Hopeful Redemption

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Bai Xiaoli

The student party generates electricity for love, the update is slow, please understand

When I was tired of coding, my assistant pushed it to me. I had breakfast and read part of it, and now I see that I am looking for it in a secret way.                                                                                                                                                                                                                                but I don't really like to comment too much because I am also a novice myself. What I am talking about is that I found that the author has some of the same problems as me. (And I decided to write it after seeing the author saying that he wanted to see comments. There is no intention to criticize) I feel that, in my personal opinion, it is quite good. It is relatively smooth to read and I can understand the plot I want to write. It is very good that the student party can update it with interest. The praises from everyone in the comment area are recognition of you. It's just that some of them feel like my bad habit of writing articles. The plot is a bit flat, and there are too many details irrelevant to the plot. This is also the problem when I write my own article. In order to solve this problem, I am still learning to put the protagonist in more conflicts. Not only the superficial difficulty can be directly told to the reader, but also the contradiction that the reader knows but the protagonist does not know; the author knows the contradiction that the reader and the protagonist do not know. Then, as for the dialogue, there are some invalid dialogues. It is best to try to allow the readers to obtain information in the dialogues. Others that cannot emphasize the character of the protagonist or advance the plot or explain the background can be skipped. When I saw the restart chapter, I scrolled for a long time and it was filled with conversations between several people, and the information given was not very much. (Because the amount of information is not enough, readers will say you are stupid, which will ruin your reputation in the future and affect your pursuit of studies, unless you are very talented or very good at studying) I think you are very powerful. Really, you are a student party, you update weekly, you are not signed and there are not many people watching. It is great that you can insist on doing your own thing. If you have this determination, you will succeed in whatever you do. I believe you can become the author in your own mind. (Again, I am also a newbie. What I say only represents my own immature views based on my own reading. My writing also has this problem. I am not even able to grasp the degree of describing abstract protagonists, which often makes me very embarrassed.) Come on!

The writing is pretty good, keep up the good work 🙂

Friends, I am Ziwei Bo Yunsou. I just followed you. Remember to read together.

The writing style is very comfortable to read. Expect(*°∀°)=3. Thank you for your help, otherwise I wouldn't be able to see it. ———— Speaking of which, I have written this type of thing before, but unfortunately I lost it when I wrote it in my notebook. Writing so many words is already very impressive. ———— Finally, encourage each other.

We are both fallen people at the end of the world, why should we have known each other before meeting each other😭😭

The writing is so good, but I haven't signed a contract yet 😰

Author, your writing is good. I read your novel, and it made me optimize and correct some shortcomings in my own novel. I came here to express my gratitude to you. Does the author need recommendation votes? Then I will give you a recommendation ticket every day whenever I have time. By the way, I want to ask more, the author, are you a high school student or a college student?