Taking Stock of the Famous Scenes of Iron Collapse, Starting with Placer Gold

I feel like the author is a little biased against Sunday. His approach is indeed inappropriate, but in fact the protagonist group did not bring a real solution. And I don't think all the characters are against Sunday. I think the characters' views on the idea of ​​Sunday should be multi-faceted. What you wrote is too one-sided. One or two can oppose all aspects of the language, and others can agree with some and oppose some. I know that the characters you wrote were opposed to part of it, but there are too many objections. It would be much better to add a little bit of approval. (Just some of my personal opinions. I want to discuss it. If you don't like it, don't criticize it. If you don't want to watch it, you just want to scold me. If there are people who want to go to the sewers and don't disgust me, please don't comment on it.)

I paid for it after only 23 chapters, it's really ugly. It's written like a running account. I suggest you learn from the people next door to the cat and cat's Collapse of the Three Stars.

Do it faster, do it faster

I feel like it can be changed to a reveal after the event, otherwise it will affect the world line. The more the world line changes, the harder it will be for you to write later. Unless you are rushing to finish it quickly, as long as you finish it quickly enough, you are not afraid of being slapped in the face by the game. Some of them will not have a great impact on the plot. Yes, interviews and second creations can be released in advance like the most popular book with more than 200 chapters, first of all, like Werewolf, the reveal changes the subsequent plot. It is not recommended that you reveal the secret so quickly, and you don't know how mhy plans to write in the future.

Asking for leave? Not today?