The Mysterious Resurrection and the Creepy Pact

That's not to say that you can't write dual protagonists or group portraits, but the most important point in online articles is the sense of substitution. You haven't handled it well at all. Who will your two male protagonist readers be? The time traveler doesn't have much of a role to play, so the image is not three-dimensional enough. The setting of the sister who is not related by blood to the aborigines is bloody/outdated. The introduction of Golden Finger is not detailed, and the sense of satisfaction is not obvious, resulting in a weak sense of substitution. All in all, with your writing power, you cannot control this kind of writing.

Right Who is the protagonist? Not used to it

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