem is the heroine. I really don't know the purpose of portraying such a heroine. The first chapter talks about her squeezing employees for her own benefit and not caring about the people being whipped. If she was portraying a mean supporting character, that would be totally fine, but who would have thought she was the heroine? I think most workers or people with good intentions will not have a good impression of her. I'm not sure if there is a reasonable plot for her to change later, but this alone is enough for people who don't like this kind of heroine to abandon the book, and you are still in the first chapter. Not only that, in order to "give away the girl" or "strategize", when the male protagonist slashes with sword energy, he will directly turn into admiration, and the supporting characters will not even look at the male protagonist and directly hit the male protagonist. The conflicts and slaps in the face were a bit forceful and mindless, and also strengthened the bad impression of the heroine. It can be said that just two chapters have dissuaded many types of readers. If it's a stallion story, there's nothing wrong with it being mindless. But the rhythm of the plot and the creation and arrangement of cool spots are very important. In the first chapter, the protagonist "has" to show his "talent", which is completely contradictory to the wretched development you mentioned at the beginning. There is neither the pleasure of obscene development nor much sense of superiority over others. To put it simply, the plot is a bit forced and doesn't have much sense of substitution. Then there is the selling point of this book, the "meat pigeon". The description is a little unclear, or it does not show the charm of the meat pigeon. You can refer to the book on cultivating immortality in troubled times. Since I haven't seen much of it, let me just make a few comments, for reference only: 1. Don't write emotional scenes, especially when you are not sure that it will become a bonus. 2. If there are no resurrection skills and you can only go all the way to the dark side, then write more about the process of the protagonist developing and becoming stronger, and then use more ideas. 3. You don't need to rush to improve your writing style, but contradictions and pleasant points can be reproduced directly, so read more books with good scores and see how their contradictions and pleasant points are written (excluding the great master Platinum, you can choose those refreshing articles that are not based on imagination, these contradictions and pleasant points are compact).

I don't know how other people feel about it, but I personally feel that the previous emotional scenes were awkward, especially with Chen Chen's love rival. Pigfoot directly went up to him and said that he wanted to duel with him. Chen Mingming didn't say anything, but Pigfoot automatically performed the routine of pretending to be a love rival and slapping him in the face. He couldn't hold himself back 🤐, it was too abstract.

I beg all adoptive fathers to read it. Newbies have many problems when writing a book for the first time. I also read all the comments and will continue to make corrections and improvements! 🌹🐷