Douluo Starts with a Spear

Don't engage in this kind of plot where you are overly sad after the death of your loved one. It seemed too depressing. The life of raising a family is depressing enough. Reading novels still has this depressing plot. Who can bear this?

The author's fifth chapter states that modern society and modern thought will not teach the protagonist to pick fruits in other people's orchards without paying. This is a zero-dollar purchase. In a small town in the north of Douluo Continent, the protagonist is not taught to go to other people's orchards to pick fruits! Can orchards and wild fruit trees look the same? There is no explanation for this, modern thinking cannot explain this, this plot is really bad, and it is not like the first day when the family has a mine and an orchard. This place is quite poisonous.

It looks pretty good now, but I can't accept your suggestion that Huo be changed into a female.

It is recommended to make a major change. The first chapter is very attractive to me because I quite like the panel and I am the audience. Then he started stretching his hips. Dou Er has two ways of writing, focusing on oneself and triggering revolution. If you don't want revolution, don't describe too much suffering and complain about Tang San. It will affect the perception, and most of them are meaningless complaints. Especially when your plug-in settings are very complicated, and when I don't even understand the information about the plug-in, I suddenly started to feel pity for others. Its own ability deserves a chapter or two to advance in detail to let readers know what progress it has made. Instead of a mess of things piled together. It can only be said that it is stupid to suppress the combat power. If you have no other way, find a way. There are more solutions. Don't stick to one solution: grass jelly, which looks stupid and awkward. Generally speaking, I haven't understood how to use the plug-in, so I was persuaded to give up by your Zhengjian 2 setting. Who can bear half of a chapter? If you are a novice, you should add less insignificant things, unless it is foreshadowing later.

How many chapters do you plan to have before you can repair the protagonist's martial arts flaw, and avoid any misunderstandings with the heroine? Are you annoyed? It's been a few years now, and you still want to create that old-fashioned plot. Your writing is not good enough to make people feel stomachache and have to read it. Do you know that you don't have the ability?

Dai Mubai First soul skill: White Tiger Protective Barrier (attack, defense, strength increased by 50% and an additional shield added) Second soul skill: White Tiger Fierce Light Wave (emits white light waves to attack) Third Soul Skill: White Tiger Vajra Transformation (Attack, defense, strength, and resistance in one round are enhanced by 100%) Fourth Soul Skill: White Tiger Meteor Shower (Sends out countless fist-sized golden light balls to attack) Fifth Soul Skill: White Tiger Demon God Transformation (Attack, defense, and strength are enhanced by 150%) Sixth Soul Skill: White Tiger Destruction Kill (emits golden light that crosses to form the word "kill" to attack) Seventh Soul Skill : White Tiger True Form (transforms into a huge white tiger, attack, defense, and strength increased by 300%) As for the third soul skill, no one can surpass it. I have also seen that no one who has lived in ten thousand years, one hundred thousand years, or one million years is as strong as this one thousand years.

Using DNF weapons, the fan song of Kensan is used for the introduction.

If you can't break through level 30, you will have to level up hard.

Suppressing combat effectiveness is the most criticized approach. You have to be stuck at level 30, and then you have to use grass jelly to solve this problem.

The whole article is about one thing and another. I read the comments below and they all asked you to change them. Don't you want to change them? Why don't you write a car? A watermelon? If you appear less often, forget it. If you appear frequently, you won't change it. When you carry a gun, it's easy to think of a machine gun. If you appear once or twice, forget it. If you appear frequently, one will appear two or three times on average. No matter how good your article is, you still have to send it

The novel is a bit disgusting. I don't know why there are so many monthly tickets.

Feeling good now, come on author^ω^

Come on, I haven't seen a good DNF article in a long time. Don't be a eunuch. As long as the quality of this article is kept, I will definitely insist on reading it.

I came in after reading the name and originally thought the gun was a sniper rifle or something.

After reading Chapter 15, the first question, from the title to the plot, is full of bad words. I very much doubt that the author's input method has the word "pole" Secondly, the plot of the first acquaintance with the heroine, using modern thinking to explain why the protagonist picks, there are two possibilities, one is that the author thinks it is normal to steal sheep in modern times, the other is that petty theft does not lead to death, but it is difficult to explain both. 1. Modern theft is also a crime, although it is only a small problem, but if you are caught, you will not feel that you are right. 2. The protagonist has been living there for six years The third one is that I don't understand what the protagonist is doing at all. The person who adopted him is dying of old age. The protagonist's death can be saved, but there is no sense of urgency at all. It's okay to cultivate a relationship with the eldest lady. Before the fight, make two jokes. Are you writing a funny style? Then why write such a background? Can you make me laugh? It's too frivolous, and because I was too bored, I came into contact with the Soul Guidance Device and thought about making a mobile phone. I really want to become an immortal and don't forget to play with mobile phones. What will you play with after you make it? No software, no users