Bone King: If Heiluo Heiluo Didn't Go Offline

This article is a fan-oriented fanfic of King of the Undead. The writing structure imitates Riqing's writing structure. If you usually look at the segmentation and dialogue rhythm of the Bunko version of Bone King, you can tell at a glance that the author is deliberately imitating it. However, it does not have the completely original Party painting style. The author tried his best to adapt it to the Internet article and carried out more segmentation and plot design, and incorporated some recent Chinese Internet memes. The overall look is 70% lighter than 30% of the Internet article. The author has conducted in-depth setting research and plot memory points for Bone King, and never misses clues about the character's background and character transformation arcs, such as the psychological journeys of the Kingdom Warrior Captain, Funny Sister, and Nail Clipper. The protagonist character of Kuro Kuro written by the author is an oppressed social animal and aboriginal in the cyberpunk world. He has a yearning for a better life and universal values ​​in his heart, but it is not exactly the original character of Kuro Kuro. Because the original setting of Bone King still has many loopholes, the author uses the Chinese perspective and imagination to fill in the blanks and create a "Chinese-Japanese hybrid" Kuro. As the introduction says, this is a Bone King fanfic "if Kuro hadn't gone offline" and the main perspective is on Kuro. The author of this book has a high desire to share and interact, hoping that everyone can appreciate the changes in the world of Bone King after joining Heluo. Using the "Chinese-Japanese mixed-race" indigenous Heiluo as a benchmark to see other possibilities for the development of the Bone King plot. The highlights I recommend are - 1. The writing style is close to the structure of Nissei Bunko; 2. Make up for the lack of companion loneliness in the emotional line of Bone King; 3. The plot development route is different from the original Bone King; 4. Active author But the problems of this book are also obvious! There is even the possibility of gradual deterioration. Please take a look at the comment section. How many people are dissatisfied with the current behavior of the protagonist of Black Luo? How many people feel that the action content of the original NPCs is watered down to pave the way for the plot? Why do such disagreements and arguments occur? I have read the original work of Bone King, and also read many Bone King fanfics at Qidian. Next, I will share my reading experience from two perspectives. First of all, I looked at this book from the perspective of a fan of the original work. This article's psychological description of Kuro is actually inferior to the depiction in the original Bone King. Every time the Bone King takes two steps forward and one step back, he pulls and pulls again and again. He not only questions himself but also has to hold on for a breath. He has both his own small luck as a human being and his concentration on maintaining the necropolis. In the early stage, it is very good to show a frightened ordinary person who holds a nuclear bomb but doesn't know how to do it. He cooperates with other people to transform, and the bonus gives people the pleasure of secretly pretending to be cool. It is not until he is pushed around by other subordinates like a puppet that it becomes disenchanting. This kind of refreshing feeling is designed to match Momonga's personality. Putting it on other people and other types of characters cannot produce a sense of surprise beyond the original work. In the original work, the imagination and background of the humans from another world were designed to give the Bone King a crisp sound and scream when he ran over him, just like when he ran over the miserable Suzuki Satoru himself in the cyber world. If these plots are all given to He Luo He Luo without any consideration, it will be a copycat of Xi Shi. It will make this character do both good things and bad things strange. Even if the "hero's yearning" and "benevolent boss" were established in the early stage, the several narratives arranged by the author did not make the readers empathize or satisfy. I can only feel the "out-of-character hero" and the "moody destroyer of order". Frieza, who is more tolerable under a bunch of false politeness and disguise, is how the protagonist feels now. The more the author describes the style of the original work, the more it will lead to the foundation of Kuro, the protagonist, becoming nihilistic, because the design of the original work is not suitable for this "character" at all. This carefully crafted fan article gave me the feeling that the author saw a Japanese sushi dish that was delicious, so he followed it and learned every step. Although it was not as strong as the most demanding original work, it was still on the table. Then, when readers and diners were looking forward to it, they saw the author serving Japanese sushi made with five-color glutinous rice! ! ? ? The raw materials are wrong! The protagonist looks so Chinese! Then I read this book from the comprehensive perspective of Qidian readers who read online articles and fans. This article is very awkward for mainstream fan fiction! Did he make up for the regrets of the original work? Such as supplement. Although the Bone King with the addition of He Luo has indeed made up for his psychological loopholes and grown into an assertive president, what about the interaction? You really only pulled Hei Luo and Bone King out at a few points to solve psychological problems. How about their usual interactions that have been adventurous and interesting sharing? The relationship between Bone King and Hei Luo is like playing doubles in games when we were kids. Is clearing the level the key? It's about watching two people competing against each other and making pranks with their friends in a limited game plot. It's about promoting each other and the two of them cooperate to beat the boss with limited resources. It's about watching two people acting stupid together when they really have nothing to do. Now you can only do it like playing galgame and increase the character's favorability. What do I want to see when I come to Qidian to read fan fiction? Seeing the confused Riqing speaking a lot of polite words and not moving for a long time? After watching a few people bragging for a long time, it's boring to fight, why not just let it go for a second? Did you see that person in his childhood who was so stupid that he could think politically? Are you watching all the magnetic field strong stuff showing off? I want to see the protagonist acting as a human shield in front, taunting these ant things, forcing others to scold them but not daring to take action, and then being killed. Watching the protagonist being stupid in front, the Bone King stares at the protagonist's stupid live broadcast and helplessly calls his men to wipe his butt, Watching the Bone King's instant messaging for the protagonist fighting like a magic pass to reveal others' background, Watching the Bone King complaining about the protagonist's action logic, Look at the protagonist complaining about the management of Nazarick by Bone King, Look at the protagonist being able to forcibly implement his ideas in the feudal era and create a country of wise men under the operation of a bunch of unfaithful men. Look at the protagonist being able to gain experience with slime body and big doi... All the problems are because "the protagonist is too Chinese". As a result, I always have expectations and codes of conduct for the protagonist that exceed those of the original work. Even many dialogues have no sense of violation when the original characters interact. Once the protagonist opens his mouth, I feel torn apart. You, the anti-Japanese drama Tubalu, suddenly appeared in the Dahe drama. From the author's perspective, if you can complain about the difficulty of adapting the original Bone King in the comment area, you are already discovering the prototype of the contradiction in this article. Essentially, you cannot write a "Japanese protagonist". The Kuro Kuro you write is a Chinese who tries his best to pretend that he is Japanese. Whenever you forcibly change the character and behavior of the protagonist to suit the style of Japanese light novels, readers will stop reading. Solution - Either you really become the "original work party" and create a pure Japanese protagonist to continue your subsequent story, or you can only transform into a starting point fan protagonist. The protagonist of the starting point is not to kill and kill, but to be extremely self-centered about his own personality and desires! The most extreme starting point characters must be the group of cultivators who "go against the will of heaven". Other types of books only slightly weaken this mentality, only "the boss of heaven, the second boss of earth, and the third boss of me" Yes, the mortal protagonist is more modest. Ten Thousand Steps Back and the starting point of the same protagonist, you must also do it "If you are poor, you can be alone, and if you are rich, you can help the world." Only by treating the world of Bone King as the goal of conquest and hegemony can you reach the standard line. Play games with friends to conquer the world. It is interesting to think about it. It depends on the author's choice to put it on the shelves. Do you want to write "Fan-oriented" or "Qidian Business-oriented" I can read either one, but for Fans you have to further improve your day-to-day standards, and for Qidian your follow-up outline and writing layout must be changed to suit the rhythm of Chinese people's reading. In one sentence, "Want a literary path or a financial path?"

After thinking about it, I feel that the plot of Overlord is very fucked up and not very suitable for writing a fanfic. Take Naruto for example. The step-by-step growth process has infinite possibilities in the future and there are countless ways to write it. However, the opening scene of Bone King, Long Aotian, can directly defeat the big boss. The setting is complete and there is no room for improvement. How should I write a fanfic? Every novel must have a final boss, or a final goal, but the Bone King can fight the final boss when he appears, and the original work is about conquering the world. If a fanfic is written based on the Nazarick camp, it will inevitably embark on the road of conquering the world, but that is just one more person. What is the difference from the original work? If you don't conquer the world and you are already invincible, what are you going to do? Are you pretending to be a pig and eating a tiger every day? Once or twice is fine, but if it happens more often, it becomes more annoying. What kind of fields? But farming is not about conquering the world in the end. Otherwise, what can you do with your one-third of an acre of land? Then there is the fan writing method of the anti-Nazarick camp. To be honest, it is really difficult to write anti-Nazarick from a reasonable perspective. How do you develop to defeat Nazarick? Or you could make up a guild that is almost as powerful as the Nazarick guild. Wouldn't that be a different skin for the Nazarick camp, and readers might not buy it. Because the original work itself is Long Aotian, all upgrade routes and settings are locked for you, and you can only have a few development directions. The protagonist who upgrades from a weak character can have countless development directions, but Bone King has given you a clear final look. No matter how you change it, it will all lead to the same path. I want to express how many brain cells have been spent to design a reasonable plot. It is really not easy for the plot of Bone King to be reasonable and brilliant, so... 😄 ps: I don't like the infinite flow of the universe, and there are a lot of second-generation magic modifications that are not in line with the original world view. If these things are really added, I will not complain, it is not just a lot of plots. I like the original plot. In addition, regarding the second design, I made it very clear. I don't like the second design of the magic modification that does not conform to the world view of the original work. Don't have the same level of understanding as this {"NickName":"empty moon","UserId":220631837}. The post has been posted here for a long time. He also thinks that he doesn't like the second design because he cannot make any changes to the original work. This {" NickName":"","UserId":220631837}'s level of understanding is really worrying. I have made it very clear. He can still understand the second design of the magic modification that does not conform to the original world view 🤭 ———————— This is just my complaint, it means nothing, and the last one has no meaning. I have written a Naruto fanfic before, and there are a lot of plot ideas in this story. I thought about it for a long time before I had a rough outline of the outline, but I still haven't finished writing the outline. In addition, I can tolerate those who really put forward opinions, even if it is a negative review, but I will fight against those who bother me due to my own preferences and level of knowledge.

The incredible author went to promote his book under other Bone King novels. I'm really convinced.

It's a very interesting book. Suddenly, a lizard man is awesome, and he describes it very well. Who is she? Is she the heroine? Even being a pet is too nonsense. I felt really uncomfortable watching it. It didn't match the previous ones at all. It was also directly introduced and included psychological descriptions. Disgusting, if you want a pet, can you go find that hamster, even if you create a new pet, even if it is an intelligent creature but not humanoid? Although the book is a good book, my favorability has definitely dropped. In one sentence, it's disgusting, disgusting. No kidding aside, the lizard man plot didn't seem to be very well designed. It felt to me like eating steamed buns with a little yellow alkali in them. It's not that it's inedible, but it could have been more delicious.

Why is Kuro playing alone? The charm of the Bone King novel also has some characters. What about the guardians and the battle maids? Isn't this their daily life better than that white lizard? What's the point of keeping a white lizard as a pet? Is it to highlight the protagonist's superiority to complete the character change later, or to present a bad taste? Writing this will not affect the fun of bringing Soliuxiang or Narbenar or any other maid.

But that's a lizard, its sexual fetish is too weird, and it doesn't have a human form, so it's really disgusting. I know that the vampire prototype is also ugly, but luckily she has a human form to look at. Lizard, isn't it really uncomfortable? Do you really think it's cute? Even though most people in Furikong like furry animals, right? Readers only care about appearance, but authors have many things to consider. Seeing that the male protagonist went out on an adventure, Nana's maid did not take him with him, but the vampire girl did not take him with him. There were so many beautiful girls in the maid group, but he really only took a lizard with him. How much do you love lizards? A bit of a breakdown. The xp differences between people are shown here. Why?

The part about Kerxiu is very strange. I spent several chapters writing about her. You say you want to keep a pet, but you write a copy of it, which makes people think that it will develop in a good way. Then when the favorability was high, he bluntly said, "You are just a pet." In the following chapters, the sense of existence was greatly reduced. It is very unpleasant to see here, and I also feel emotional when I look at the back. It went from being able to tolerate some shortcomings to giving me a reason to continue reading. If you like a person, you can tolerate his shortcomings. If you hate a person, it is useless no matter how many advantages he has. The same applies to books.

The protagonist's so-called dissatisfaction with the Adventurer's Guild is in itself a matter of coquettishness and arrogance! What is the nature of an adventurer group? Aren't they just a group of free and slow mercenaries who don't listen to orders? What is the essence of the Adventurers Guild? It is a service that provides information on employment needs, trying to guide these mercenaries to do things that are beneficial to the public at a macro level, such as invading alien tribes, exterminating monsters near trade routes and villages, defeating bandits and bandits, tracking down criminals in the city, and other commissions. Adventurers are essentially mercenaries, and the union is just a loose alliance, so they can be in harmony with each other, operate normally on a macro level, prevent chaos and destruction, and basically ensure the stability of the union. But this is also the limit that the union can allow under the entire social system! The union is not the government or the army, and its remote-controlled adventurers are not the police and army that enforce orders and prohibitions. The union has no direct control over force, and adventurers are like temporary employees who can turn around and leave at any time. Otherwise, if the trade union is treated as an army and run by the government, the human cost and material cost will be higher than that of a normal army! As for the adventurer mercenaries who are subject to many requirements similar to those of the army, will they harass you? They simply run away, or even transform into thieves to take the exam to cause damage and trouble for you! The mercenary group itself is a product of the Western aristocratic enfeoffment system, and will not appear at all in tightly controlled centralized countries! If you don't believe it, look through Chinese history. Are there any mercenary groups similar to those in the Middle Ages in Europe and Europe? So, without solving the aristocratic enfeoffment system, rashly making drastic changes to the trade union will be a waste of effort and will also cause chaos!

What is this lizard doing? It is said to be a pet, but why do you bring her with you when you go back to the city to collect information? With her, you will first attract attention, and then be discriminated against by the hotel. You just had a fight with the Theocracy. Now if you take this lizard and someone follows the clues and finds the lizard tribe, you may expose more information about Nazarick. Can't you let Nazarick go back and touch it from time to time? If you want to learn fourth-level magic to discuss games and magic in other worlds, you can do it at home.

I feel good so far, but I just want to ask when the protagonist will discover Lao Gu's lack of humanity, and if he can find a way to reverse it. Personally, what I like most about Overload is not the pretentiousness, but the feeling that Lao Gu and NPCs together are like a single father raising his children. The same goes for watching fics. In fact, what I want to watch most is that Empty Nest has a friend to rely on. I envy Lao Gu's simple friendship towards the guild members.

The author has read the Heiluo next door. Heiluo was finally online. Bone King went to set off fireworks in advance and entered the if line. To be honest, the book is very original and should be a great reference for the author.

This subject matter is rare and difficult to write about. Is there a Shen Nong?

The Bone-Writing King suggested not to follow the boat. There is no big change in the plot, but there is an extra person. I'm tired of watching the original plot, so why not change the faction and fight against the old bones, it's still a little fresh

I can't find the starting point. The later part of the plot is quite interesting. It would be nice if there was someone who could fight against the Bone King.

Super Holy Mother is useless, disgusting, and abusive to the Holy Mother. You, the author, did not write well. You, the author, should be insulted, insulted, and punished. (This message rebounds all attacks, and the rebound is permanently effective)

The protagonist is an indigenous purebred Japanese?

The writing is most like Maruyama's Overlord fanfic that I've ever read.

The Long Aotian plot of Overlord is really difficult to write with the Bone King in the same camp. The author can choose to know the plot and travel through the indigenous people at the beginning, and then get a game panel, gain power from other worlds, and learn about the plots of other worlds. This kind of writing is more long-term.

If you want to write about a good person, you should write about Taqimi, and write about He Luo and still be a good person. Will a person who has lived a life worse than Momonga and died suddenly suddenly become a good person in another world?

I feel that the author's writing style is okay. Among the Bone King novels, this is probably the only one that is good-looking. The other novels are not innovative at all. As for the fan novel "Greeting to the King", I read it and found it to be average. The pace is too slow, but the results are much better than this one.

Probably preparing a new work 🙂

Why did it stop updating? What happened?

The author is so cruel. When you post an ad, don't you look at the person you post it to? 😓 Sent it to me six times in a row.

Actually, I just want to ask about this book, eunuch? Whether it looks good or not, I don't know. I read a little bit of it and it was quite interesting. I put it on my bookshelf and wanted to wait for the million words to read again. How could he die after being raised and raised? This book has not been updated for almost five months. Does the author still update? Or are you talking about opening a small account and writing a new book?

I thought it was pretty good when I first started reading it. It had the flavor of a light novel. Why did I cut it?

How to choose Hei Luo Hei Luo, the shape is worrying, the author's aesthetics cannot agree with it