Prehistoric: the Emperor Came to Ziwei and Asked About Eternity

Read this and comment. The advantages are there, the creativity and settings are okay The disadvantages are that the writing style is immature, the language description is too wordy, and it does not conform to the setting of Honghuang Wen, such as the dialogue between ancestor Hongjun and ancestor Qiankun, such descriptions as "We have worked hard, made progress, how are we doing", there is a sense of tearing, and readers cannot take it in at all. One paragraph reads, "Finally a breakthrough" Su Xing... Like this The description is very problematic. You are giving it to the readers. From the context, it is better to write a breakthrough vision. The implication is that it is better to write the prehistoric prose in a slightly similar way to ancient prose. For example, you can write "we" as "I" and "you" as you, etc. For details, you can look at what other authors have written, but don't write something too ancient. Don't make it like the Water Margin. Look at other prehistoric prose authors. So far I have only seen one idea, and your writing style is too good to attract me!

It's really bad to take things seriously and take your time and insist on engaging in a crisis. It's directly poisonous.

He's watery, he's a weakling, and he still has less fighting power.

The protagonist doesn't know what he wants to express. Seeking the Tao doesn't feel like seeking the Tao, and discussing the Tao doesn't feel like discussing the Tao. It gives me the feeling that the protagonist is licking those who are stronger than the protagonist.

Is there a female protagonist? If so, who is it?

50 Chapters, 110,000 words. There are 48 chapters and more than 10 words in total. This book is doomed. Gone

After reading Chapter 22, I really can't stand it anymore. I'm so weak that I can't even talk about it. I'm still a weakling. The first-generation innate actually has the same combat power as Ryuko 🤔 and is polite when he returns to his own territory and accepts his subordinates. I'm really speechless. Is this the legendary Mouth Escape? The current starting point is that everything can be recommended, and it is getting more and more rubbish. Book friends in the future should be cautious when entering the trap.

Why do you want to set up your transformation so early? Also this Taoist friend and that Taoist friend are jumping around

The protagonist plays the role of a good guy. I don't know what he wants to express?

For junior high school student composition level, I suggest moving bricks into a factory and forget about it.

If you practice the star formation well, take over the 365 stars under your management and manage them well, and create 365 Da Luo Jinxian, most people will not dare to fight you. Don't go around causing trouble. You must have meritorious deeds after preaching for thousands of years. Why are you joining the Dragon Clan? The path is unclear. The prehistoric world is huge. If you take care of yourself, the sky will be the biggest. Every planet is a small prehistoric world, a small world.

If you don't have enough strength, you still have to wander around. Can you be obscene and develop?

They all revolve around the primitive world and do not explore the chaos. They all served as stepping stones for Pangu.

Otherwise, why are the ancestral witches and the innate saints all in weird shapes and not in human form?

The writing style is too immature, and don't write in the third person, it's too dramatic. And can you please stop adding to the protagonist's self-indulgence? It's so silly.

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down😁

,,, I don't know how to cut anymore. I've become a eunuch.

,,, I'm so good at writing, why did I stop? I'm still waiting for the update, so I voted for it for two months at once.

Don't play around, please update. It doesn't matter. You can show it to me alone. I'll give you a monthly pass.

Sometimes Su Xing is too subtle, which really makes people drama