Run Away! This Is Not Fairyland

I hate faith, willpower, incense, and systems the most.

I am just making some brief suggestions, which may be too idealistic. If there are any ideas that offend the author or other readers, just pretend that I didn't say them. I just want to make some relevant suggestions, which are just my insights from reading so many books. If it offends me, there's nothing I can do about it. (Stacked Armor/Dog Head) In fact, if an article like yours starts with a lot of imagination, if it is to be written in a serious way, it requires good writing skills. It's easy for people to find fault with you, and I feel that your writing is completely close to the cool novel. After all, if you write the cool novel, everyone will know that you don't need to use your brain to read the novel. Furthermore, your Ascension Body is already considered too small, and it feels like it's a bit of a lock on the protagonist's health. You also like to write this kind of tragedy, and if you write in this style, you'll have already died somewhere. Still being so promiscuous makes the protagonist look a bit stupid. I personally recommend writing a follow-up, or the protagonist knows that he's awesome and doesn't care much about the people around him, and then knows that the higher-ups can't do anything to him, so it's okay for him to be a little promiscuous. After all, everyone knows that he is open. If I still write in your style, the protagonist should be more emotional. At least I can see a change in him along the way, such as paying more attention to the impact of what happened, and the idea of ​​what I can do when I come back. Although I don't understand it, I am just making a suggestion. Yeah, and although I didn't read much, I just saw where the Feixuemen was sent. Your way of writing always makes me feel like I can see everything at a glance. I wonder if you have any plans to write a long novel? I wonder how you authors make money? But I personally think that if you write it like this and it is on the shelves, it will probably be the same as many of the more mediocre works. By the middle and later stages, no one will watch it at all. If it is even close to reaching that time, no one will be around after maybe four or five hundred chapters. Or, as long as you authors are on the shelves and writing, you will be charged. In that case, just pretend that I didn't say anything. After all, it's just what matters. If no one sees it after you put it on the shelf, there will be no charge. I personally suggest that you don't write this novel so long. After all, if you write it for so long, no one will read it, you don't have much money, and you are wasting your time and energy trying to come up with some simple plot. I feel that it is short and concise, and sometimes it is quite important. It must be completed when necessary. Conan is the most classic case. I always thought it looked so good in the past, but later it turned into something stupid. And I have read a lot of authors who are relatively short and concise. Most of their subsequent books are still read by some people, and some book fans may appear because of this. And at the moment, I feel that your book is just a strange idea, but many people have thought about similar ideas like yours. So I feel like I really can't write anything that's eye-catching. Just a small suggestion, do you want to have a harem? (Don't tell me you don't want to do it. At least there are two women licking you in front of you, including a teacher's wife.) If you want to do it, I feel so sad. According to your somewhat serious style. It's easy for you to end up with Brother Cheng. If you want to start a harem, you can try the writing style of Leziwen. Although I don't know if you can still transform? The following is a personal complaint, which contains a lot of nonsense. If the author feels uncomfortable, don't read it. I still suggest that the process should not be so bleak. After all, to be honest, it feels like there is no foreshadowing. When the disciple dies, it feels like he is just an NPC. There is no feeling, and there are no ups and downs. When I see it, the reader has the same feeling: Oh, now this person is dead. Oh, the author said Dzogchen, maybe he is not dead. I always feel that a person is dead, not dead and does not exist, these three states. Basically there is no difference. There was no sense of sadness when he died, because there was no foreshadowing at all, and the characters were not fleshed out enough. Anyway, there was a young disciple and a formal disciple in front of him. I feel like you are just a love-minded licker (the words may be a bit ugly). Even if you insert a male disciple in the middle, I may not think that you want to have a harem. Ah, of course, if a male disciple is added later, then I will treat it as fart. Anyway, just one sentence, it feels like if something happens to someone, it's okay, it doesn't make any sense. (Because everyone knows it's okay, the author says Dzogchen) Well, author, I think you may think I'm farting. Because you may think that characters need to go through tempering and growth, so you give them some experiences and tribulations. It's normal, but it's also difficult to stretch. After all, everyone praised the writing style and plot of the book "Alive". But even though he wrote it so well, everyone still found it uncomfortable to read. Because that is a book written by suffering, and no one is willing to see those ugly scenes. And you even agreed in advance that it would be a happy ending. I don't even know why you let the character temporarily receive a lunch box? Maybe I said that there is no value after so many characters die, which is a bit nonsense. It can be regarded as my own complaint. Anyway, I at least feel that people can't die like this. They appear just to exit. Somewhat too funny. You really sent it within a few chapters, and the way you exited was somewhat funny. I only watched the exit of the first two disciples, but it was still hard to jump. Basically, it is to describe the origin of this person and how to recruit him as a disciple. Then he pretends to be cool in front of his former disciples, and then gets out of the current predicament. Then it's ready, disciples can send it. It's like the helicopter is ready to land safely. Lao Da suddenly started elbowing the pilot. (End of complaint) The author, if you don't intend to write this book as a cool or mindless article, the pace is a bit too fast, so there is no feeling. Can we slow down the pace appropriately and let the female disciples send less? Although I am still looking back, I feel like you will still write like this.

Not a buddy? Where did you copy the settings? This book really has nothing but setting! The protagonist's IQ doesn't have the character of an ascended person at all. Wouldn't he have no cultivation after escaping? Kill all the disciples, right? Dude, your quality is really bad. Your grades speak for themselves. The first three chapters and the rest were written by two people! It's just too shoddy to be honest.

The introduction is full of loopholes. Ascension is not the exclusive domain of the protagonist. There have always been people who have ascended for thousands of years. One time they fly, there is no news, and the other time they fly silently. How come people in the world of immortality are not worried and suspicious. The protagonist can escape from capture and return to the world of immortality, why can't others throughout the ages? How can the truth of this fairy world be hidden from the master?

The subject matter is not fresh enough, but if the plot is exciting, the characterization is unique, and you add a little innovation of your own, it can still become a hit.

After reading the introduction, there is a female protagonist in this weird world? Still having a relationship? Free

The writing method of this thing is relatively good, but the problem is that this system will basically collapse, and it will most likely be unfinished after it is put on the shelves. With the track system, funny writing, and nervous protagonist, unless the author is a small account, it will definitely be unfinished.

The twist is not very exciting and the progression is a bit stiff Because I am not the author, I can't see the details I feel that the protagonist is also a thousand-year-old demon after all, is he too young at heart?

Just wait for this kind of book to be finished, or read it when the finale is over. Just read three chapters, the second chapter, any chapter in the middle, the penultimate chapter. Because the first and last pictures are nonsense and useless, and the middle picture is optional. Just read the second and penultimate chapters.

I have read more than a dozen chapters. Although the weird cultivating immortality is a setting that many people are writing about, the author's writing is good and fluent.

On the way to find his female apprentice, he said that he should be low-key to collect his will power; then he pretended to be a pig in front of a bunch of domain kings to eat the tiger, and continued to pretend to be a pig after eating 😰

Shennong, I won't say much after reading it. The comments section is full of good reviews. You know what I mean.

The character of the protagonist is poorly developed. If you want to write a long novel, the character of the protagonist must be likeable. My eyes lit up. The protagonist of this article gave me the impression that IQ is extremely low and very unlikable.

Author, are you still in the period of the second disease of hot-blooded disease? I don't mean it in a derogatory way. It is the three views of the protagonist. Many of the protagonists who are normal cultivators are fine. And you can feel the vitality in your words.

That's it again. The protagonist is low-key. Great reputation. Not many people know him. You can't beat it if you go to the fairy world. You can beat it if you come back and collect faith. Too low quality

Write too fast, you write one chapter of what others have written for ten chapters The feeling cannot be established, you are too fast Men cannot be fast, really And the female supporting characters all have no brains to love the male protagonist, the image is too thin The male protagonist has no brains to understand all the love and emotions The author may not have the concept of sister, some female supporting characters are suitable to be sisters instead of pure racy, you will not have feelings for your sister. The plot progresses too fast and the characters are too two-dimensional Many descriptions are superficial. There is no slightly detailed description and filling, just like a simple drawing. I can tell that it will be good after being filled in properly, but at the moment it is obviously just a hasty work.

After reading chapter forty-five, I can't stand it anymore. Currently, there are four or five people related to the protagonist, and they are all women. Two people died inexplicably. A girl from the demon tribe who gave guidance before ascending shouted for the protagonist to live, and a disciple of the protagonist wanted to be the protagonist's wife before he died.

That bullshit happy ending has killed so many disciples

If the protagonist of the novel chooses to change the world when traveling through time, then powerful supernatural plug-ins are a must. Of course, choosing to invest in a good pregnancy, choose to eat and drink, follow the general trend of the times, be a speculator and a slave, or be an ordinary citizen in the so-called peaceful and prosperous times, without thinking about changing history. This kind of choice does not require any powerful extraordinary plug-ins. There are no powerful plug-ins to change the world. Either the author's writing style and conception are excellent, as there are some in ancient texts, or he is trying to outwit the opponent or the reader. Extraordinary cheat cheats tell readers clearly that the reason why the protagonist is awesome and superior is because of a clear reason. Because the protagonist is a superman, they are not competing for the same ecological niche at all. 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The last person who told me about happy ending was Beng 2

After watching the beginning, if I keep this intensity, I think it will become popular.

If you want to test the water in the new book issue, you need a lot of reading. I hope everyone will scroll to the last page and increase reading. The author kneels down for everyone 😭. As long as it can be steadily put on the shelves, I will update it by 10,000 times a day!

When I saw Crossing the Tribulation, I knew I was going to fail. It was a bit cliche.

It's a pity. The subject matter and ideas are very innovative, but the writing style and plot are really annoying.

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update it.

You don't have to cultivate, just die like the mortals mentioned in the article. By the way, you may not hit anyone among mortals, so be careful.

Nice looking🤭🤭🤭

I saw two people died in Chapter 41, and you said you would come back to save them, but you didn't explain how to save them. It's so desperate.

The author has not updated for two or three days. When will it be updated? Want to see

The writing is good, if you like it I will update it soon.