The Eighteenth Layer of Night

Wasn't the background explained before? The plot is so abrupt, without any foreshadowing of the protagonist's life background, and it goes directly into the domineering searching mode as if he knows the truth. The protagonist's speech feels so awkward, a bit like the female channel boss ten years ago: Remember, you only have ten minutes, why do you think..., The imperative tone + condescending attitude, are you trying to create a strong image for the protagonist? 🙂

To be honest, if the trilogy "Underworld Returns to the World" is completed, the book "Underworld Returns to the World" alone will be enough for you to rival the Third Young Master of the Tang Family. Your world is very large and coherent, including the relay in the dark blood age, the strangeness of the underworld returning to the world, and the frivolity of Yan Qing in Jiuhuang. My suggestion is to stop the book you are currently reading and reorganize a novel about Yan Qing. Make a quick buck first and then pursue your dream. Yan Qing's death was really too hasty. He deserves a better start over!

Let's talk about your new book. I read a few chapters of Your Underworld before and I saved it. I hope you can improve your writing skills after finishing Underworld. Today I saw it showed that you have opened a new book, so I took a look. Just reading the introduction made me think that the next Underworld has returned to the world, and my writing ability has not improved at all. I think the themes of the two books are very good (many people thought in their hearts that they could form a perfect world order when they were young), but now those who read books and have the ability to consume have grown up. Most people know that they are not perfect people, the world is not perfect, and tolerance cannot define where this person should go based on good and evil. The world just needs balance and stability. The subject matter is very good, but if the order problem is not changed, your book cannot be improved. It can only be read as an elementary school student's composition. 9 Out of 10 people will leave after reading a few chapters, and the remaining one will not remember your book after reading it, because it does not provide much emotional value to the readers. It is cliche. Write more about real human nature. If a person is judged by eternal good and evil, then the hell is probably full of evil ghosts in these thousands of years. How many people like Hai Rui are there?

Come on! I hope Yi Zi can write a good story this time, and I also hope that Yi Zi can finish Jiu Huang when he has time.

There are very few people writing about this genre on the Internet, so the author can continue to dig deeper.

Find a way to push it. Even if Yan Qing takes out your book and writes it again, it will be a disgrace to everything.

If you write well, you will probably be a master by now. You won't be a level 4 author. The author is too impetuous.

It's quite disappointing. I personally feel it's far less beautiful than Return to Earth from Hell.

Why does the protagonist talk so much trash? Just do it directly. If you don't accept it, do it. He talks too much.

If the author changed the background to Soul Ferry, the results would definitely be better than this, and it would be easier to write, because I have read a book about Soul Ferry with originality. The writing is not as good as the author, but the results are not bad. I can subscribe to a thousand subscriptions every month to eat.