If You Don't Work Hard at Cultivating Immortals, You Can Be Brothers in the Soul-Calling Banner.

It's too easy to cultivate this Golden Core Yuanying. In this shitty academy, every disciple who starts training has a Yuanying. According to the Yuanying Shouyuan, isn't it everywhere? And the title of Number One Scholar is too stupid. Tiger also has something like this, and he also has the sixth realm.

Can anyone read this special introduction? ?

I just spent 2 points to ask why the fan limit was set with only 120,000 words... Speaking of which, the author wants to learn from the Xuan

I can't compare with Tushanjun next door. I don't even see any ability.

Personal reading experience. The characterization is very simple, and the dialogue is like an assembly line. After reading more than a dozen chapters and looking at the chapter titles, the author himself also discovered that there was a problem with the rhythm. The point is not to solve the problem. Instead, the protagonist cultivates Jie Li for revenge. So many chapters have been written about things that can be explained in a few sentences. A lot of nonsense, and then all the characters created at the beginning are finished. There is no problem in deleting the paragraph in the middle that explains the establishment of family harmony. In the end, the important role of Xie Li is not clear. The character design is that stereotypical, template NPC feeling. Although I haven't seen much of it, I'm a little confused about the protagonist's character. The protagonist said earlier that he didn't want to get involved in the matter of solving the problem. At most, a few words. So I don't accept it and become my disciple. But at the critical moment, the protagonist still consumes his soul to help Jie Li. It feels both self-serving and selfless. One more thing, in the first dozen photos, you focus on portraying family harmony on your resume. However, there is very little communication between the protagonist and the established emotions. The protagonist's help in helping Jie Li seems to be motivated (without the bond of master)

Let me give the author an idea. In fact, changing the banner owner does not necessarily require the death of the banner owner. For example, it is lost, or the protagonist voluntarily terminates the contract and changes the map. In the later stages of writing, even each banner master can return, and even fight side by side to fight bosses or enemies. Referring to the novels of the great writer Goose Shi Lao Wu, he even put the protagonists of his first two books into the new book, fighting side by side with the current protagonist as brothers. Wouldn't it be more interesting that way? It's cliché to write that the current banner master will be replaced by a new banner master. Who will read it? With your eyes closed, you can think of different plots. Of course, the author has his own ideas. I'm just giving it a reference. If you don't like it, just delete my comment.

The plot is quite smooth, but the character of the protagonist is not likable, and the uninteresting protagonist cannot stir up the readers' emotions.

What a soul-summoning episode, it's obviously the Human Emperor episode.

There is no priority. Who is the protagonist? It's not interesting.

If you don't work hard at updating, you will be brothers on the assembly line.

I can't tell the priorities of this book (author, can you tell the priorities?). Is Jie Li the protagonist or Meng Ke is the protagonist. The protagonist is like a transparent person. It seems like Battle Through the Sky has changed its skin, either directly letting Xie Li be the protagonist, or portraying Meng Ke more. I don't even know what I'm looking at

No, brother, listen to me, you can't control the male beau, replace it with your sister

At present, there are no major problems, but there is nothing outstanding. It is still acceptable. Let's wait for it to work harder. The current rhythm is too mediocre.

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Just like the title, the brothers are cute, and the two-part building is a perfect match!

Many, many years later— Are you sure? Damn it. Then everyone who failed to win died after beating them, and the protagonist was beaten into pieces and returned to the lower world. Tiandao: Why is it you again (Heaven's Chosen Tool Man)

As the title goes, please read it, collect it, vote for it! ! ! Thank you Yanzu and Yu Yan!

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