Beginning with a Fire That Burned Down Ancient Rome

Your biggest problem now, author, is that you keep inserting popular science and characters. This is one of the biggest misunderstandings for novice writers. The core is that readers don't care what so-and-so did or what they did in the future of the previous world line. Either summarize these backgrounds within two hundred words, or don't mention them at all if they don't affect the current situation. First of all, this is a web article. If you write it today, no one will remember it next week, let alone a character that will be used a month or even half a year later. Secondly, a good setting should either be introduced through events in the text or introduced from the perspective of the protagonist. Otherwise, no matter how good you write it, it will be a waste of time. A good author must be able to control his desire to talk and turn it into an attraction to readers. Otherwise, he is just enjoying himself and is not even a literary youth. I have experienced this stage of being an author before. You have to find a way to overcome it, that is, you have to stand in the position of the reader rather than yourself. You can either treat the readers as illiterate - it will be useless if you talk too much, or you can treat the readers as masters - there is no need to say more until the point is reached. The only thing I can't do is be a student - I don't want to go to class! Apart from anything else, see for yourself how much of your previous popular science is useful now, and how many readers can remember? Totally worthless. Everyone's attention span in online writing is so limited. You must establish the character image in the minimum number of words, and you can even create stereotypes first and then change them later. But I definitely can't be like you, thinking about complicating and deepening the characters as soon as they appear, and showing them a bunch at once. People won't watch them. Just in my opinion, you have established the character of mother so far, and the rest are all irrelevant fragments. You, the author, may think that this is a redundant statement, but in fact all readers are telling you that this is superfluous. I'm not too polite to say it, but I really hope that the author can give it some thought, otherwise sooner or later this article will be cut due to no one reading it and no feedback.

Old Man Huang, it's Old Man Huang, everyone, hurry up and speak loudly

It's time again for God to say that he is not God. Damn it, it's you! Old man Huang! I don't believe that one of your more than ten disciples betrayed you. It's obvious that half of your sons betrayed you😁

I can continue reading this book, but I am really tired from reading it. There is absolutely no one who likes to read several chapters in a row on Baidu Encyclopedia. The protagonist travels through Rome, but his personality is very much like that of a saint. I don't think that a mature time traveler will cry in his mother's arms when he sees some slaves. There is no difference between being compassionate and an ideal god. I don't dislike this kind of majestic and upright protagonist, but it is too unnatural and inexplicable. System Chapter 60 does not have much description, and the mechanism is completely unclear. The two abilities given are completely imaginable. Do you need to make up for whatever is missing in the plot at any time? Do the Cleansing Fire and the language pack have anything in common? The full text contains a lot of explanations from God's perspective. This is the first time I have seen this kind of article. But if you explain it again, how can you remember so many characters if you mention them all at once? For some people who have not yet appeared, you can wait until they appear before talking about their lives. Is there half the number of words for the protagonist in the full text? Obviously the writing style is not bad, but do you have to select the readers in such a way? Can this kind of writing be high-quality? It is the most high-quality. There is obviously a hope that it will become a hit.

The look and feel is not very good. It writes long passages about history and the history of various characters who do not appear. You can omit it and focus on writing around the protagonist, and then expand it when needed. There are long paragraphs that have nothing to do with the novel, which really gave me a headache.

This book has nothing to do with the Warhammer mentioned by the hammer guy in the comment area. The protagonist has a low magic buff, and the story is probably about a saint descending from heaven in Rome. It reads a bit like the two low magic history fanfics written by Jiu Yu.

What I came to see was that Rome was great again (partly historical facts) What you wrote was that the Virgin Mary descended from heaven to love all living beings, and she also moved eastward and westward. I don't know what you were writing. After a modern person passed through it, he suddenly developed a love for foreign slavery. Isn't it weird? Personal feelings, don't comment if you don't like it, I hope it will sell well!

Dear book friends here, why don't you read the two selling points (1 History of Roman Conquests, 2 Whiteboard Emperor's Conquests) (Emperor Points to Warhammer 40k) It's because of these two points that you insist on reading, and the author also fills the main text with an encyclopedia, preempting the content of the text and affecting the perception. If the author does not change, he will lose readers.

To be honest, it would be quite fun if I just wrote about how the protagonist reformed and became the emperor of Rome without adding those fantasy elements. The protagonist reforms Rome and becomes the Roman emperor, and the fire of reform burns down the old Rome. It was quite interesting to read at the beginning, but it became more and more boring as you went to the end, not only because of the large sections of popular science, but also because of the slow advancement of the main plot, and the characters of the protagonist and his mother were not established at all, and they were not full at all. The protagonist behaved like a kind-hearted indigenous child, and all his thoughts and behaviors were inexplicable. After reading it, it made people feel fake and empty. There are not many books about ancient Rome. I hope to see new books by the author in the future.

As title. Many people have mentioned and said this about Baidu recently. Here is a unified explanation. I am not writing this out of spite, but I have some of my own views and opinions on this period of history. I want to try to analyze and interpret this history from another angle, as mentioned in the first chapter. But I am not a professional, just an enthusiast, but it is rare to see such related information online. You can go to Baidu to verify this. Writing like this will actually cost me more energy and effort. I can only say that my writing is not good enough, as my friend named Qingya Bailu said. The fullness of the worldview and the smoothness of the story are definitely top priorities, but I insist that the popularization of these worldviews in the new book period can be more coherent with the development of the plot, or you have me in me, and I have you in you, instead of being one-sided. This will appear dry, and for the pursuit of reading and the sense of reading, it is more destructive than profitable. I very much agree with this and want to write this way, but it is really difficult to do it. At present, I can only do what I am writing now.

This cheat book is a bit big, but it doesn't feel too outrageous to read. The author's writing style is good, but I still hope there will be less cheats and more tactics, technology, and military conquests. Finally, the author, please keep up the good work 🙂

Nero

For example, in the latest chapter, what information is obtained by Baidu about the character Crispus. He was the first husband of little Agrisna, and after poisoning him, she married the father of her second husband, Nero.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                       . As for Crispus, he also served as consul and governor during the era of Claudius. You can also explain that people at Baidu have their own opinions and interpretations. Are these different from what I wrote?

Don't search for popular science information on Baidu 😥

Very good, the content can be summarized as "Those days when the Emperor was in Rome" But the introduction is not done well, such a big highlight is not highlighted. What attracts me is not Rome but the Emperor! Imperial loyalists, come quickly!

I want the protagonist to become a golden guy, is that okay?

How to put it this way, the narration at the beginning is quite interesting, but after a few chapters it becomes uncomfortable to read. One is that the story is often cut, the protagonist is not exposed enough, and there is no sense of substitution. The story is trivial, and the golden finger does not point it out. It can only be said that it is not an online novel.

When I read it for the first time, it was the same as if I hadn't read it before. Every word was messed up. Popular science was not like popular science, and a novel was not like a novel.

Sorry, the density of NPCs is too high, and the names of foreigners are too long, so I read something in the first six chapters, who is whose father... Who is whose sister... Who is whose wife... Who did what, and then really, my mind went blank, I didn't read anything, and then I turned to the beginning and saw Chapter 6... And then I couldn't remember it at all.

The treatment of slaves in Rome was no worse than that of ordinary people in the East, and was even countless times better than that of some dynasties.