Star Martial Era: Beginning with Slaying Demons

There is a problem with the opening rhythm. The three golden chapters go straight to the fight without explaining the background. The first ten chapters are all about fighting in the village. There is something obviously wrong here. Don't choose a cheat system, choose a subtle and simple one. Old readers will run away when they see the system. The most terrible thing is that your book does not have a "feeling of pleasure". It is very terrible that there is no sense of pleasure in writing exciting articles. Even if you are Gou, people are very happy when they are Gou. Your book is all about fighting but there is no sense of pleasure at all. It shows that there is a problem with your rhythm. You can write novels but do not understand the logic of online writing. The advantage is that the writing style is natural and smooth. If you study it carefully and the rhythm is refreshing, you should get good results if you reopen the book again. To put it bluntly, when the author can clearly describe the protagonist's pretense, he will be successful.

Coming from PTT. I haven't read a book for a long time, and I almost forgot my account number. Additional and subtractive will give you the remaining coins as support. I just saw the latest chapter today, let me share my thoughts. The shortcomings come first. The beginning is a bit cliche, the writing is also rather restrained, and it is difficult for people to follow it immediately. In addition, the homogeneous title is buried in a bunch of demon-slaying novels, which is not very attractive. I suggest changing the title. Supplementary advantages, the character's personality is very clear, especially the supporting role, Wang Hu becomes more and more likable the more I read it. After spending the first few chapters, I can clearly feel that the author is getting more and more relaxed as he writes. The plot is smooth and silky, and the characters are not broken. It feels like a lot of things are being superimposed on the protagonist. The world view feels like there is no need to change the map and let the protagonist run around. I don't know how it will explode in the end. Finally, let me give you a good point. At first, the system was a little too deliberate, and the upgrade text was not very good. But I can feel that the author is gradually diluting the system deliberately. A certain chapter directly reverses the plot, I can't say whether it's good or bad, it depends on how it is written later... As I said before, let's change the title of the book! I will catch up if I have time before going to bed, come on, author 🌹

Congratulations to the author on the successful signing! Recommended cool article! I like the plot where the protagonist's IQ is online and he still pretends to be a hero after time travel~ Worth recommending!

I heard that fantasy reading was recommended for the 20th reading last week, so I came here to ask for reading. If you have time, the book lovers can help me click to the last chapter. 😭 The little boy knelt down and thanked him. 🙏

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Please read the new book! The author works hard to update every day, I hope you can turn to the last page. If you like it, don't keep the book 🥺 If you don't like it, see you in the next book 😭

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I will still read it later After all, it is a new book by a newcomer, and it does have flaws. The narrative is not particularly smooth, the perspective is a bit jumpy, and some things are not fully explained. The readers need to make up their own minds. There is also relatively little psychological activity in the characters, so sometimes the changes in the characters' emotions seem a bit abrupt. But the shortcomings do not hide the good points. The book still has merits. The details are hard work. The more you write in the future, you will naturally make progress and improvement. What is more important is to have this framework of ideas and follow this idea. There is nothing wrong with it. The current pace is a bit fast, but as a refreshing article, it must be fast! If it is too slow, slowing down the protagonist's upgrade speed and then turning to a horizontal narrative, this will further discourage readers from following the story. All in all, the author keeps it up, come on! 🙂

As I thought, the author wanted to write about the universe from the beginning, but he didn't expect it to be so soon. It becomes science fiction starting from Chapter 116, and the connection is not abrupt at all. For newcomers, don't doubt that you can fully understand it starting from 116. Suggest that the author just re-open a new book about science fiction or martial arts? Stop writing fantasy😠

The writing is getting better and better, the plot is really a flow, I look forward to the follow-up development.