Zhutian: Can You Stop Awakening the System? !

The idea is great, but the writing skills are poor. As mentioned below, the organizational setting is too stupid and there is no convincing internal logic at all. This book feels like it has been revised countless times It feels like... The first draft wants to set the protagonist as an ordinary person who cannot own the system in the "universal system" world view Then it was set so that the system organization staff must be awakened Finally, it felt that it was not possible and a necessary driver of [2 million mortgage] was added Finally, in order to explain why the protagonist destroyed the system, a layer of organizational "veteran" buff was added. In the end, I traveled to a different world again because of the reason that the system gave me "soul travel, not meat skewers". Too complicated Then (I really don't want to use this word, but there are too many places to jump) In a different world, the classic "villain brother" face-jumping plot is triggered during the dialogue with the system Throwing setting: The purpose of the organization is: to send employees to a different world to obtain special features that can only be obtained by completing tasks. Special supernatural things, the purpose is temporarily unknown Setting aside: The system was born from the wishes of all creatures in the world, with the purpose of fulfilling wishes, and is composed of concrete wishes and beliefs Return to reality and submit tasks Continue to explain the harsh environment of the organization through the introduction of new characters, with a monthly salary of 2,000,007, strengthening The dilemma faced by the protagonist I couldn't stand it after that, because there is no main line here I don't know whether the author can't write, or he is filtering the stream of consciousness in the imagination, and filtering the daily life without main line in the stream of consciousness to accurately target the readers …… —————— ——Dividing line—————————— Summary: A new author who has his own ideas but no commercial writing skills wants to use novel ideas and ideas to explain to readers the world under his own subjective view Poisonous weed or fairy grass? The audience field is in a delicate situation. Readers who like this genre can experience the charm of nurturing authors ——————Dividing line—————————— About creative content; It was not until the third chapter that the exciting theme and core selling point of this book were revealed: Zhutianliu's "What would you do if you were allowed to time travel into the work"; and the unreasonable fragments in the classic online articles that complained about The core is: the connection between the prototype world of the novel in the mind and the re-edited magic modification product Department However, the author was too eager to throw away the setting and wrote too stream of consciousness Sincerely speaking, one of the basic demands of the diamond chapter has indeed been achieved-attracting readers' attention But the reader retention rate was not considered, thinking that attracting readers' attention is enough This can be seen from quoting and annotating fragments of the original work Because this content does not have a substantial amount of helpful information, additional elaboration must be made Another point is that the eagerness to show seemingly novel settings leads to overly ambitious goals, making the protagonist's drive hollow and ineffective

The organizational setting is too stupid. With only a few people who can save the world, the protagonist can still have a mortgage of 2 million. It's too toxic.

I didn't see joy and comedy, I saw a group of people in the ink stains, going through the beatings of life.

I originally thought that the dish was just made into a paste, and I had to chew it slowly and taste it carefully, but it turned out that the taste was too disgusting. When I spit it out, I found incomplete digestion, indigestible pepper peels, etc. I rinsed my mouth with a livid face and reminded others that it was really shit. I hope everyone knows 😭

This organization is too stupid. I owe your mother money, right?

6. There is really such a novel. I am a generalissimo in a foreign country and then become a social beast after returning to my country. I admire it.

It's like a crazy play written by a fool. Not a genius ahead of his time. But it is the madness and stupidity of being autistic towards others. More dreamy than children playing, more crazy than idiots talking nonsense, and more imbecile than mediocrity. What you see is not the greatness that spans the present into the future. It's just dirt worse than the mud on the roadside. Heed the advice and stop here, latecomer. This is not an ordinary person, so one can observe and understand it.

The author is slowly screening readers and looking for a user group that suits him

Since the details of the writing are fine, let me tell you a trick to make it more enjoyable. Your protagonist's actions need to have an audience, otherwise it will be a one-man show. The teammate cannot do it because he is too familiar with it, and he is just a tool to talk about settings. The plot of Team Rocket's appearance is good, and you can choose to continue to interact with popular characters or Pokémon.

As long as you don't use your brain, it's fun

The idea is very novel, but the plot is not exciting and there is no sense of immersion.

It's great for people like me who have more imagination than writing skills.

The plot of Pokémon and O God is really boring

The ideas are good, but the writing is too bland and the writing style needs to be improved. Just use this as a training exercise. Looking forward to the author's next book.

Well... I don't know how to describe it. It has a lot of imagination and new themes. The only problem is that it is not exciting enough. 🙂 There are too few substitution objects and it is not attractive to general readers.

Let me take a look. I don't believe it. We have never tasted any poison...

Kneel down and beg you (thump)